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veggieman001 wrote:

possibly wrote:

Why do you have to be so good at writing as well, veggie?

I steal others' powers.

:O

veggieman001 wrote:

NeilWest wrote:

I'll save my first thoughts of the title for 4chan.

Um… okay?

What'd you think of the story?

I thought it was well written and you could become a novel writer.

Just use less inuendo-y titles.

It's very balanced.

It seems choppy, I don't know why.

Other than that it's pretty good

It's terrible.
Absolutely repulsive.
Causes small infants to uncontrollably sob.
Causes full-grown men to uncontrollably sob.
Induces prolonged periods of constant regurgitation.
Triggers the despair and the fall of all civilization.

Just kidding.

It's nicely written, and the way you handle first-person POV is what really moves the story along. I admire how ambient you make the whole thing seem, too. However, I'm not sure that I entirely understand the plot or the purpose.

why do you have to open your eyes to notice you are lying in lukewarm water? then again, it might be paint or something

veggieman001 wrote:

dvd4 wrote:

veggieman001 wrote:

dvd4 wrote:

SeptimusHeap wrote:

luiysia wrote:

wet

NeilWest wrote:

I'll save my first thoughts of the title for 4chan.

pervs

If you knew the internet…

you would not think so

Please, just put that at the back of your mind. That wasn't my intent.

I know…

But try andcome up with a better title next time ;)

I think the title is well-fitting for the piece and don't see why I should have to modify my art just because some people aren't mature enough to handle it.

I didn't say you had to modify yourkinda odd“art”.

I just said you might want to pick a better title NEXTNote the the “next”time.

veggieman001 wrote:

dvd4 wrote:

veggieman001 wrote:

dvd4 wrote:

SeptimusHeap wrote:

luiysia wrote:

wet

NeilWest wrote:

I'll save my first thoughts of the title for 4chan.

pervs

If you knew the internet…

you would not think so

Please, just put that at the back of your mind. That wasn't my intent.

I know…

But try andcome up with a better title next time ;)

I think the title is well-fitting for the piece and don't see why I should have to modify my art just because some people aren't mature enough to handle it.

I like it because it's a nice title and it's funny

veggieman001 wrote:

dvd4 wrote:

veggieman001 wrote:

dvd4 wrote:

veggieman001 wrote:

dvd4 wrote:

SeptimusHeap wrote:

luiysia wrote:

wet

NeilWest wrote:

I'll save my first thoughts of the title for 4chan.

pervs

If you knew the internet…

you would not think so

Please, just put that at the back of your mind. That wasn't my intent.

I know…

But try andcome up with a better title next time ;)

I think the title is well-fitting for the piece and don't see why I should have to modify my art just because some people aren't mature enough to handle it.

I didn't say you had to modify yourkinda odd“art”.

I just said you might want to pick a better title NEXTNote the the “next”time.

But I think the best title is the one that fits the art best, which this does, so how could I choose one that's better?

(shhh guys there are kids on this site)

But yeah, I like the title! Even if it sounds kinda innuendo-y at first glance, it sums up the general idea of the story well.

veggieman001 wrote:

dvd4 wrote:

veggieman001 wrote:

dvd4 wrote:

veggieman001 wrote:

dvd4 wrote:

veggieman001 wrote:

dvd4 wrote:

SeptimusHeap wrote:

luiysia wrote:

wet

NeilWest wrote:

I'll save my first thoughts of the title for 4chan.

pervs

If you knew the internet…

you would not think so

Please, just put that at the back of your mind. That wasn't my intent.

I know…

But try andcome up with a better title next time ;)

I think the title is well-fitting for the piece and don't see why I should have to modify my art just because some people aren't mature enough to handle it.

I didn't say you had to modify yourkinda odd“art”.

I just said you might want to pick a better title NEXTNote the the “next”time.

But I think the best title is the one that fits the art best, which this does, so how could I choose one that's better?

Multiply by chuck noris

I mean a more descriptive title.

For example, what would you have titled this?

Water.

I dont think that's a bad name.