Partial2Partials wrote:

Cassandra20 wrote:

Partial2Partials wrote:

Sounds good! My one correction is that “forex line” isn't really the proper terminology - I'd prefer it if it said “forex market.” Still really good though. I think we should definitely use this script.

Thankyou

I will edit that script. Also, make Jack and Jill less nice. *nyehehe*

Thanks!

Cassandra20 wrote:

NOTES:

1.) Jack and Jill initially appear normal-ish, but I want to have them get worse and worse until one gets blown up or something.
2.) Mack, be DRAMATIC. Really, really, dramatic.
3.) Everything's a bit over-the-top.
4.) Music changes slightly for everyone -
Alex: Uplifting
Liza: Monotonous
Mack: Steady
Sammy: Fast-paced

…but it's really subtle and already distorted.

You mentioned Mack twice, I think. The second time, did you mean Bill?

Cassandra20 wrote:

Partial2Partials wrote:

Cassandra20 wrote:

Partial2Partials wrote:

Sounds good! My one correction is that “forex line” isn't really the proper terminology - I'd prefer it if it said “forex market.” Still really good though. I think we should definitely use this script.

Thankyou

I will edit that script. Also, make Jack and Jill less nice. *nyehehe*

Thanks!

Cassandra20 wrote:

NOTES:

1.) Jack and Jill initially appear normal-ish, but I want to have them get worse and worse until one gets blown up or something.
2.) Mack, be DRAMATIC. Really, really, dramatic.
3.) Everything's a bit over-the-top.
4.) Music changes slightly for everyone -
Alex: Uplifting
Liza: Monotonous
Mack: Steady
Sammy: Fast-paced

…but it's really subtle and already distorted.

You mentioned Mack twice, I think. The second time, did you mean Bill?

Probably not, William Flanders is Bill. Here's a quick guide:

Alexander
Elizabeth (Liza) Menalope (I was thinking she could be from a rich family, but really hated everyone, so she got disowned…)
Mack
Samantha Quill
William Flanders (Bill) (Um. Cliche name?)
Phuong
Jack
Jill

And that's it.

Cassandra20 wrote:

Here is a script I wrote for Episode 1. If it doesn't match the requirements for what the characters' personalities are, tell me

(Intro)
(Music is basically just static)
(As everyone appears, a front, two sides, and full-body portrait is shown, as if from a criminal photo.)
(Tone - grainy, and not quite black-and-white)

Characters:
Alex
Liza
Mack
Sammy
Bill (not appearing here)
Phuong (not appearing here)
Voiceover, sounding bored and plain
Jack
Jill

(Alex's shot.)
Voiceover: State your name, age, and crimes.
Alex: I'm, um, Alex. (Sounding determined) I'm twenty-nine. I got fired from McRonalds - actually, I quit working at McRonalds - so I hacked the Forex line in Vietnam. We're going to be rich!

(Liza's shot)
Voiceover: State your name, age, and crimes.
Liza: Liza Menalope. (change last name to whatever you want.) Thirty-two. I hacked the Forex line in Vietnam. We're going to be rich.

(Mack's shot)
Voiceover: State your name, age, and-
(Mack interrupts with a lot of indistinct, violent speech that ends in a sort of yell, yelling Don't mess with me!)
(A break.)
I'm Mack, the guy who's got his fist jammed up-
(He is broken off by static, and then there is a pause and the Mack's line starts over, but calmer.)
I'm Mack. Thirty-six. I work at the CIA - used to - from 9 til' 5. I hacked the Forex line in Vietnam. We're going to be rich.

(Sammy's shot)
Voiceover: State your name, age and crimes.
Sammy: (starting off quiet and escalating into hysterical) I'm-Sammy-Quill-age-twenty-eight-got-fired-cause-Mack-pushed-me-and-I-spilt-Cup-a-Noodles-on-open-circitury…
(She calms down. Still stammering.)
Sammy, 28, used to work with Mack at the CIA - he got us fired. We - uh -spilt Cup-a-noodles on a billion-dollar computer… I hacked the Forex line. We're gonna be rich!

(New scene. Jack and Jill in an office. Jack is sitting at a desk, reading papers, and Jill is solving a Rubik's cube.)

Jill: Done. So, what about the four hackers? We found them yet? Put ‘em in jail?
Jack: No. They’re, uh, working together. Alexander, Eliza, Samantha, Mack - we don't know his full name - plus a few locals. There's a guy, recently released from prison, spotted talking to them. William Flanders.
Jill: Anyone else? (She mixes up the cube.)
Jack: Yes, a local woman… Ah! “Phuong”, that's her name. You get around to the locals, I'll check out the Forex line. Best warn them.
Jill: Roger, little bro'.
Jack: Five minutes hardly gives you the right to call me “little bro'”.
Jill: Still, same deal. I happen to be older by five minutes. (Raspberry.)
Jack: Aw, be quiet. (Grinning). Are you coming?
(They exit)

The end

partypalace wrote:

Cassandra20 wrote:

Here is a script I wrote for Episode 1. If it doesn't match the requirements for what the characters' personalities are, tell me

(Intro)
(Music is basically just static)
(As everyone appears, a front, two sides, and full-body portrait is shown, as if from a criminal photo.)
(Tone - grainy, and not quite black-and-white)

Characters:
Alex
Liza
Mack
Sammy
Bill (not appearing here)
Phuong (not appearing here)
Voiceover, sounding bored and plain
Jack
Jill

(Alex's shot.)
Voiceover: State your name, age, and crimes.
Alex: I'm, um, Alex. (Sounding determined) I'm twenty-nine. I got fired from McRonalds - actually, I quit working at McRonalds - so I hacked the Forex line in Vietnam. We're going to be rich!

(Liza's shot)
Voiceover: State your name, age, and crimes.
Liza: Liza Menalope. (change last name to whatever you want.) Thirty-two. I hacked the Forex line in Vietnam. We're going to be rich.

(Mack's shot)
Voiceover: State your name, age, and-
(Mack interrupts with a lot of indistinct, violent speech that ends in a sort of yell, yelling Don't mess with me!)
(A break.)
I'm Mack, the guy who's got his fist jammed up-
(He is broken off by static, and then there is a pause and the Mack's line starts over, but calmer.)
I'm Mack. Thirty-six. I work at the CIA - used to - from 9 til' 5. I hacked the Forex line in Vietnam. We're going to be rich.

(Sammy's shot)
Voiceover: State your name, age and crimes.
Sammy: (starting off quiet and escalating into hysterical) I'm-Sammy-Quill-age-twenty-eight-got-fired-cause-Mack-pushed-me-and-I-spilt-Cup-a-Noodles-on-open-circitury…
(She calms down. Still stammering.)
Sammy, 28, used to work with Mack at the CIA - he got us fired. We - uh -spilt Cup-a-noodles on a billion-dollar computer… I hacked the Forex line. We're gonna be rich!

(New scene. Jack and Jill in an office. Jack is sitting at a desk, reading papers, and Jill is solving a Rubik's cube.)

Jill: Done. So, what about the four hackers? We found them yet? Put ‘em in jail?
Jack: No. They’re, uh, working together. Alexander, Eliza, Samantha, Mack - we don't know his full name - plus a few locals. There's a guy, recently released from prison, spotted talking to them. William Flanders.
Jill: Anyone else? (She mixes up the cube.)
Jack: Yes, a local woman… Ah! “Phuong”, that's her name. You get around to the locals, I'll check out the Forex line. Best warn them.
Jill: Roger, little bro'.
Jack: Five minutes hardly gives you the right to call me “little bro'”.
Jill: Still, same deal. I happen to be older by five minutes. (Raspberry.)
Jack: Aw, be quiet. (Grinning). Are you coming?
(They exit)

The end

Cool, I'm Jill, I cant do Rubix Cubes but OK

Cassandra20 wrote:

partypalace wrote:

Cassandra20 wrote:

Here is a script I wrote for Episode 1. If it doesn't match the requirements for what the characters' personalities are, tell me

(Intro)
(Music is basically just static)
(As everyone appears, a front, two sides, and full-body portrait is shown, as if from a criminal photo.)
(Tone - grainy, and not quite black-and-white)

Characters:
Alex
Liza
Mack
Sammy
Bill (not appearing here)
Phuong (not appearing here)
Voiceover, sounding bored and plain
Jack
Jill

(Alex's shot.)
Voiceover: State your name, age, and crimes.
Alex: I'm, um, Alex. (Sounding determined) I'm twenty-nine. I got fired from McRonalds - actually, I quit working at McRonalds - so I hacked the Forex line in Vietnam. We're going to be rich!

(Liza's shot)
Voiceover: State your name, age, and crimes.
Liza: Liza Menalope. (change last name to whatever you want.) Thirty-two. I hacked the Forex line in Vietnam. We're going to be rich.

(Mack's shot)
Voiceover: State your name, age, and-
(Mack interrupts with a lot of indistinct, violent speech that ends in a sort of yell, yelling Don't mess with me!)
(A break.)
I'm Mack, the guy who's got his fist jammed up-
(He is broken off by static, and then there is a pause and the Mack's line starts over, but calmer.)
I'm Mack. Thirty-six. I work at the CIA - used to - from 9 til' 5. I hacked the Forex line in Vietnam. We're going to be rich.

(Sammy's shot)
Voiceover: State your name, age and crimes.
Sammy: (starting off quiet and escalating into hysterical) I'm-Sammy-Quill-age-twenty-eight-got-fired-cause-Mack-pushed-me-and-I-spilt-Cup-a-Noodles-on-open-circitury…
(She calms down. Still stammering.)
Sammy, 28, used to work with Mack at the CIA - he got us fired. We - uh -spilt Cup-a-noodles on a billion-dollar computer… I hacked the Forex line. We're gonna be rich!

(New scene. Jack and Jill in an office. Jack is sitting at a desk, reading papers, and Jill is solving a Rubik's cube.)

Jill: Done. So, what about the four hackers? We found them yet? Put ‘em in jail?
Jack: No. They’re, uh, working together. Alexander, Eliza, Samantha, Mack - we don't know his full name - plus a few locals. There's a guy, recently released from prison, spotted talking to them. William Flanders.
Jill: Anyone else? (She mixes up the cube.)
Jack: Yes, a local woman… Ah! “Phuong”, that's her name. You get around to the locals, I'll check out the Forex line. Best warn them.
Jill: Roger, little bro'.
Jack: Five minutes hardly gives you the right to call me “little bro'”.
Jill: Still, same deal. I happen to be older by five minutes. (Raspberry.)
Jack: Aw, be quiet. (Grinning). Are you coming?
(They exit)

The end

Cool, I'm Jill, I cant do Rubix Cubes but OK

Um… You don't actually need to solve a Rubic's cube… I have a lil' something called SFX *evil laugh*

Cassandra20 wrote:

partypalace wrote:

Cassandra20 wrote:

Here is a script I wrote for Episode 1. If it doesn't match the requirements for what the characters' personalities are, tell me

(Intro)
(Music is basically just static)
(As everyone appears, a front, two sides, and full-body portrait is shown, as if from a criminal photo.)
(Tone - grainy, and not quite black-and-white)

Characters:
Alex
Liza
Mack
Sammy
Bill (not appearing here)
Phuong (not appearing here)
Voiceover, sounding bored and plain
Jack
Jill

(Alex's shot.)
Voiceover: State your name, age, and crimes.
Alex: I'm, um, Alex. (Sounding determined) I'm twenty-nine. I got fired from McRonalds - actually, I quit working at McRonalds - so I hacked the Forex line in Vietnam. We're going to be rich!

(Liza's shot)
Voiceover: State your name, age, and crimes.
Liza: Liza Menalope. (change last name to whatever you want.) Thirty-two. I hacked the Forex line in Vietnam. We're going to be rich.

(Mack's shot)
Voiceover: State your name, age, and-
(Mack interrupts with a lot of indistinct, violent speech that ends in a sort of yell, yelling Don't mess with me!)
(A break.)
I'm Mack, the guy who's got his fist jammed up-
(He is broken off by static, and then there is a pause and the Mack's line starts over, but calmer.)
I'm Mack. Thirty-six. I work at the CIA - used to - from 9 til' 5. I hacked the Forex line in Vietnam. We're going to be rich.

(Sammy's shot)
Voiceover: State your name, age and crimes.
Sammy: (starting off quiet and escalating into hysterical) I'm-Sammy-Quill-age-twenty-eight-got-fired-cause-Mack-pushed-me-and-I-spilt-Cup-a-Noodles-on-open-circitury…
(She calms down. Still stammering.)
Sammy, 28, used to work with Mack at the CIA - he got us fired. We - uh -spilt Cup-a-noodles on a billion-dollar computer… I hacked the Forex line. We're gonna be rich!

(New scene. Jack and Jill in an office. Jack is sitting at a desk, reading papers, and Jill is solving a Rubik's cube.)

Jill: Done. So, what about the four hackers? We found them yet? Put ‘em in jail?
Jack: No. They’re, uh, working together. Alexander, Eliza, Samantha, Mack - we don't know his full name - plus a few locals. There's a guy, recently released from prison, spotted talking to them. William Flanders.
Jill: Anyone else? (She mixes up the cube.)
Jack: Yes, a local woman… Ah! “Phuong”, that's her name. You get around to the locals, I'll check out the Forex line. Best warn them.
Jill: Roger, little bro'.
Jack: Five minutes hardly gives you the right to call me “little bro'”.
Jill: Still, same deal. I happen to be older by five minutes. (Raspberry.)
Jack: Aw, be quiet. (Grinning). Are you coming?
(They exit)

The end

Cool, I'm Jill, I cant do Rubix Cubes but OK

Um… You don't actually need to solve a Rubic's cube… I have a lil' something called SFX *evil laugh*