jadeaurorawolf wrote:

So many things to reply to! Lets see…

jadeaurorawolf wrote:

As you can see (Above) not the only problem!

jadeaurorawolf wrote:

njtacogirl wrote:

jadeaurorawolf wrote:

jadeaurorawolf wrote:

njtacogirl wrote:

AMAZING! luckily, I don't have that problem! Here is my example of a HIGHLY detailed role play ( or act ) of a fox searching for food. *the marigold-colored fox carefully leapt at a hole with great balance and accuracy. She was trying to find a mouse. her brain thought where the meal could have gone. She buried her nose under rocks and tree stumps. The sunlight lit up her back side mean while, her front side was swallowed up by the darkness which seemed to be night but wasn't very quite. After a few tiring hours later, she had managed to capture a bugged-eyed -mouse with her broken claws that where somewhat white but dirty which caused the appearance to be more yellowish. After she strangled the helpless, cobalt- colored -mouse she ate it in tremendous gulps her fangs or teeth grew a bright, bloody red and soon disappeared shortly after she took a thin clean bone from the mouse's skin and cleaned her 3 inch fangs. Her teeth where almost clean but she didn't mind. She left the leftovers of the mouse behind and went back into her shaggy, dry, dusty, den.* Now here is a VERY POOR ROLE PLAY ( or act again, ): *The fox was searching for food it caught a mouse and ate it* BLAH TERRIBLE! Which rp or ( roleplay ) did you like best the highly detailed one, or very cheesy one?

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This is my version of yours:
Marigold the fox carefully leaped into a mouse hole, balancing herself perfectly. "Where could that mouse have gone?"She wondered. She buried her nose under the rocks and tree stumps. A few tiring hours later, she came back up with a mouse clamped in her jaws. "It's dirty, but perfect for a meal!"She thought. She strangled it and ate it, gulping it down.
What I Changed:
1. Short so it can fit in comment
2. fox has more character
3. less blood and gore
4. the readers don't throw up

1. Ok, it works.
   
2. I believe you mean more personified. You are trying to make it more like a human, whereas njtaco's was more like a regular fox
   
3. Blood and gore are often acceptable to a certain point.
   
4. I'm pretty sure nobody threw up reading that.
   

The marigold-colored fox carefully leapt at a hole, trying to find a mouse. “Where could my prey be?”she wondered. She buried her nose under rocks and tree stumps as the sun lit up her backside. After a few tiring hours, she managed to catch a small mouse with her claws, now slightly broken and yellowed from the dirt. After she strangled the cobalt colored mouse, she ate it in a large gulp, her fangs turning a bloody red. She then left the leftovers of the mouse behind and went back into her dry and dusty den.

the_force wrote:

nope just telling him to add it to the front page

K13Marie wrote:

jadeaurorawolf wrote:

So many things to reply to! Lets see…

Wait… Are you the person who made this? I am slightly confused as to why you are replying to all these…

fateme10 wrote:

I have one question …….please help me

Lythium wrote:

Should be stickied.

cattynora wrote:

Lythium wrote:

Should be stickied.

OMG!!!

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jadeaurorawolf wrote:

K13Marie wrote:

jadeaurorawolf wrote:

So many things to reply to! Lets see…

Wait… Are you the person who made this? I am slightly confused as to why you are replying to all these…

Nope just a lot of people are qouting me!

Nintendoscratcher99 wrote:

I have a question about starting it. Do we make it as a Discuss topic, or do we do something else!

jadeaurorawolf wrote:

WildlifeWavesgames wrote:

jadeaurorawolf wrote:

DiscordTheWolf wrote:

Aw shoot, I was going to make this but you got here first

How do you do a signature?

Ah. Simply click on ‘Discuss’ and scroll to the bottom. Click ‘Change your signature’ and it should come up with a little box for you to type it.

How?