Hey there!
Before we begin the critique, quick disclaimer:
I’m not the best at critiques, so take everything I say with a grain of salt!
If i give any examples, they will be bad on purpose. Pease don’t use them, use your own words!
Remember that these are YOUR answers, so feel free to take my advice, eat it, ignore it, or put it in a woodchipper.
And finally, this will not be a super detailed line-by-line critique, I’ll mostly just be hitting big themes and then the questions you specifically asked me to look at, but if you want me to do a line-by-line lmk! I can have that to you by the end of today <3

About Me
Looks good! There were a couple slightly repetetive parts, but nothing that really stood out to me otherwise

Experience

I haven’t had have much leadership experience in real life.

You use three different versions of ‘have’ in a row :sob: I would fix this and remove at least one of them… I’d suggest ‘have’?

You also say ‘even though’ twice near each other

In all, this is a good answer, but it is quite long and can be a bit rambling at times. I also had a mega giant experience section so I get it LOL but this might be a good place to cut down on your word count?

Cabin Prefs and Time look good! Wording is slightly clunky sometimes but that’s not the biggest deal.

Communication sometimes gets redundant, especially in the first paragraph. Otherwise it’s a really solid answer!


Scenario looks really good <3

SWC Impact
This answer is long. And it might just me being lazy, but I first of all don’t always want to read answers that are that long, and second, I think you can get your points across in a much more concise way. I’ve had to learn, especially this session with my app, that sometimes it’s more important to prioritize what you’re elaborating on vs elaborating on every point that you want to. For example, the first draft of my experience answer was 921 words, and after I cut out some elaboration, it’s only 581, which is quite the improvement! In my opinion, you should highlight what really is most important and only touch on the rest– your reader can probably draw connections anyway, and it not only makes your answer less ramble-y, it also makes your words more impactful.

Everything else looks good!


Final notes:
Read your answers out loud to see if it flows well and to make sure nothing’s too run-on!

You do tend to ramble a bit, so something I like to do is make a copy of all of my answers and cut out everything that’s not needed to answer the question itself. After I have the ramble-y copy and the cut-up copy, I blend them together to find the medium of personality, explanation, and conciseness. (Sometimes I do the cutting up in my head and then translate it directly to the app, but it’s easier to explain it the other way vs ‘i stare at my app and decide which parts aren’t needed’)

Overall, your app is as great as usual, and you should be proud! Best of luck, although you don’t need it ;D

WUC Daily 10/2/26 - Accountability letter for Frost, 406 words

Dear Frost,

Hello! I know we haven't really talked much, but I have seen you around SWC and occasionally FLEUR things!

I am writing this letter to encourage you to reach your goals this month! You’ve selected some really good ones, and Imm looking forward to hear of your success.



First of all, focusing more on class! That is a fantastic idea, and something I should work on as well haha- if you need any tips to work on this goal, I would suggest limiting distractions, taking notes, and telling yourself “I am someone who pays attention in class” and sticking to it. I know it's not going to be as easy as just saying it, but I believe in you!!!



Next up, writing OC lore!! I love writing lore of my OCs, and hopefully you do as well, so this one should be really easy! just block out the time that you’ll need, do some brainstorming, and get it all written out. Some of my favorite things about making an OC are looking at it from the perspective of writing an entire story about them: what are their values? what do they like and dislike and why? What excites you about the character? And once you have their motivations and calues, figure out their backstory by connecting the dots to make them who they are today based on their past. If you want to, you can also do a little bit to plan out their future! What do you have in store for this character?

(Writing that has made me excited to work on my own OCs LOL)



And finally, studying more!! Studying is super important, as I’m sure you know. Like I said for paying attention in class, telling yourself “I am someone who studies regularly” and following through can really help. Also making sure that you're blocking out time to study and actually studying during that time, but also be careful not to burn yourself out!! Spread things out and take care of yourself.

To finish off this letter, I just want to bid you good luck in your endeavors! I believe in you, and I know that with a little effort, you can absolutely achieve your goals.

Doing hard things is never easy (well… obviously lol), but our brains were built for challenges— and in the end, when it's all done, you'll feel really good about yourself! You got this!

Sincerely,

Mouse