Poetry from You and Me!

7734f

This topic has been revived from 1.4, and was originally made by me.

Put some poetry here that you have written! I'll start:

If a brook is cold
In the winter
And pleasantly warm
In the summer
Then why is it
One does not change
According to the weather?

And one more:

I fell in the mud
When I slipped in the rain
On a banana peel
But I was fine
So the next time
That I saw that banana peel
I stepped over it
And walked on

So post your own poetry!
I made su…what was I going to write here???

Last edited by 7734f (May 26, 2013 15:39:29)

7734f

Bump

NoxSpooth

I'm reposting mine.

Gone Forever

When I cried
Nothing happened
When I screamed
No one ever listened
My happiness has died
But nobody cared
What I've dreamed
Has already disappeared…

I can't find the right way
I don't know what I've done
But it gets worse everyday
So I'll just be gone…

… Forever…

Last edited by NoxSpooth (May 12, 2013 01:54:56)

soupoftomato

NoxSpooth wrote:
I'm reposting mine.
Gone Forever

When I cried
Nothing happened
When I screamed
No one ever listened
My happiness has died
But nobody cared
What I've dreamed
Has already disappeared…

I can't find the right way
I don't know what I've done
But it gets worse everyday
So I'll just be gone…

… Forever…

Too literal!

NoxSpooth

soupoftomato wrote:
NoxSpooth wrote:
I'm reposting mine.
Gone Forever

When I cried
Nothing happened
When I screamed
No one ever listened
My happiness has died
But nobody cared
What I've dreamed
Has already disappeared…

I can't find the right way
I don't know what I've done
But it gets worse everyday
So I'll just be gone…

… Forever…
Too literal!

And… ?

luiysia

well that's just your opinion

I may have posted this before

today i had to go to the eye doctor’s
they poked and dripped and did things with giant metal goggles
but all that was worth it
because it was a sunny day
and i got
THE COOLEST SHADES
EVER.

7734f

luiysia wrote:
well that's just your opinion

I may have posted this before
today i had to go to the eye doctor’s
they poked and dripped and did things with giant metal goggles
but all that was worth it
because it was a sunny day
and i got
THE COOLEST SHADES
EVER.

You posted that before

Cheese tastes good
Only when it's aged and not moldy
You can only enjoy swimming
When it's a hot day and the water is just right
You can only live your life
If you do the things you love

Last edited by 7734f (May 12, 2013 03:02:54)

soupoftomato

7734f wrote:
Cheese tastes good
Only when it's aged and not moldy
You can only enjoy swimming
When it's a hot day and the water is just right
You can only live your life
If you do the things you love

I thought this could be a cool metaphor
but then you just went out and said it!

Last edited by soupoftomato (May 12, 2013 03:19:10)

7734f

soupoftomato wrote:
7734f wrote:
Cheese tastes good
Only when it's aged and not moldy
You can only enjoy swimming
When it's a hot day and the water is just right
You can only live your life
If you do the things you love
I thought this could be a cool metaphor
but then you just went out and said it!

Wait, I'll fix it!

Cheese tastes good
Only when it's aged and not moldy
You can only enjoy swimming
When it's a hot day and the water is just right
You can only joke around
When you're having a good day

Better? I need help thinking of a conclusion to the poem.

Last edited by 7734f (May 14, 2013 01:35:45)

7734f

Sellout wrote:
I don't get it, it just seems like you're stating things

You can only skip if you have two legs
You can only bake a cake if you have eggs, or an equivalent substitute
You can only google something if you have internet access

Think about it….it's a metaphor….

Wickimen

You can only joke around
When you're having a good day

false

eveadelekitty

NoxSpooth wrote:
I'm reposting mine.
Gone Forever

When I cried
Nothing happened
When I screamed
No one ever listened
My happiness has died
But nobody cared
What I've dreamed
Has already disappeared…

I can't find the right way
I don't know what I've done
But it gets worse everyday
So I'll just be gone…

… Forever…

Too fit for creepypasta.

eveadelekitty

Magpies
Magpies by the brook
1,2,3,4,5,6,7,
8, what does 8 mean?

Land on their feet
I sat on the windowsill
Broken branches all around
From the third floor
Cats always land on their feet
Do little girls do too?

Cat
Hurry scurry to your dens
Before the Cat comes
Come to your human friends to put you in your cages
Stay away from the edges, rats
the paws might grab you
Just hide in the bedding under a box
With a stash of food and rocks
That can last you all day
At least until the Cat's away.

Last edited by eveadelekitty (May 14, 2013 11:03:50)

eveadelekitty

Starburst
Stash
Tickle
Awesome
Run
Belly
Unstoppable
Rat
Super
Tiny terror

Midnight
Master
I love her
Dark fur
Nocturnal (kinda)
Ice-cold paws
Great
Hahaha
Tail

eveadelekitty

Leaves
Early green
Middle red
Late brown
End none.

Ice
It covered my freezer
Covered the fridge
Covered my kitchen
Covered my house
Covered my street
All the way to the forest fire
And now it's gone.

7734f

Sellout wrote:
I can tell it's meant to be a metaphor, but it isn't particularly striking and it doesn't come across as symbolic to me

Not everything has to be symbolic in life. I mean, think about it, is a cardboard box symbolic?

7734f

Wickimen wrote:
You can only joke around
When you're having a good day

false

……
maybe…

NoxSpooth

Wickimen wrote:
You can only joke around
When you're having a good day

false

Wickimen

</3

anyway i know this for a fact, you can joke around when you're having a terrible day
believe me kids~

soupoftomato

7734f wrote:
Wickimen wrote:
You can only joke around
When you're having a good day

false

……
maybe…

Certainly!

A lot of comedians were/are actually horribly depressed people.

EDIT: knew the last actually didn't feel right

Last edited by soupoftomato (May 15, 2013 02:19:34)

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