7/27 (edt) daily:
I chose Hello My Old Heart by The Oh Hellos :>

Ash looked outside the window, looking towards the old city they had managed to escape from. A lot had changed since then and Ash turned away from the window, sighing. They caught sight of a locked box in the corner of the room and walked over, trying to lift the box. It was too heavy. Ash noticed a small key tied to the box handle and untied it, opening the box after. They saw a note taped to the inside of the box, which read: Hey! If you’re reading this Ash, these are all your old belongings that I took with me when I left the city. I’ve kept them in this box ever since I got here, feel free to look through them! Well they’re yours, anyways, you just told me to take them with me hehe -Starri. Ash rummaged through the items and stopped at the sight of a small book, which they grabbed and tentatively opened. It was handwritten, and Ash’s memories returned in a rush. Their diary. Ash flipped through the pages. It was like going back to visit their old self…
Ash saw the things written in the diary, their eyes slightly widening even more with each turn of a page. Ash then shut the book and looked around in their pockets for a match, their hands shaking. Ash took out a match and lit it, the small fire dancing around in their eyes. Ash dropped the match on the book, burning it and then putting out the flame from the match. They continued to look through the box as if nothing had happened, but they had a slightly angry look on their face. They picked up a compass and turned it over. On the bottom was their name and Starri’s written on it. Ash put the compass in their pocket while inspecting an old watch, which they returned to the box. They kept looking through their things from their past, rarely finding something that meant a lot to them. They kept on digging through the box, but finally hit the bottom of the box, all sorts of items strewn all over the floor. Ash only found around three things that mattered to them; the compass, a picture, and a camera. Ash dumped all the remaining items back in the box, which for some reason barely fit. They locked the box and put the key on top of the box, getting up to look out the window. Going through that box was like going through their past. Ash had changed so much since then. (429 words)

Daily for July 28th 2021
Critiqued by Violet. (205 words)

starriwastaken wrote:

I sat in my office, reading through some papers. The area was quiet and cold, the complete opposite of what was going on outside the building. Whenever I open the window behind my desk, I hear cars and buses drive by and the sound of people chatting with each other on the streets.

I love the starting point. I felt like being in a super quiet place, and reading peacefully. But the outside? How noisy it it! It's like a normal street, and I love it how you said that it was the total opposite. Very descriptive!

starriwastaken wrote:

The sunlight often shines on my window, causing more light than necessary to be in my office. I often hear whispers from the others that work here. The white lights on the ceiling shone brightly, a little bit too brightly. The dust and sand from the outer lands often makes it to the city via the strong and hot winds, which is the main reason why I rarely open the window.

So far, I feel like I am actually here. When I am reading this, I feel as character. It feels realistic. It shows the views of how the character feels, what they sees, smells, hears.

starriwastaken wrote:

Outside, there are dozens of skyscrapers and lots of huge apartment buildings with roads and cars all over the place. Shops are set up along the busiest streets with people walking in and out of them, often not buying anything. Street lamps light up the roads and highways in the night, when it’s cold and more quiet outside. Not many people are outside after the evening anyways. This all seems like a perfect place, but it isn’t.

I felt like I was peeping out of a window, and thinking about everything. I actually felt like Sherlock Holmes
I like how the character thinks that it's not alright, it's not happy, so boring, so messy, it looks like a perfect place, but no. It isn't. As I said before, descriptive! This is really realistic, so real. It's like a normal life? Where people going in and going out, cars all over the place, and when people don't come out in the evenings. In a normal city, it's just like that. People going out for jobs and school, then staying inside during evening. ( In my village, people go out in the evening, but- you know what I mean ) Mainly, the character seems to hate this surroundings.

Keep the good work!

7/28 (edt) daily (total words: 364 {not counting the writing in boxes}):
I critiqued @Impurplenohesnot's story! you can find it here!

Angrily, I stormed out, away from the house, away from everything. Who was I to think I had seen magic? Who was I to think my friends would believe it?

I like that the emotion of the main character is well conveyed!

Bethany’s words still rang through my head. It’s an embarrassment for us to be seen with you. Come on, Liana. Grow up, you're not six years old anymore. She had said it so gently, but it still stung.

This sentence is a bit confusing, mainly the part where it tells the reader what Bethany had said. I think that the sentences could be slightly modified to: "Bethany's words still rang through my head. “It's an embarrassment for us to be seen with you. Come on, Liana, grow up, you're not six years old anymore.” She had said it gently, but the words still stung."
The italics and quotation marks are there to make what Bethany had said easier to tell.

I gasped as I nearly ran into something. My eyes narrowed as I saw it. That flash of light, floating in the air like a huge firefly, that had caused all my problems.

This sentence is nicely detailed in the area of explaining what the main character saw, which is the ‘something’ that the character almost ran into. I believe the last sentence can be changed slightly to: “I let out a gasp as I nearly ran into something. I narrowed my eyes once I took a better look at it. That flash of light, floating in the air like a huge firefly, was the cause of all my problems.” This is mainly to add in a bit more of an explanation of what actions the main character had done.

I looked closer at it and nearly fainted … I watched her running back to her house with the tears streaming down her cheeks. I felt bad that I had caused her so much pain, but I didn’t know what to do.

Everything in between these sentences is perfect! In the part where it mentions that the fairy was crying, you could remove the “the” in between “with” and “tears,” since the tears are the fairy's, and not an object/thing for everyone. (does this make sense?)

But talking to humans resulted in banishment from the fairy city. Talking to humans was considered the worst offense there was in the city where I lived.

This slightly hints that the main character is a fairy, or that the fairy city has the same laws and rules as the (human?) city the main character lives in.

The fairy again. I glared at her, about to say something rude again. She quickly stopped me.

The first sentence seems to be incomplete/partly finished. From what I've gathered, it could be changed to: “The fairy came back again.”

I thought. There were so many things I could have said. I’m 13, not 6. Are you crazy? Actually, I’m kind of weirded out. But instead, I wiped my tears. Maybe it wasn’t so bad that Bethany thought I was embarrassing. I had an actual fairy talking to me, and I believed that I did.

I like the other phrases mentioned that the main character could have said! It gives a view of what the character is currently thinking and feeling.

I liked this story! It was interesting to read, and I also like that a lot of things were revealed once you got further in the story and that there wasn't anything left unexplained or explained by the time you finish the story. I hope this critique helped!

thank youuuu c: sorry if the perspective switches were confusing- i was experimenting xD

Impurplenohesnot wrote:

thank youuuu c: sorry if the perspective switches were confusing- i was experimenting xD

np! and it's okay :>

starriwastaken wrote:

7/21 (edt) daily:

I sat in my office, reading through some papers. The area was quiet and cold, the complete opposite of what was going on outside the building. Whenever I open the window behind my desk, I hear cars and buses drive by and the sound of people chatting with each other on the streets. The sunlight often shines on my window, causing more light than necessary to be in my office. I often hear whispers from the others that work here. The white lights on the ceiling shone brightly, a little bit too brightly. The dust and sand from the outer lands often makes it to the city via the strong and hot winds, which is the main reason why I rarely open the window. Outside, there are dozens of skyscrapers and lots of huge apartment buildings with roads and cars all over the place. Shops are set up along the busiest streets with people walking in and out of them, often not buying anything. Street lamps light up the roads and highways in the night, when it’s cold and more quiet outside. Not many people are outside after the evening anyways. This all seems like a perfect place, but it isn’t. (201 words)

Ash tapped their pen on the desk lightly while reading some papers, which they soon shoved to the side. They got up and looked out of the window and sighed. They had been forced into this, and Ash hated it. Why couldn’t they make their own decision? They didn’t have to do what their parents wanted them to do, but here they were, working for the people they had sworn to go against. No matter what anyone else told them, Ash hated the whole city and the people in charge of ‘maintaining’ and ‘keeping it in control and order.’ In Ash’s eyes, maintaining the city was basically shutting people down and a bunch of acts of tyranny. Sure, the city was ‘fancy’ and all that, but if you slightly disagreed with anyone in power, you were automatically in danger. You couldn’t even criticize the government without getting some form of punishment. Ash deeply despised all of this. They went back to their chair and sat down, tired of all that had happened. Why did no one in power realize that everything they did had a terrible flaw and only benefited the ones that supported the government and the ones part of it? Why didn’t they look at the other cities and lands? Ash had always vaguely hinted this to others, but no one listened to them, and it was time to do something about it. (235 words)

I shoved the papers to the side and got up to observe the streets outside the window. Cars and buses drove by and people walked in and out of shops. Why did most people look so happy? I felt angry that people could genuinely be happy in this terrible place. But of course, they’re likely the ones favored by all the rules and policies made by the government. Since I was part of the government, I did have slightly more freedom than most citizens, but that didn’t mean I liked the government. I was only in it because I had no choice. At least I could put that to some use. I went back to my desk and checked my phone, and I was slightly disappointed to see that there were no new messages. Summer would have contacted me by now. Knowing Summer, she was probably busy plotting some other chaotic action. Still, that wasn’t a bad thing, and if I thought it was, Summer would likely not be freely purposely causing chaos, damaging and destroying things, and continuing the other actions that I’d do as well. I looked out the window, but it was covered with dust or sand – it was hard to tell the difference. The sun started to go down, and I sighed and took my belongings with me, shutting off the lights and closing the door to my office. (234 words)

total words: 670

Hello! I read the first part, and I think that you did a great job with the pacing. The information was given out steadily, and it didn't feel like too much at once. Good job!

I did notice that the descriptions in the first section were a little long, which I understand because it is good to have vivid imagery for the scenery. I think that if you added in a few more actions by the main character, it would grab the reader's attention and help the flow of your writing. For instance, you wrote: “I often hear whispers from the others that work here. The white lights on the ceiling shone brightly, a little bit too brightly.” Maybe you could add in these actions, while still providing the visual descriptions: “I often hear whispers from the others that work here. I could hear them right now, their hushed tones barely meeting my ears. I turned, glancing up at the ceiling. The white lights shone brightly, a little bit too brightly for my liking.” Your descriptions were good, though. They helped develop the scene.

Another point that I noticed was your last sentence of the first part. It read: “This all seems like a perfect place, but it isn’t.” To me, it seemed like based on what the character was describing, that the place wasn't perfect, which makes the sentence seem a little obvious. I think that if you changed the sentence to describe how the character wants to escape or change something about it, it would make the reader excited to learn more. For instance: “This is the way my world had become. And I knew it had to change.”

I loved the feel of the piece. It had an ominous, unsettling feeling, and it made me very intrigued. I enjoyed reading this, and I hope that this helps!

school4girlhd wrote:

starriwastaken wrote:

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Hello! I read the first part, and I think that you did a great job with the pacing. The information was given out steadily, and it didn't feel like too much at once. Good job!

I did notice that the descriptions in the first section were a little long, which I understand because it is good to have vivid imagery for the scenery. I think that if you added in a few more actions by the main character, it would grab the reader's attention and help the flow of your writing. For instance, you wrote: “I often hear whispers from the others that work here. The white lights on the ceiling shone brightly, a little bit too brightly.” Maybe you could add in these actions, while still providing the visual descriptions: “I often hear whispers from the others that work here. I could hear them right now, their hushed tones barely meeting my ears. I turned, glancing up at the ceiling. The white lights shone brightly, a little bit too brightly for my liking.” Your descriptions were good, though. They helped develop the scene.

Another point that I noticed was your last sentence of the first part. It read: “This all seems like a perfect place, but it isn’t.” To me, it seemed like based on what the character was describing, that the place wasn't perfect, which makes the sentence seem a little obvious. I think that if you changed the sentence to describe how the character wants to escape or change something about it, it would make the reader excited to learn more. For instance: “This is the way my world had become. And I knew it had to change.”

I loved the feel of the piece. It had an ominous, unsettling feeling, and it made me very intrigued. I enjoyed reading this, and I hope that this helps!

thank you! your critique was really helpful! I'll keep your tips in mind for future stories and I might rewrite this one! (if motivation actually existed for me hehe) /gen

7/30 (edt) daily:

Birdi opened the door to the meeting room and sat down on a chair as Alba walked in the room, looking tired. Birdi looked up and saw Alba, who sat down and took a mango from the basket on the table and began to eat it. “Hey Alba, have you finished writing the camper signups? We only have a few days left until June.” Birdi asked. Alba nodded as she poked at the mango in her hands, continuing to eat it.
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Kat went into the room, where she found the other hosts sitting around a table. Kat was holding some papers and looked tired. “The camper sorting is finished,” she mumbled in a tired voice, dropping the papers on the table and plopping herself down on a chair, rubbing her eyes.
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The hosts were all back in the meeting room as Birdi glanced at the clock. It was a few minutes from midnight. “Okay, we have some things to announce to the campers. First of all, have you finished making the rules and adding information to the memory book cover contest, Kat?” Birdi asked, looking over at Kat, who nodded and handed over some papers. “Okay, that’s something we don’t have to worry about. Bakie, do you have the word wars information ready?” Bakie nodded, handing over the poster with the rules and information. “Alright, I’ll pin an announcement in the main cabin,” Birdi said, getting up to leave as the others did the same.
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All the hosts and leaders sat around the same table, each looking exhausted. Birdi, who was quietly waiting for everyone else, looked around. “I think everyone’s here. So, as some of you know, cabin wars are going to be taking place tomorrow. We know what some campers do during them.” Birdi looked around at the others who were sitting there and continued, “Please inform your campers about cabin wars, but make sure to tell them to not stay up in the middle of the night writing towards a war and get some sleep instead.” All the leaders and hosts got up and went their separate ways either to inform their cabins or put up announcements in the main cabin.
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Honey was sitting outside the main cabin, waiting for it to be midnight. She noticed some campers rushing in and out of the cabin, who were likely turning in the daily, as they had just finished it late. Honey got up and went inside, moving over some announcements and activities and pinned a poster on the board, which read: WRITING COMPETITION INFO AND RULES.
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Kat sat behind a table, looking slightly stressed. She was putting down tallies on papers as campers kept on going to the table, putting down their votes for the memory book covers. She rarely glanced up and simply motioned for the next person to move forward, eyes darting all around the paper, looking for the cover the campers voted for. Once the wave of campers had gone away, Kat took a small break, stretching.
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Birdi went to the board in the main cabin with all the activities and notices, adding a new announcement to the wall. “Cabin wars are starting tomorrow at midnight! But there’s going to be a lot more points at stake, so be careful! Birdi announced to the whole room, grinning and walking out the door.
(557 words)

4th weekly! total words: 2512
I used the owl house and harry potter as my fandoms in the second and third part :>

part 1:
You walked towards the carnival. You could hear loud noises coming from the carnival; the chatter of happy people talking with each other and music playing. Your feet crunched on leaves as you slowly made your way towards the carnival under the dark red sky. The music grew louder as you got closer, and you couldn’t help but realize that it sounded odd- the music was all glitchy and distorted. You opened the gate, which creaked loudly. Walking around the carnival, you saw that everyone was very happy- strangely happy. Well, this was your job anyways and you couldn’t do much about it. But you still couldn’t shake off the feeling that something was wrong- but why today, of all days? You looked upwards and noticed that the sky was a darker red than it originally was. Something was going on- how could the sky get that much darker in a matter of minutes? You sighed and put the matter to the side, you had to do your job- that’s why you were here anyways. You walked around, helping the people at the carnival. You soon realized that no one else with your job was here. All the performers and others were here, but not the ones that helped around. Perhaps they couldn’t make it today or decided not to. Night fell and the only light came from the tents, which were lit up brightly inside. You headed to the storage room by the edge of the carnival to pick up a lantern so you would be able to see well outside. You stepped inside and then the door shut behind you with a loud bang. You froze in shock at what had happened. Maybe it was just the wind. You could barely see, as the only lightbulb was a dim red- wasn’t it a warm and soft yellow a few seconds ago? You went to the shelves that had lanterns, but they were all broken except one; well, better than nothing. You grabbed the lantern and went to the door to exit the room. It wouldn’t open, and you pressed your whole weight against the door, and it finally burst open. You stepped outside, noticing the sky was now a very dark red. You lit the lantern, which emitted a dim red light. You started to get a lot more worried as you heard a voice from the speakers all around the carnival and you stopped to listen to the announcement.
“All of our employees, please report to the main tent. Thank you.” The voice sounded weird- dull and lifeless. You decided to go to the tent, despite your suspicions that something was definitely wrong. You ducked inside the main tent, which was clearly the largest of all. You noticed that no one else was there, so you waited for everyone else to arrive. The lights in the tent flashed and then shut off. You grabbed your lantern, holding it up. The lantern’s light dimmed out and you tried to get out of the tent, but couldn’t. You heard a rumble underneath your feet as the ground split open and you fell in the hole, screaming as the ground connected back together, leaving you in pure darkness as you fell down the pit. (544 words)

part 2:
“Hey! Do you want to go play catch?”
Luz’s voice rang out from behind Hermione, who was sitting in the shade, reading her schoolbooks. It was sunny and there were no clouds in the clear blue sky; it was clearly summertime. Hermione looked up and spotted Luz running towards her. “Sure!” Hermione shouted, closing her books and putting them in her bag, which she swung on her shoulder. Luz ran over to an empty area, Hermione following and setting her bag down next to her. Luz got out a tennis ball and threw it, Hermione jumping in the air to catch it, which she managed. Both of them kept doing that back and forth until both of them got bored and went back to the tree. Luz sat down, bouncing the ball lightly. Hermione went back to reading her schoolbooks and took notes, occasionally dipping her quill in her ink bottle. Luz saw what Hermione was reading and asked, “Can I read some of your schoolbooks?” Hermione nodded, not taking her eyes off of her book, her quill scribbling away. Luz reached out for a book and looked at the cover, which read The Standard Book of Spells, Grade Four. Luz opened the book, interested. She skimmed through the book, slightly confused. This isn’t how magic was done in the Boiling Isles… she thought to herself. She read some of the incantations, which all seemed to require a wand. Huh, in the Boiling Isles you didn’t require anything to do most types of magic, except paper for glyphs, and you used a staff for magic, not a wand. Except for the training wand that Amity had used to practice her magic. Hermione closed her book and looked around in her bag for something. “Hey, Luz? By any chance, have you seen my copy of The Standard Book of Spells, Grade Four?” Luz nodded and handed Hermione her book, who took it and flipped to the first page with spells. Luz grabbed the book Hermione had just been using, which was A History of Magic by Bathilda Bagshot. Luz opened it, curious about what the book said. Maybe I could learn more about the Boiling Isles with this book! And how to make another portal to the Boiling Isles and back! Luz began to read the book excitedly, but was soon disappointed. There was no mention of the Boiling Isles in the book. Luz closed the book lightly, looking upset. Hermione looked up and noticed Luz’s expression. “Hey, something wrong?” She asked lightly, and Luz questioned whether or not to answer truthfully. She nodded, and Hermione asked, “What’s wrong, then?” “I thought there’d be a mention of the Boiling Isles in your book, but there isn’t…” Luz muttered, not looking at Hermione, who looked confused. “The Boiling Isles? What’s this you’re talking about? I never read anything about the Boiling Isles in my books.” “Then where did you learn your magic? I thought you also had been to the Boiling Isles!” Luz said, looking equally confused. “Okay, I learned my magic at Hogwarts, which is a school of witchcraft and wizardry. And I was also naturally born with magical powers, I just had to learn how to properly use them. I’m Muggle-born, which means that I was born in a family with no magical powers, but I have magical powers. Now, may you explain to me what the Boiling Isles are, please?” Hermione asked curiously. “The Boiling Isles is another realm that I got to through a portal door, where magic is regular. I don’t have any magical powers, so I just had to learn magic another way,” Luz explained, still processing what Hermione had said. “Oooh, can I see?” Hermione asked excitedly. Luz nodded and drew a light glyph on a paper, tapping it. The paper faded away into ashes. “Oh darn, I forgot. Glyphs don’t work in the human realm!” Luz said sadly. “It’s okay!” Hermione told Luz, who slightly brightened up. Both of them kept explaining things from each of their worlds, each interested in the other’s world. The sun began to set slowly, but neither of them wanted to go back to Hermione’s house.
“Hey, Hermione, why don’t you show me any of your magic?” Luz asked. It had been a question she had been meaning to ask Hermione, but never got around to asking it. “Oh, that. Well, I’m not allowed to do magic outside of school until I’m over the age of 17, basically when I’m considered an adult in the wizarding world. Are you allowed to do magic whenever you want?” Hermione asked. “Well, I guess so, I was never told to not do magic in the human realm. It’s not like I can do my type of magic here,” Luz replied. Both of them quieted down and looked at the nice sunset. (809 words)

part 3:
Hermione was reading her new books and checked her watch. It was probably time to go to King’s Cross, as it was September 1st today. “Well, Luz, I think it’s time for me to go to Hogwarts. Wait…. I have an idea.” Hermione said, thinking. Luz, who was poking the grass glumly, looked up. “What’s your idea?” “Well… what if you go to Hogwarts with me? You haven’t been there, and I think it’ll be a nice experience for you.” Hermione realized this was breaking the rules, but she wanted Luz to be happy. “Sure! I’d like to see how Hogwarts works!” Luz exclaimed happily. “Well, I could tell my parents that you could tag along, and then you’ll sneak on the train that way, I guess,” Hermione thought out loud. “Come on, I’ll tell my parents.” She ran towards her house and entered as Luz watched. Hermione came out of her house after a few minutes, shouting, “You can come to King’s Cross with us, Luz! Follow me!” Hermione ran to her parents’ car, Luz behind her. Hermione’s things were already loaded into the back of the car, and Hermione ducked inside, motioning for Luz to get in. Hermione’s parents got in the front seats, and then they set off for King’s Cross.
Once they reached the station, Hermione looked around. A lot of people were nearby. “Mom, Dad, I’ll go now, thanks! Luz, hurry! Alright, just do what I do, and we’ll be fine!” Hermione ran towards the barrier in between platform nine and ten, and then disappeared. Luz hurried after her and went through the wall, finding herself in Platform Nine and Three-Quarters. She heard a bunch of meows from cats sneaking around people’s ankles and hoots from owls in their cages. People were loading their trunks into the train, and Hermione motioned for Luz to follow. Hermione lifted her trunk into a compartment and sat down in there, Luz following her and sitting down there as well. “Stay hidden,” Hermione whispered, and left the compartment to look for someone. A few minutes later, Hermione returned with two boys following her. “This is Luz! I thought that she would like to visit Hogwarts for a while, and then return home.” “Hermione, I don’t think it’ll work that way,” one of them said. “It will, Harry, as long as we can get Floo Powder,” Hermione responded. The other person was searching his pockets for something. “Hey, look! I have a bit of Floo Powder in my pockets!” “Thanks, Ron.” Hermione took the Floo Powder and then they all sat down, Luz looking outside the window. Harry and Ron were putting their things in the luggage rack and then sat back down, all of them besides Luz chatting with each other. They felt the train move and pick up speed. Luz opened the window and poked her head outside. The train was pulling out of the station and then it turned the corner, emerging into bright sunlight. “So… how long will it take to get there?” Luz asked Hermione quietly. “A few hours, probably in the evening,” Hermione replied. Harry was looking through his trunk and took a thin, silvery-gray cloak and handed it to Luz. “Put it on, that way no one will see you if anyone comes in.” Luz nodded and put it on, and vanished from their view. Luz realized she was now invisible and took this as a chance to take a nap on the way to Hogwarts. Luz closed her eyes and rested her head against the wall, falling asleep soon after.
Luz woke up suddenly and sat up, looking around. The compartment door was open, and Hermione was the only one in the compartment. She was eating something- a frog .Luz yawned and whispered, “Hey Hermione, what are you eating?” Hermione jumped and looked around. “Oh, it’s you, Luz. I’m eating a Chocolate Frog! It’s a candy we have in the wizarding world. I have other candies too,” She motioned to a small pile of other sweets. “You can have some if you’d like!” Luz reached out for a frog-shaped wrapper, which was the Chocolate Frog candy that Hermione was eating. Luz unwrapped it and a card fell out of the wrapper and she picked it up. “Hey, what’s this?” Luz asked Hermione as Harry and Ron reentered the compartment and shut the door behind them. “Oh, that’s a Chocolate Frog card! You can start a collection if you’d like.” Luz shook her head and handed Hermione the card, who took it and read the back of it. “Hey, Harry, Ron, would any of you want the card?” Harry nodded and took the card, stuffing it in his trunk as Luz hid herself under the cloak again, finishing the Chocolate Frog and going back to her nap.
Luz woke up and looked outside the window. The sun was setting and there was a nice, orange glow streaming in through the window. Hermione was asleep and Harry and Ron were talking quietly with each other, about a sport that was called Quidditch. The train began to slow down and a huge castle came in view. Hermione woke up and looked outside the window. The train stopped at a platform and then there was a rumble of people pulling down their things from the racks as Hermione, Harry, and Ron did the same. They all left the compartment, Luz following them quietly. She took off the cloak so they could see her. No one noticed Luz, everyone was too busy trying to get into a carriage. Harry, Ron, and Hermione found an empty carriage and climbed inside, and Luz followed them. The carriages began to move towards Hogwarts and after a while, the carriages came to a halt and the four of them got out and ran inside the castle. Luz was amazed but then they heard a voice behind them. “Who are you?” They all turned around in horror and spotted someone running towards them. Hermione grabbed Luz and pulled her away. “Hurry, go in the fireplace and shout where you want to go!” Hermione threw the Floo Powder in a fireplace and the fires turned an emerald green. Luz did as she was told and reappeared in a shack, where she got out the key to the portal to the Boiling Isles and pressed it. A door appeared out of nowhere as Hermione stumbled out of the fireplace. Luz pulled Hermione into the door, which closed and disappeared.
Hermione was confused and Luz looked around. “Okay, I think we’re safe here.”
“Are you?”
Luz turned around and saw members of the Emperor’s Coven and backed away slowly, searching for her glyphs in her pockets, but didn’t find any. Hermione was frozen with shock and shakily raised her wand and shouted, “STUPEFY!” She grabbed Luz and ran away, not sure where she was going but intended to get as far away as possible. (1159 words)

thank you notes!

horror cabin members: you guys are so amazing! I enjoyed being in the same cabin with you all! when someone was in need of motivation or encouragement, you were there and that was so nice

pi: you were an amazing leader! you also encouraged us to finish the dailies or weeklies (you actually encouraged me to finish the weekly today! and I got it done! :>) and you did an amazing job in leading the cabin! I enjoyed being in your cabin this session

cae: AMAZING CO-LEADER! just like pi, you helped out and encouraged the cabin to complete things! during cabin wars, you helped out a lot and supported us during the wars while still contributing to the wars yourself! very pog

pie: horror cabin’s other (great) co-leader! sadly, I didn’t get to know you well, but you were still an amazing co-leader

hosts and co-hosts: how do you manage to organize all this? you all are amazing and are the ones that run swc, and without you, swc would be very chaotic (if it isn’t already, but in a good way :>)

the other leaders+co’s: great job on leading/co-leading your cabins! I'm sure your campers enjoyed being in your cabins

thriller because… rivals hehe: I had great pleasure warring you at 12:00 am until i realized that the war wasn’t valid. still enjoyed that though >:> yay rivalry

the other cabins: great job! no matter what place you’re in on the leaderboard, each cabin did fantastic!

all the campers: you’re all amazing! without you, swc wouldn’t be as lively as it is. nice job!