( notice: this is set in the world of Percy Jackson with greeks gods and dryads )
Her tree has always been perfect, lovely green leaves and thick tough bark. Willow her best friend wasn't so tidy she had had two leaf infections in the last two weeks! The same went with her attitude she was more easygoing and playful then Brooke, Brooke was more careful and serious. But they had one thing in common they both loved adventure. They were very different but best friends ( Yes I realize that's very cheesy XD ) “ ACK! There are three beetles on me! ” She squealed
“You are getting untidy ms tidy! ” Willow said jokingly
“ Hey! You just had a bark infection for almost a year. So… HA! ” Brooke whacked her
Willow smiled “ I'm just keeping you on your toes or in our case ROOTS! Get it?! ” She tried to keep a straight face but it was kinda funny. she laughed then heard a crack and she mouthed ‘hide!’ to willow. They both melted into their trees.
“ Eli? ” Willow called when there was no reply but what sounded like a stumble? “ That you? ” Willow called out again. There was another stumble then a yelp
“ Yeah! It's just me! ” They come out of their trees and sighed
“ You almost gave me a panic attack Eli! ” she scolded
“ Sorry Brooke ” he smiled. Then willow bounded up and gave him a hug
“ Hello,” she said bright and cheery
“ Hello to you to willow! ” Willow let him go. Eli was a friend, a son of Hephaestus they met a year ago when he was about to pluck some branches from Willows tree she woke up in a hurry and yelled at him. They soon become friends and hang out regularly with Willow and Brooke. He wore a gray hoodie with a pair of washed-out jeans, and almond his chipmunk popped out of his pocket.
“ Why hello little guy! ” she said
“ GIRL ” Eli corrected with a frown, she shrugged. “ Anyway ” he sat down “ Lets talk ”

Don't insult it! I just want constructive feedback and for you to read it!

It's pretty cool! I like it so far.

mythfan9 wrote:

Don't insult it! I just want constructive feedback and for you to read it!

I love it! It's really good!!! I actually got inspired from our RP to write a book with Greek gods and stuff like that. Yours is way different than mine though I wanna know what' they're gonna talk about!! And tip: Make the chapters a little longer. ( Only if you want to though. That's just what I do. )
~ Jackie

Yeah, I should do that… It just kinda took forever. XD