EPISODE 1

(Lilian Duuvan is standing outside of a house, writing on a clipboard. A woman is sobbing in the doorway. An officer, Fredrik Graves, walks by.)

Lilian: Talk to me, Graves.

Fredrik: It looks to me like the motive was money. Our prime suspect is the brother.

Lilian: Alright, get the brother down to the station for questioning.

(Toby is watching in his bedroom. He’s set up binoculars and some kind of listening device)

Toby: (Amused and frustrated) The brother? Really? How stupid can you get?

(He stuffs a bunch of photographs into a bag and runs out of the room. Toby’s mother, Gwen, is watching the news, agast. She notices Toby run by.)

Gwen: Toby? Where are you going?

Toby: Just to the police station, I’ll be back before Midnight.

Gwen: Toby, absolutely not! There was a murder in our neighborhood! You’re not going anywhere!

Toby: Okay, see you later, love you, buh bye! (He’s outside in a flash, hopping onto his bike.)

Toby: (scoffing, amused) The brother.

(Scene change. He pulls up to the station and stumbles off his bike. An officer on break outside snickers at him, but Toby doesn’t notice. He runs inside. Lilian is behind a desk.)

Toby: Officer Duuvan.

Lilian: Hello? Oh, I’m sorry. We’re not doing tours right now. We’ve got some pretty danger-

(Toby interjects, pulling out pictures and laying them on the desk)

Toby: You’re wrong about Derec Green’s murderer. It’s not his brother. It’s the mailman, Jebidiah Thorup. Derec put him out of work seven months ago when -

(Now Lilian interrupts)

Lilian: So you’re the Tomson kid. They said I’d hear from you sooner or later. Apparently most of my department is afraid to be rude to a kid, but I’m not. We’re busy, and I’m only going to say this once. Buzz off.

Toby: But, I’ve got all the evidence right here.

Lilian: Leave detective work to the grown-ups, kid.

(Scene change. Carly Kilroe is driving in a city setting, stuck in awful traffic. Isabelle is sitting in the front seat, on her phone. Frey is in the back, starting to draw something on a sketchbook.)

Carly: Come on, people! Move! The light’s green for crying out loud.

Frey: (Sarcastic, dry) Wow, Mom. Maybe you need to honk more. Loud noises will totally dissolve the traffic. I wonder why no one’s thought of it before?

Carly: (Composing herself) I know it’s different, but we’re going to have to get used to it. There just wasn’t any more work for me in Ruralsburg.

Frey: I get it, but, seriously. Does the phrase ‘happy medium’ mean nothing? Can’t you join a police force in a suburb, maybe?

Carly: New Yorkadelphia has the highest crime rate in America, Frey. It’s perfect. (Suddenly noticing a car in front of her) Turn signals, people! Turn signals! I’m a registered cop!

(Scene change. Carly is on the phone in the background.)

Carly: Yeah, we just got here. We’re dealing with the sleeping bags now. Yep. I’m going to the station in the morning and the kids are going to start school.

(The family is in a small house, filled with boxes. Belle is unpacking stuff. Frey sits in a corner and works on her drawing. Belle tosses a sleeping bag at Frey.)

Frey: Careful!

Belle: Come on, Frey. Help out. It’s almost midnight and we’re going to have to wake up early tomorrow.

Frey: Fine.

(Scene change. Nigel sits in a padded room, eyes closed. Clocks can be heard in the background. Suddenly everything goes silent and his eyes open.)

Nigel: (Ominous) It’s beginning.

(To be continued! Credits)

(EP BREAK)

EPISODE 2
(Diana is sitting in a dimly lit room. There’s a blue rim light on her face. She looks emptily towards a computer screen. On it is a number of tabs, including a pixelated image and loading bar and a map. A little red light starts flashing on the map. Diana’s expression changes into something of interest. Her fingers fly across the keyboard. She inputs “Coordinates: 33’12” 54’” and “October 5th 2023” into a spreadsheet filled with other locations and dates. She minimizes the spreadsheet and the loading bar completes revealing a picture of Frey. Black. Stroke of Twelve Theme.)
(Toby is in his classroom. The other kids are all chatting. Strangely all the chairs adjacent to Toby are empty. He slowly scans the room, remembering all the other children’s ‘stats’ when he sees them. He sighs, bored. Outside the class room, Frey is giving herself a pep talk)

Frey: Okay, Frey. Just avoid people and you'll be fine. Do that speed reading trick so people think you're weird. Separate, but safe…

(Gwen walks up to the door and then the two of them enter the classroom. Toby leans forward interested. His empty stat chart gets filled as he learns about Frey.)

Gwen: Alright, everyone. Please welcome Ms. Frey Kilroe. Her family just moved here, so please try to make her feel welcome. (She turns to Frey) Just choose any seat.

(Frey looks thoughtfully at the large number of empty seats next to Toby and immediately sits next to him. Gwen turns and starts writing on the board.)

Gwen: Meghan? Would you please read page 47 aloud?

Meghan: Ionic bonding is the complete transfer of valence electrons to…

(She is drowned out. Frey turns to Toby. She offers her hand.)

Frey: Hi. I’m Frey.

(Toby glances in her direction, but then turns back to the textbook.)

Toby: I heard.

Frey: Oookay.

(She pulls back her hand.)

Gwen: Thank you, Meghan. We’ve got a lab planned for today, everyone choose a partner. I’ll start handing out the supplies. And put on your safety goggles.

Frey: Want to be partners, Bob?

Toby: Bob? What?

Frey: I mean, I have to call you something and you haven’t introduced yourself yet, so your name’s Bob until further notice.

Toby: My name’s Tobias. But, I’d really rather you find someone else to partner with.

Frey: Ouch. No offence, but nobody else is exactly lining up to work with you.

Toby: Good. You are all idiots and I work alone.

Frey: Wow, so edgy. But, seriously, the teacher said this was a group assignment and everyone else has already buddied up.

Toby: Oh, of course. You screwed up the perfect odd-number of students.

(Gwen finally walks up to their table.)

Gwen: Ms. Kilroe, I don’t mind if you want to join someone else and make a group of three.

Frey: Nah, Tobias is funny. I don’t mind annoying him more for now.

Gwen: Oookay… Toby, help Ms. Kilroe catch up to where we are now, please.

Toby: Well, that’s going to waste a bunch of my time.

Gwen: Be nice, Toby, or God help me.

Toby: God will not help you.

(Gwen takes a deep breath and walks on. Frey takes the textbook and starts flipping through the pages.)

Toby: So, so far we’ve discussed the differences betwe-

Frey: London dispersion forces, hydrogen bonds, ionic bonds, got it. Easy.

Toby: Did… you just… read that?

Frey: Yup.

Toby: That fast? How?

Frey: Well, I didn’t want to waste a bunch of your time. So we can get on to the actual experiment now.

(Toby’s internal threat measurement stat turns from ‘unknown’ to ‘medium’.)

Frey: Anyway, the experiment is pretty stupid. We’re just measuring heat outtake.

(Toby glances at Gwen and then leans towards Frey.)

Toby: Do you want to do a more interesting experiment?

Frey: What do you have in mind?

(Toby pulls superglue from a nearby shelf.)

Toby: If you put superglue on cotton, it catches on fire.

(He dumps a bunch of quitips into a graduated cylinder.)

Toby: I wonder how much heat this would produce?

Frey: Wait, Tobias, I don’t think this is such a great idea.

Toby: It’s fine. I do it at home all the time.

(He unscrews the lid of the super glue and pours it into the cylinder.)

Toby: Look at that!

(Frey’s eyes are fixed on the small fire that started. Toby looks at her, quizzically.)

Toby: Are you -

(Suddenly the glass shatters, sending flame everywhere, children shriek and Toby and Frey stumble back.)

Gwen: Holy!

(She quickly grabs the fire extinguisher and douses the flames.)

Gwen: What in the world were you thinking?!

Toby: I was…

Frey: I did it. I started the fire.

Gwen: Both of you, go to Mr. Davis’ office now. NOW I SAID.

(The two quickly scurry out the door. Once outside, the two slow down and walk in silence. Finally Toby breaks the quiet.)

Toby: Why did you take the blame?

Frey: Because, sooner or later, I will destroy something. May as well set up that expectation now.

Toby: What’s that supposed to mean?

(Focus on Threat level stat… It turns to “high” Frey smiles sadly, but shakes her head.)

Frey: I’m sorry. I won’t bug you any more. Thanks for letting me partner with you, Tobias.

(She takes a couple of steps ahead, but Toby grabs her arm.)

Toby: Call me Toby.

(EP Break)


EPISODE 3

(The clock ticks outside Nigel’s cell. Two officers, Steven and Blake stand in front of the door. From across the hallway, Dr. Kat West walks up to the door, followed by a Guard.)

Steven: Morning, Kat!

Kat: Morning! Oh, Steven, how’s Margaret?

Steven: She’s on bed rest. The baby’s due in just a few days.

Kat: Why, that’s wonderful!

(The door opens. Sitting in the center of the room is Nigel, eyes closed.)

Kat: Mr. Johnson! How are we doing today?

Nigel: You’re three minutes late.

Kat: Yes… Well, follow me, please, Mr. Johnson. It’s time for your checkup.

Nigel: I feel fine. Let’s skip it.

Kat: You know we can’t do that.

(Nigel opens his eyes finally and smiles.)

Nigel: Worth a shot.

(He stands and follows Kat and the Guard out of the room. The three enter the checkup room, but pass the bed and continue to the back, where Kat enters a code in the wall and an elevator opens up. The Guard pushes Nigel into the elevator. The three descend into the darkness. Black. Stroke of Twelve Theme. A light turns on above Nigel. Kat stands above him.)

Kat: So, will you talk this time?

Nigel: I’d love to talk. Isolation is boring. How’s the weather? I don’t have any windows so it’s a little tricky to -

(Suddenly Kat hits Nigel’s nose with a left hook. A little blood runs down his face. It's black.)

Nigel: Ow.

Kat: Where did you hide the Genmod children?

Nigel: Come now, Kat! I’ve withstanded five years of torture and brainwashing. Why would I start talking now? It’s time to face the music! I’m in control here! You’re never going to get what you need.

Kat: I'm trying to save the world, Nigel. You know better than anyone that GenMod minds are easily broken. You put the most powerful weapon in the world into the hands of babies! And if there was any shred of human decency in you, you'd tell me where the children are!

Nigel: If you had any shred of decency, you wouldn't be trying to murder kids.

Kat: Last chance, Nigel. Save the many by sacrificing the few.

Nigel: I can't make that trade, Dr. West.

(Kat passes him, and slowly starts laughing.)

Nigel: What’s so funny?

Kat: Oh, sorry. I’m just thinking of a news story I saw yesterday. I think you’d like it. Let’s watch.

(Kat points a remote past Nigel’s head and turns on a tv across from him.)

Nigel: For goodness sakes! You’ve already tried this. I thought you would have learned by now that I can’t be brainwashed…

(On the TV a reporter is speaking.)

Reporter: Thanks, Jim! Now for local news, we turn to Ruralsburg police department…

(The reporters words are lost as the camera focuses on Nigel’s heart rate monitor. It had been calm this whole time, now it starts beating frantically. Kat looks smuggly onward.)

Kat: How about this trade, Nigel? GenMods or your family?

(Cut to Belle in a school hallway. She’s holding a paper in front of her, looking very distraught.)

Belle: Room 213… Room 215… Where is room 214?! Why is this stupid school so big?!

(Belle’s eyes start tearing up and she turns against the wall.)

Aidan: Hey?

(Belle turns around startled, and wipes her eyes.)

Belle: Eep!

Aidan: Oh, I didn't mean to scare you!

Belle: I’m sorry, I…

Aidan: Hey, shh.. It’s okay. My name’s Aidan. I don’t recognize you, are you new?

Belle: Mmhm. I’m Belle. I just moved here. Away from all my friends. And I’ve never been in a city before. It’s so-

Aidan and Belle: Overwhelming?

Aidan: Trust me, I get it. It’s weird to be around so many people. (She notices the paper.) Oh, are you looking for 214? Here, follow me. I’ll show you where it is. (She offers her hand and Belle takes it, smiling slightly. As the two walk, Aidan’s eyes look yellow for a moment, before she blinks and they go back to blue.)

(Ep Break)

EPISODE 4
(A clock shows 3:42 pm. Frey is in her bedroom, sitting behind her bed. Outside in the kitchen, Carly is unpacking boxes. She pulls a photo from the box. It shows a younger Carly, holding the hand of little Belle. Standing next to her is a smiling man (who looks like a younger Nigel) with toddler Frey on his shoulders.)

Carly: We were so happy.

(A teardrop lands on the frame)

Carly (with a shaking voice): You’d know what to do. You always knew what to do. I miss you so much.

(She sits there with the photo, crying. Suddenly a knock startles her. With a sniff, she wipes her eyes, puts down the frame, and opens the door.)

Carly: Hello? (She looks down at Toby)

Toby: Carly Kilroe?

(From behind Carly, Frey’s door opens just a little.)

Toby: Is Frey here?

Carly: She’s grounded right no-

Toby: Because of the fire. It wasn’t her fault. Frey took the blame, but I was the one who messed up. Please don’t punish her for my mistake.

(Frey peeks from the door and down to her sketch book. It shows that scene drawn out. Black. Stroke Of Twelve Theme. Frey and Toby are walking down the street.)

Frey: You had a lot of gall coming to my house.

Toby: Well, despite what a lot of people say, I’m really not a bad person. I believe in justice.

Frey: That’s very… noble. Anyway, how come you aren’t grounded or anything? Your mom’s our teacher, right? She was enraged.

Toby: Oh, I am grounded. But, Mom won’t come check on me until 5:30 because of dinner, so I’ve got a couple hours to burn.

Frey: Toby!

Toby: The point of a punishment is so that I won’t do something again, right? Well, I just won't do it again and then I can skip the whole inconvenience of a punishment.

Frey: You’re a weird kid, Toby.

(Toby shrugs. They walk for a bit.)

Frey: I can't actually read super fast, by the way. It's a trick I do when I already know the content of a class.

Toby: You shouldn't have told me that. It ruins the trick.

Frey: I hate lying to people that I like.

(Toby's cheeks go a little red, but he obscures the view by fixing his glasses. A text notification is heard. Frey checks her phone.)

Toby: Well, aren’t you popular.

(The text reads “Hello, Johnson.”)

Frey: It’s just a wrong number. (She types “wrong number, sorry!” into the phone) Oh, carp. My phone’s about to die. Eh, whatever. Where are we going?

Toby: Arcade. It’s just around the corner!

(The two head off. Cut to Diana’s room. She is holding a phone. The two text messages are on it. She types, “Oh, isn’t this you?” into the text and uploads a photo of Frey. The photo shows her in her bedroom window. On Diana’s computer screen, Frey and Toby are playing some sort of arcade game. The image is black and white, like security footage. Diana smiles. In the arcade, Frey’s phone buzzes in her pocket, but then dies. Black. “Respawn” appears on the screen. Belle is playing a computer game. She’s got a headset on.)

Belle: Darn it! I swear you’re cheating, Aidan!

Aidan: Me? Never!

(Belle’s character respawns in the middle of a forest. She runs for a moment before Aidan’s character runs up and KOs Belle.)

Aidan: I thought you said you were good at this game!

Belle: I hate you so much.

(Aidan laughs over the headset)

Aidan: Oh, Belle, I gotta go.

Belle: Ok. See you at school.

(Aidan logs off. Cut to a dark alley way. Aidan walks into the darkness and moves a manhole cover. She’s in a strange building. A distorted voice is heard.)

Traveller: Where were you?

Aidan: Library. I was playing Minecraft on their computers.

Traveller: We are not here to play Minecraft. Or did you forget our objective?

Aidan: You don’t have to talk all evil spy-ish. I know what I’m doing.

Traveller: Good. Nigel Johnson is in Isolation Room 12. Are you ready for this?

Aidan: Trust me, T. I won’t let you down.

Traveller: Don't let the world down.

(Episode Break)


EPISODE 5
(The screen shows a phone battery charging. It finally turns on. “You have three missed messages”. Frey notices. She opens the messenger app to find this text conversation. “Hello, Johnson” “wrong number, sorry!” “Oh, isn’t this you? ” “The little firefly.” “Don’t worry, I won’t tell anyone as long as you don’t.” Frey looks out her window, startled. (SoT intro) She collapses against the wall, hypoventilating, before shakily replying. “What do you want?” Suddenly the phone rings with an unknown number.)

Frey: Hello?

Diana: Hi there, Firefly.

Frey: What do you want?

Diana: I want a lot of things. But, I’m sure I’ll get them later. Right now, I just want to help you, Firefly.

Frey: I don’t understand.

Diana: That’s okay. Most people don’t understand what I say. I’m much better with computers. Of course, I’m only nine. Imagine what someone with resources could find out about you, Firefly.

Frey: Stop calling me that.

Diana: Would you rather Frey Johnson?

Frey: That isn’t my name, either.

Diana: You sure about that?

Frey: I think you have the wrong person.

Diana: And I think that you are Frey Johnson. You were the first of your father, Nigel Johnson’s experimental children. You have a strange connection to fire that’s gotten you and your family into a lot of trouble. Of course Nigel’s in a mental institution somewhere and you just moved back to the city from some tiny little farm town. Any of this ringing a bell?

Frey: I.. don’t know.

Diana: Ask your mother about it sometime. She knows. Look, I don’t want to play games, Firefly. You are in grave grave danger. There’s a top secret government agency trying to track down Nigel’s experiments. Genetic modification in humans is highly illegal and, in our case, dangerous.

Frey: Who are you? How do you know this?

Diana: You can call me Hash. As for how I know this all… I told you, I’m good with computers. Very good with them. There are six of us, Firefly. You are not alone. We'll meet in person soon. In the meantime… choose your friends carefully. Some are liars.

(Diana hangs up)

Frey: Wait, I -

(She stares at her phone. Belle can be heard outside)

Belle: Frey? Frey have you seen my yellow scarf?

(She opens the door)

Belle: Did it end up in here? (She notices Frey's expression) Are you okay?

Frey: Yeah, of course. I think I saw your scarf in the kitchen.

Belle: Oh, great thanks! (Suddenly her face twitches)

Frey: Are you okay?

Belle: Yeah, it's just a twitch. It's nothing

Frey: You should tell Mom.

Belle: Yeah, I know I know

(Belle leaves and Frey opens a picture on her phone. It's the family picture. Zoom in on the man, cut to Nigel in the cell. Tears roll down his face.)

Nigel: I'm sorry. I'm so so sorry. I'm sorry. I'm sorry.

(Suddenly the door opens. Aidan stands there in a labcoat.)

Aidan: Good afternoon, Mr. Johnson.

Nigel: It is not a good afternoon, Doctor! You're ruining lives and I - (he suddenly realizes who is in the door) You're not Dr. West.

Aidan: No, she's sick today, so I'll be performing your check up. Is that okay?

(She leads Nigel outside the door. Guards Steven and Blake stand outside the cell)

Steven: Dude, what’s up with his tears? Aren’t black tears a sign of a Genmod?

Blake: He experimented on himself, changed his DNA and went crazy. He was arrested five years ago after he burnt down his house, killing his wife and two daughters.

Steven: That’s messed up.

(Cut back to Aidan and Nigel)

Nigel: This isn’t the way to the check up room.

Aidan: You’re right. We’ve got a chopper on the roof.

Nigel: What?

Aidan: We’re breaking you out of here.

Nigel: No! I can’t leave! Guards! Guards!

(He breaks away from Aidan and starts running back down the stairs. Suddenly an electric wall appears in front of him)

Aidan: Well, I hoped it wouldn’t come to this.

Steven: Hey, what’s going on?! What are you doing over here

Nigel: NO!

(Steven and Blake come running towards Aidan, who shoots a beam of electric energy towards them. They crumple onto the floor.)

Nigel: You’re one of them. The six children.

Aidan: Come on, Nigel! You don’t want to alert more guards, do you?

(The cage dissolves. Nigel runs after Aidan)

Nigel: What about those two?

Aidan: Oh, they’ll find the bodies soon.

Nigel: You killed them?!

Aidan: Keep moving! (As they run, all the security cameras spark out)

Nigel: You’re a monster! My work was never supposed to lead to this!

Aidan: What’s the big deal? It’s two dead guards. I’m saving your life, Nigel! You’re welcome!

Nigel: They were people! With families! You left one with a widow and newborn!

Aidan: What about your family, Nigel?

(They end up on the roof. Nigel squints and shields his eyes)

Nigel: I'm protecting them by being here.

Aidan: Isabelle is dying!

(Nigel stops)

Nigel: What?

Aidan: In two months Isabelle is going to have another seizure. This one will kill her. Your research was the only thing going to keep her alive.

Nigel: How could you know that?

Aidan: I don’t know how much I can tell you right now, Nigel. Come with me, please. You need to talk to my employer, Traveller.

(Nigel reluctantly steps into the helicopter. Aidan sits in the driver’s seat)

Nigel: You’re too old to be one of the six. They shouldn’t be any older than twelve.

Aidan: Traveller is going to answer all of your questions.

Nigel: Okay.. . (He leans against the wall and rolls into a ball.)

(Fade out to black)


EPISODE 6
(Black screen. Friend's voice is heard.)
Friend: Niiiigel… Oh Niiiigel.

(A high pitched whine is heard. Nigel is in a black nothingness.)

Nigel: Not again.

(A piercing red smile comes out of the darkness.)

Friend: Well, hasn't it been awhile?

Nigel: Go away, monster.

Friend: (Friend comes into view. His proportions are elongated and where the face should be is a mask with a drawn face. He clicks his teeth in a tsk tsk tsk) I have a name, Nigel. It's Friend. You gave me it, remember?

Nigel: Are you even here? Am I just dreaming?

Friend: Oh your poor shattered mind. You've been cooped up too long. You can't even separate fact and fiction any more. Of course, you always liked the idea of blending the two.

Nigel: What do you want?

Friend: Oh, I just thought I'd drop in. Let you know I have a new besty now.

Nigel: Who?

Friend: Aw, look who's jelly. Don't worry Nigel. (whispered into his ear) I've kept it in the family.

(Nigel wakes up with a start. Intro)

Aidan: Follow me, Nigel.

(The two proceed to a dark alley)

Nigel: Isn't a chopper a bit conspicuous?

(Aidan points her hand behind her and the helicopter fades.)

Aidan: It's been modded with invisibility tech. (They make it to the manhole.) After you.

(They climb down into darkness. Traveller sits in the shadows.)

Traveller: Nigel Johnson.

Nigel: Are you the employer?

Traveller: Yes. Call me Traveller.

Nigel: What do you have to do with my family? I want a straight answer.

Traveller: Of course. I -

Nigel: And take off your mask, please. It brings back bad memories.

(Traveller sighs, but reaches for the mask.)

Traveller: I warn you, I'm not a pretty sight.

(Traveller's face is revealed. All along his left side is a grotesque burn.)

Nigel: Thank you.

Traveller: As I was saying. Isabelle has a rare genetic disorder, not unlike epilepsy.

Nigel: I know, and I wouldn't have left if I didn't think it was under control.

Traveller: Do you know of a creature that calls itself Friend?

Nigel: I… have heard rumors…

Aidan: That thing can break into minds. It can mold people into whatever it wants. Completely unhindered. Completely unstoppable.

Traveller: Yes, and I have reason to believe that it will cause Isabelle's fatal seizure the day of the Midnight Festival.

Nigel: How could you possibly predict that?

Traveller: Aidan and I are not from your time.

Nigel: Time is a constant, the idea of a time machine is impossible.

Aidan: Actually it's not. I invented it, when I was nine or ten I think. In fact, little me is probably working on it right now.

Traveller: Technically it wasn't perfected until eight years from now, which is the time we're from.

Nigel: You're telling me you are from eight years in the future?

Traveller: You asked for a straight answer, Nigel. The day Isabelle dies is the night of the Cataclysm. Billions dead. New Yorkadelphia is barren. But we think that saving Isabelle from the clutches of Friend will stop the Cataclysm.

Nigel: So you plan to save the world, by keeping my daughter alive?

Traveller: Are you in?

Nigel: Yes. And I know one more person who is too. We need to find Kat West before it's too late.

(Cut to Dr. West in an office. She's on the phone. Zoom in on her desk. There's a peice of paperwork labeled “Kill Order” with a picture of Diana Graves, Frey Kilroe, and four other children that wouldn't be recognized at this time.

(End of season 1)

Also episode names just for fun:

Episode 1 - Pilot
Episode 2 - Bonding
Episode 3 - Kat And Mouse
Episode 4 - Hello, Johnson
Episode 5 - The Daughters
Episode 6 - The Plan

Ah It's so good! Definitely a little more creepy than most of the other scratch series. The transitions are really cool, and I think you did a good job of revealing enough for the reader/viewer to guess what is going on, but not know for sure. Since you sort of listened the six at the end, I'm wondering were Toby falls. What can he do? And where is this “Threat Stat”? Is Toby a robot or cyborg where he has a computer inside his eye or something? Lol, I really don't know, but it's intriguing. Also when you say it shows “that scene drawn out” (right when Toby comes to Frey's house) does that mean that Frey drew the future?
I can go through later and look for grammatical errors in the second and third episodes that might make it confusing for the voice actors. It's really good so far.

That's what I'm going for, so I'm glad! Thanks for looking at the script so far. (Episode 1 - 2 have already been recorded so I can't make any changes to them)

Lol, I don't mind people assuming Toby's a robot at this point in the series. SPOILER TECHNICALLY —> His “stat” skill will be explained later, but essentially, he's extremely observant and compiles information like a computer, but he's human. In fact, he's the only main cast that hasn't been genetically altered in some way XD

Yep, Frey draws the future. There's going to be a couple other places in the series where the pictures shown in the “Frey's sketchbook” project will match up to visuals.

Since you've now read up to where I've written, who's your favorite character?

For all those people who view this forum and find this interesting:
https://scratch.mit.edu/projects/335897014/ That's the first episode animated.

alchemy- wrote:

That's what I'm going for, so I'm glad! Thanks for looking at the script so far. (Episode 1 - 2 have already been recorded so I can't make any changes to them)

Lol, I don't mind people assuming Toby's a robot at this point in the series. SPOILER TECHNICALLY —> His “stat” skill will be explained later, but essentially, he's extremely observant and compiles information like a computer, but he's human. In fact, he's the only main cast that hasn't been genetically altered in some way XD

Yep, Frey draws the future. There's going to be a couple other places in the series where the pictures shown in the “Frey's sketchbook” project will match up to visuals.

Since you've now read up to where I've written, who's your favorite character?

Okay, I was just a little confused with Toby XD Because when you read it's a bit different than watching it.

My favorite character? Probably Frey bc she reminds me the most of me but that's not a great reason.

Okay I wasn't sure if ep 2 was already recorded, so I'll just take a look at 3 and 4 then when I get the chance

Yeah, I'm hoping to play Toby's observation like Sherlock's in the BBC series.

Thanks for taking the time to do this!

alchemy- wrote:

Yeah, I'm hoping to play Toby's observation like Sherlock's in the BBC series.

Thanks for taking the time to do this!

Or like Shawn from Psych (Idk if you watch that but it is my favorite tv series in the entire world and I just love it so much thtghshdth)

Oh np! I love beta reading good scripts. They're so interesting!

Oooh, I'm rewatching Psych right now actually XD

I'm glad you like it. Although I'm worried that it might be too dark for this website… I might refine it more and put it on youtube.

alchemy- wrote:

Oooh, I'm rewatching Psych right now actually XD

I'm glad you like it. Although I'm worried that it might be too dark for this website… I might refine it more and put it on youtube.

Yeah, it might be a little too dark. It depends on how you draw it.

OMG Psych is my favorite series! No one of this website watches it bc it's a little mature for most scratchers. AHHH! I can't believe you watch it. I love it soo much. I'm only one season 4 though But it's amazing! Have you seen the musical? I'm trying to get Dren to watch it, but knowing him, he'll only watch musicals and Idk if the musical is any good.

I adore psych. I convinced my drama class to reinact an episode of it for one of our projects, which was so much fun. I have seen the musical, but it's only good if you've seen the series because it resolves a returning villain's arch.

alchemy- wrote:

I adore psych. I convinced my drama class to reinact an episode of it for one of our projects, which was so much fun. I have seen the musical, but it's only good if you've seen the series because it resolves a returning villain's arch.

Ooh I'm so excited to see the musical. I want to see all the episodes but I don't want to finish the series obviously XD That sounds like a lot of fun

I watched them all a few years ago, but I don't remember everything so I'm rewatching. Only on the third episode this time around though XD