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Link: https://scratch.mit.edu/discuss/topic/365982/?page=1#post-3655353

LotusLavender wrote:

Hi! I'm LotusLavender, your shop ranker at the SRP, who are ranking your shop through a recent partnership with the SPA of which you are a member of. Please wait a moment while I grade your shop.

Alright, thank you!

bump lol

This shop gets 25/30! Your shop is relatively new so some things that I would usually look at weren't relevant yet. Your Front Page is beautiful and represents your shop wonderfully! Have you thought about putting your banners in signatures? In all, your shop is brilliantly set up and just needs orders to come in and prove how great you'll be. Anyway, I loved looking at your shop and I look forward to ranking it again soon!

LotusLavender wrote:

This shop gets 25/30! Your shop is relatively new so some things that I would usually look at weren't relevant yet. Your Front Page is beautiful and represents your shop wonderfully! Have you thought about putting your banners in signatures? In all, your shop is brilliantly set up and just needs orders to come in and prove how great you'll be. Anyway, I loved looking at your shop and I look forward to ranking it again soon!

Thank you so much! Yeah, we haven't really been all that busy, but the staff here is great! And I will totally take your suggestions into consideration

Order Form:
Username: insomniaxx
What You're Ordering: Game Storyline
Description: I would like a storyline for a game where you help two cats grow their supermarket company, but I don't want it to be just a generic tycoon game.
Deadline: Saturday of next week
Anything Else? Clarity
Have you Read the Terms of Use? Yes

insomniaxx wrote:

Order Form:
Username: insomniaxx
What You're Ordering: Game Storyline
Description: I would like a storyline for a game where you help two cats grow their supermarket company, but I don't want it to be just a generic tycoon game.
Deadline: Saturday of next week
Anything Else? Clarity
Have you Read the Terms of Use? Yes

One of our employees will work on your order right away Thank you for shopping at Pen to Paper!
(Heehee, also bump)

insomniaxx wrote:

Order Form:
Username: insomniaxx
What You're Ordering: Game Storyline
Description: I would like a storyline for a game where you help two cats grow their supermarket company, but I don't want it to be just a generic tycoon game.
Deadline: Saturday of next week
Anything Else? Clarity
Have you Read the Terms of Use? Yes

I think I can take this order, I'll get to work!

EIephant_Lover wrote:

insomniaxx wrote:

Order Form:
Username: insomniaxx
What You're Ordering: Game Storyline
Description: I would like a storyline for a game where you help two cats grow their supermarket company, but I don't want it to be just a generic tycoon game.
Deadline: Saturday of next week
Anything Else? Clarity
Have you Read the Terms of Use? Yes

I think I can take this order, I'll get to work!

I've completed this order!

Check it out here: https://scratch.mit.edu/discuss/topic/368838/?page=1#post-3692294

Thanks so much for ordering at Pen to Paper, be sure to fill out the review form.

EIephant_Lover wrote:

EIephant_Lover wrote:

insomniaxx wrote:

Order Form:
Username: insomniaxx
What You're Ordering: Game Storyline
Description: I would like a storyline for a game where you help two cats grow their supermarket company, but I don't want it to be just a generic tycoon game.
Deadline: Saturday of next week
Anything Else? Clarity
Have you Read the Terms of Use? Yes

I think I can take this order, I'll get to work!

I've completed this order!

Check it out here: https://scratch.mit.edu/discuss/topic/368838/?page=1#post-3692294

Thanks so much for ordering at Pen to Paper, be sure to fill out the review form.

Great job! I think you did fantastically. Thanks a bunch. I'll take that order off of the main post.
bump lol

Order Form:
Username: Neggit
What You're Ordering: I would like to to read and give feedback on my script.
Description: Story is in the next page.
Deadline: As soon as you can.
Anything Else? Just tell me how you like the script and tell me what changes I should make.
Have you Read the Terms of Use? Yes

The Babysitting Escapade - A movie coming to Scratch on New Year's Day
Mixie and Spoore are sitting in the house playing with toys. They are building with wooden building blocks.
Spoore: Look, I built a hamburger!
Mixie: I made a tree!
Spoore: Your tree looks like a yummy lollipop!
The mailman arrives and slides some letters through the mail slot.
Spoore: Let’s see if we got the new cooking magazine!
He looks through the papers.
Spoore: No food magazine. Here’s a letter. It says: To Agent 551.
Mixie: Open it!
Spoore: It says: To Agent 551, this is the boss. I have set my plan up to rule the world on Monday.
I have created a set of laws that everyone except me and my faithful henchmen must follow!
Number one: No planting trees!
Number two: No eating anything yummy!
Number three: Always bow down to me!
Number four: Tell everyone that I am the best ruler ever!
Number five: Never disagree with anything I say!
If people break any of these laws, I will throw them in the dungeon. FOREVER!!!
From Mister Spooky

Mixie: This doesn’t sound good! This spooky guy wants to make us stop eating yummy food! And we have to do everything he says! What do we do?
Spoore: Mom and Dad will know what to do. They should be home from the store any minute.
The twins continue to play with their blocks until their parents come home.
Mixie: Mom! Dad! Mister Spooky is going to take over the world and make us follow all his evil laws! He says we can’t eat anything yummy, and we can’t plant any trees!
Mom laughs.
Mom: You have an active imagination!
Spoore: No, we aren’t pretending! Mister Spooky is real!
Mom: You twins have been watching too much TV!
Dad: Let’s go to the new pizza place. You’ll forget all about the evil dude.
Mixie and Spoore: Yay! Pizza!
Mixie and Spoore: Yay! Pizza!
The next day, Mixie and Spoore see their mom packing some clothes into her travel bag. Dad comes in the room with his bag packed up.
Spoore: Where are you going?
Dad: We’re taking a business trip to New York. We will be back by Tuesday.
Mom: At the store, I saw a poster for babysitters. We got some really good ones for you guys. You’ll have a great time!
Spoore: Why can’t we come with you?
Dad: It would cost too much money to take you with us. You will have lots of fun here with the babysitters.
Mixie: When are you leaving?
Dad: We need to get going right now! We don’t want to be late for the plane!
Mom: Bye, twins! Be good!
Mom and Dad go out the door and load their things into the car. They drive away.
Mixie and Spoore look at each other.
Mixie: Are you thinking what I’m thinking?
Spoore: Yes. Mom and Dad will be gone while Mister Spooky takes over the world. Hopefully our babysitters are superheroes.
The door opens and Emma and Callie walk in.
Emma: Hi! Are you Mixie and Spoore?
Mixie and Spoore: Yes we are!
Mixie and Spoore: Yes we are!
Callie: We are your babysitters! I am Callie, and this is Emma!
Mixie: Nice to meet you!
Spoore: We’ve never had a babysitter before!
Callie: We will take good care of you! Your parents said we can do anything we want to, as long as we take good care of you!
Emma: And we will!
Spoore: What about Mister Spooky?
Emma: Who’s Mister Spooky?
Spoore: He’s a creepy guy who wants to rule the world and make us do whatever he says!
Mixie: He even says we can’t eat anything that’s yummy!
Callie: This is super spooky! How did you find out?
Mixie: We got a letter!
Mixie hands Callie the letter.
Callie: Hmm, this is addressed to Agent 551, at 210 Juniper Way. That’s not your address.
Emma: It must have been delivered to the wrong house! And we’re lucky it did, or we would have no clue of the terrible events about to take place!
Callie: The return address is for Mr. Spooky, in California.
Spoore: Are we going to try and stop Mr. Spooky?
Callie: It would be quite a long flight!
Mixie: We need to try! I couldn’t live with all the evil laws!
Emma: Me either. Let’s do this!
Callie: Yes! I will book the tickets. Twins, you and Emma can decide on what you need to bring.
Callie gets out her phone and sits on the couch to book the tickets.
Emma helps the twins up and they look around the house for things they need.
Emma: We need toothbrushes!
Spoore: I will bring some toys to play with!
Mixie: And we should bring clothes for all the days.
Finally, the suitcase is packed with all of their clothes. Callie looks up from her phone.
Callie: Okay, it’s booked! We need an adult to get us on the plane, and my uncle works at the airport, so he should be able to help us.
Emma: Oh, yeah! Uncle Humphrey will help us! He is really nice.
Callie: Let’s go!
Emma and Callie put the twins in the car and buckle them in.
Callie starts the car and pulls out of the driveway. The journey has begun!
At the airport, the twins are getting hungry.
Spoore: I’m hungry!
Mixie: Let’s eat!
Emma: There’s a Subway in this airport. Let’s go!
They start walking towards the Subway. Then, Callie’s phone rings. She answers the call.
Callie: Hello?
Mom: Hey! Are the twins being good?
Callie: Yes, they are being really good! Thanks for hiring me and Emma!
Mom: I’m glad you’re having fun! Tell the twins I am just getting ready for the flight to New York! We are just finishing our sandwiches at Subway!
Callie looks at the twins.
The twins see their parents in the restaurant. They are coming towards the door where the twins and the babysitters are standing.
Callie: Oh, that’s fun!
Mixie: We need to get out of here! Our parents will send us right back home!
Callie grabs Mixie’s hand and Emma grabs Spoore’s.
They all run and hide in a broom closet.
Mom: That’s funny!
Callie: What’s funny?
Mom: I thought I just saw Mixie in the airport!
Callie: Oh, that is funny! It can’t be her, because I am watching her right now and she is here with me.
Mom: Our flight is boarding now. I will talk to you later.
Callie: Bye!
Emma: That was so close! We almost got caught!
Mixie: I was sure Mom would catch us.
Callie: Shh! I hear something!
The sounds of footsteps are coming towards them!
The handle of the broom closet turns.
The door flies open.
Uncle Humphrey: Woah! What are you doing in here, Emma and Callie?
Emma: We were looking for you, Uncle Humphrey!
Uncle Humphrey: Well, the broom closet isn’t the best place to look for me.
Uncle Humphrey laughs.
Uncle Humphrey: Why were you looking for me? Can I help you with something?
Callie: We are babysitting these guys.
Callie points to Mixie and Spoore.
Callie: Their parents are going to New York, so we decided to take the twins on a trip to California. Can you help us get on the plane?
Uncle Humphrey: Of course! You’d better hurry, though.
Mixie: I can’t go any more without food.
Spoore: Me either! I am so hungry I can’t go another step!
Emma: We’ll get you some food on the plane, but right now we don’t have time.
Emma picks up Spoore, and Callie picks up Mixie.
They follow Uncle Humphrey to the boarding area.
Uncle Humphrey gets on the plane with them.
Uncle Humphrey: Okay, I need to get back to work! Bye, guys! Have a fun trip!
Emma: We will!
Uncle Humphrey exits the plane. Soon, the engines start and the plane takes off.
Pilot: Hello, everyone! Welcome on the flight to California. Please buckle your seat belts. Sit back and relax. In a few minutes, you will be able to order some food and drinks. You will find a menu in the pouch in front of you.
Mixie: Oh good! Food!
Spoore takes the menu out and shows it to Mixie. The twins look at the menu to decide what they want.
Mixie: I think we should get Lay’s Potato Chips and some Root Beer.
Spoore: Me too! Let’s also get some Oatmeal!
Flight Attendant: Hello! Would you like any food or drinks?
Emma: Two waters please.
Spoore: Lay’s Potato Chips, Root Beer, and Brown Sugar Oatmeal.
Flight Attendant: Alright, I will be back with those soon.
The plane lands at the California airport.
Mixie: That was a long flight.
Emma: But now we are in California!
Callie: And we need to find a hotel so we can get the twins to bed.
They check into a Red Lion, and the desk clerk gives them a room key.
Spoore: I’m so tired!
Mixie: Me too!
Callie: You need to take a bath and brush your teeth first.
Callie gives the twins a bath while Emma unpacks their bags. Then, Callie and Emma brush the twins’ teeth.
In the morning, they wake up in their beds.
Mixie: Foooood! I’m so hungry! We had no dinner last night!
Spoore: Fooooood! Let’s go get breakfast!
Emma: Wow, you guys are already wide awake!
Callie: Let’s get you ready before we go down to breakfast.
The babysitters take the twins to the elevator. Emma pushes the button to open the door.
Mixie: Yay! The breakfast!
After all the food had been eaten, they all go outside.
Callie: We have plenty of days here, so let’s have some fun before we go destroy evil.
Emma: Yes, let’s go see the redwoods!
All of them get on a tour bus to see the redwoods.
They arrive at the park and get out of the bus.
Callie takes lots of photos at the park.
Spoore: Those big trees were awesome!
Mixie: I didn’t know anything could get so big!
Emma: I’ve always wanted to see the redwoods.
Callie: By the time we get back to our hotel, it will be night time and we will need to get some more sleep.
The bus picks them up and drives back to the hotel.
Later, Callie is at the store buying some dinner for the twins. She picks out an apple and puts it in the cart.
Callie: Hmm, I think the twins will probably want more food than this.
Callie steers the cart to the frozen foods aisle. She picks some Banquet dinners from the freezer and turns around. Koymi Posters and John Stone are standing in front of her.
Koymi Posters: Callie, I didn’t expect to see you here.
Callie: Hello, Mister Posters. Me and Emma are babysitting and we decided to bring the twins here for a vacation.
John Stone: Twins? You mean Mixie and Spoore?
Callie: Oh, hi Mr. Stone! Yes, we are babysitting Mixie and Spoore while their parents are in New York.
Koymi Posters chuckles.
Callie notices that Mr. Posters is pushing a shopping cart full of electronic gadgets, and John Stone also is pushing a cart full of similar gadgets.
Callie: What are those for, Mr. Posters?
Koymi Posters: My Japanese class needs some change. Starting Monday, I have some interesting additions to make the class better for everyone.
Callie: Cool! I’m excited.
Koymi Posters: It was nice talking to you, Callie. I’d better let you go now.
John Stone: You should hurry and get back to your hotel. I am sure the twins are extremely hungry.
Callie: I bet you’re right. Bye!
Koymi Posters: Oh, I got this watch for a friend, but they already had this same watch, and I still have it with me. Here, you can have the watch.
Callie: Thanks, Mr. Posters! Bye!
Callie opens the door. Mixie and Spoore are sitting on the floor.
Spoore: Callie, did you bring us food?
Callie: Yes, I got you these!
Callie holds up the Banquet dinners.
Spoore: Let’s eat them now!
Callie: I need to microwave them first.
Callie puts the dinners in the microwave and sits on the bed by Emma.
Callie: Guess what, Em?
Emma: What?
Callie: I saw Mr. Posters and Mr. Stone at Walmart!
Emma: Really? Why are they here? Did you tell them about Mr. Spooky?
Callie: No, but they wouldn’t have believed it if I did!
Emma: It is very strange that they happen to be in the same place where Mr. Spooky is, right before he plans to rule the world.
Callie: They were just here to pick up some new supplies for Poster’s Japanese class.
Emma: Who flies for three hours to buy some things that could easily be picked up at the Walmart 5 minutes away or ordered on Amazon?
Callie: It is kind of suspicious. But does our Japanese teacher or the waiter at Denny’s seem like they could be supervillains helping to put the world under an evil empire?
Emma: Wait, Mr. Stone lives on Juniper Way! Remember the address on the envelope? He could be Agent 551, and Mr. Posters could be another bad henchman.
Callie: Does anyone have the envelope from Mr. Spooky?
Mixie: We brought it with us! Here you go. But just so you know, I am really hungry now!
Callie: 210 Juniper Way. Let me look that up on Google Earth.
She searches for the address and zooms in.
Emma: Yep, that’s where Mr. Stone lives. So he is an evil guy working for Mr. Spooky.
Callie: This is not good!
Spoore: What’s not good?
Callie: The friendly waiter at Denny’s is really a spy for Mr. Spooky!
Mixie: John is an evil spy? But he’s a good guy! He always gives us extra pancakes and lots of butter!
Emma: We need to hurry and stop Mr. Spooky soon, or else Mr. Stone could ruin our plan.
Callie: What plan? We don’t even know where to start!
Mixie: We could go to Mr. Spooky’s address from the letter.
Callie: Great idea! Let’s leave tomorrow morning!
Spoore: But we need to get breakfast first!
Mixie: Oh, the microwave stopped. Our food is done!
Spoore: Let’s go eat on the balcony.
The twins are eating their dinners on the balcony.
Spoore: Do you smell that?
Mixie: It smells like someone overcooking some food.
Spoore: Look! A guy is sitting out there with some fire.
Emma comes onto the balcony. She sees that the guy is Mr. Posters who is burning incense on his hotel balcony.
Emma: Callie! It’s Mr. Posters!
Callie: No way! This is getting creepy!
Callie comes out and sees Mr. Posters on the balcony. Mr. Posters doesn’t see any of them. Then he pulls out his phone.
Koymi Posters: Hello, Agent 551? I’m sure the kids won’t be able to destroy the plan, but I think they know about it. I think the letter meant for you went to the wrong address. Those irritating little twins and their babysitters could ruin the plan.
There is a pause.
Koymi Posters: Meet me at the base tomorrow morning.
He hangs up the phone and goes inside.
Mixie: He called us irritating little twins.
Spoore: He is an irritating little man.
Emma: So now we know that both of them are working for Mister Spooky.
Callie: Mister Spooky changed the plan because of us. Mr. Poster must have tipped him off.
Spoore: We need to hurry then!
Mixie: Or we won’t get any more yummy food!
Callie: Being in Japanese class will be hard, now that I know the teacher is a villain!
The morning sun comes in the windows.
Emma: Ready to find Mister Spooky?
Spoore and Mixie: No!
Spoore and Mixie: No!
Spoore: We need foooood!
Mixie: We are sooo hungry!
Callie: How many times have you guys said that in all your life?
Mixie: I don’t know, but what I do know is that we need breakfast!
After breakfast, the twins and the babysitters are walking to the address on the envelope.
Emma: Here we are! This is the place.
Mixie: Where’s the base?
Callie: It is just an empty lot!
Emma: Maybe there’s a secret door in this old brick wall!
Callie: Press on the bricks to see if any open the secret door.
Callie and Emma start pushing on the bricks.
Mixie and Spoore find a rope on the ground.
Spoore: What is this? It looks like a spaghetti noodle!
Mixie: It’s a giant pasta noodle! Let’s pull it out!
Callie and Emma continue pressing on the bricks, while the twins pull the rope. Suddenly, the rope springs out of the ground and the brick wall opens up to reveal a hallway.
Callie: We did it! So there was a secret door.
Emma: All we needed to do was press on the bricks.
Spoore: We found a giant noodle.
Callie: Let’s go find Mister Spooky!
All of them cautiously enter the building. Without warning, the brick wall closes quickly behind them. They quickly continue.
They come out into a large room. Mr. Posters is sitting at a desk. A big button with POWER written on it sits next to the desk. The incense is burning next to him on the desk.
Emma points to a cabinet and they all go over to it. Emma climbs into the cabinet. Callie gets in after her.
Mixie: I don’t want to go in there! I can’t fit in the tiny cupboard!
Spoore: Me either!
Emma: You need to get in here or Mister Spooky will come find you and then, no more food.
Spoore and Mixie squeeze into the cabinet and Callie closes the door.
Mixie: It’s dark in here!
Emma: Shh! Someone will hear!
Callie: I still can’t believe Mr. Posters works for Mister Spooky.
Suddenly the cabinet door is yanked open. Mister Spooky is looking in at them.
Mister Spooky: No, I am not working for Mister Spooky.
Emma: You’re not?
Mister Spooky: No. I am Mister Spooky!
Mister Spooky laughs.
Mister Spooky: You all got it wrong. My plan is not to end the world. I want to make peace with anyone who will listen. That way, I can filter out the people who don’t want to listen to the emperor, and I will make the world a better more peaceful place for the loyal people.
Emma: Why do you call yourself Mr. Spooky then?
Mister Spooky laughs.
Mister Spooky: We all had to make code names while we came up with the plan. Mister Spooky is an anagram of my name, Koymi Posters. My actual emperor name would be Master Peace.
Emma: Is this some sort of joke?
Mister Spooky: Of course! It was all just a silly joke!
Callie: What is the point?
Mr. Spooky: Ah, well, I was just bored of teaching, so I wanted to do something fun to change up my boring life.
Come this way, I want to show you something.
Mr. Spooky leads them all to a small room. The room has a TV, fridge, microwave, bed, bathroom, and some furniture.
Spoore: What is this?
Mr. Spooky: Come inside and I will show you.
All of them go inside the place. Mr. Spooky presses a button on a remote and a prison door comes down on them.
Mr. Spooky walks away.
Emma: No! You tricked us!
Callie: We’re stuck in jail!
Mixie: At least there’s a fridge full of yummy stuff!
Spoore: There’s tons of yummy food in here!
Mixie and Spoore take out a pie each and gobble them down.
Callie: Mr. Spooky has tons and tons of other jail cells. He must have hundreds of people captured in here!
Emma: I hear someone coming!
Baffy opens the jail door and comes in. He is holding a box.
Baffy: Master Peace locked you in jail because you tried to ruin his plans. He did tell you part of the truth. Master Peace does want peace for everyone, including the people like you who tried to mess with his plans. He wants you to be comfortable here.
Emma: Will we be stuck in jail forever?
Baffy: You will forever be kept inside this building, but during the day, you can explore the complex as much as you’d like. This is like a whole city down here. You can have meals delivered right here, at your house, or you can go to one of the restaurants.
Spoore: Yum!
Baffy: There is a post office where you can send letters, but do not write to people telling them to break you out. You all get what you deserve down here, and the letters are checked before they go out.
Mixie: Can we send letters to our parents?
Baffy: We have already sent letters to both of your families. But you can if you would like.
Callie: What other places can we visit?
Baffy: There are parks, libraries, pools, and much more. You will see for yourselves when you go out.
Mixie: What’s in the box?
Baffy: In here is your delivery menu, room key, and some clothes for all of you.
Mixie takes out a pink shirt.
Mixie: Is this mine?
Baffy: Yep, I picked it out just for you!
Emma: This whole thing actually seems kind of cool.
Baffy: It is! As long as you follow Master Peace’s rules, you will have a great life down here.
Baffy leaves the room.
Callie: We have to escape!
Emma: These people are really powerful. If they catch us, what will happen?

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IntroducingW0ndr0us wrote:

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IntroducingW0ndr0us wrote:

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I'm so sorry; I've been super busy, and waiting for someone else to claim it, but I can take it and finish it ASAP. Thank you, and again, very sorry for the wait.

Order form
Username: Charizard746
What You're Ordering: Game story.
Description: You start in a cave and you’re in a world where you dont know where you are and theres a giant floating tower where the main antagonist lives.
Deadline: September 11th
Anything Else? Comment on my profile to contact me
Have you Read the Terms of Use? Yes, for clarity, I did read it.

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Neggit wrote:

IntroducingW0ndr0us wrote:

Neggit wrote:

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Your order is being placed into the unclaimed orders section, and an employee will claim it soon We'll have it done, ASAP!

How are you coming?

I'm so sorry; I've been super busy, and waiting for someone else to claim it, but I can take it and finish it ASAP. Thank you, and again, very sorry for the wait.

Thank you then!

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Username: Charizard746
What You're Ordering: Game story.
Description: You start in a cave and you’re in a world where you dont know where you are and theres a giant floating tower where the main antagonist lives.
Deadline: September 11th
Anything Else? Comment on my profile to contact me
Have you Read the Terms of Use? Yes, for clarity, I did read it.

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