I need a bit of help with my writing for school. This is what i have up to now. It would be great if some people good read it and give me feedback on it. Thank You!

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X_CarrotCode_X wrote:

I need a bit of help with my writing for school. This is what i have up to now. It would be great if some people good read it and give me feedback on it. Thank You!

https://cdn.discordapp.com/attachments/760671334748913726/877774598781956116/unknown.png

Hey!! I love it!! This is amazing. I really like how you were inside the puppy's head narrating! I have some constructive criticism though; try to use all of the puppy's senses to create a scene around your reader. You want to make the reader feel like they are there and know exactly how the character is feeling. I really liked the piece though! Keep up the good work!!

programmer204 wrote:

X_CarrotCode_X wrote:

I need a bit of help with my writing for school. This is what i have up to now. It would be great if some people good read it and give me feedback on it. Thank You!

https://cdn.discordapp.com/attachments/760671334748913726/877774598781956116/unknown.png

Hey!! I love it!! This is amazing. I really like how you were inside the puppy's head narrating! I have some constructive criticism though; try to use all of the puppy's senses to create a scene around your reader. You want to make the reader feel like they are there and know exactly how the character is feeling. I really liked the piece though! Keep up the good work!!

thank you! I was legit panicking cuz it was getting a bit boring and my finished piece is due today!