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Blobfish993
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1879: One short story that got out of my control and decided it wanted to be a book (^}_^)

So, this is 1879, as described up top ^. Uhm, yeah. So, here's what it's about:
It's about a man named Jacob (no, this ain't a Twilight fanfic, I stole my cousin's name. Love ya. Come visit me soon, and bring your guitar) who is somehow living forever, and he's trying to sort out what he did in his past, and how he can fix it and die. That sounds horrible, I know. It starts in 1879, then bounces around the late 1800s and the mid 1700s. It's pretty cool, actually. So, Jacob is trying to die, and in the meantime, he's… aww crud, what else is he trying to do? Jacob is… what, he's 153, but he's not a ghost, or a Time Lord, he just is, sooo…. this didn't look as great as it did in my head. Shut up. Lemme work with it. But yeah, that's the summary. I'll include add the characters and their bio's in a minute, and then, if you're lucky, you'll get an exerpt! One whole chapter! Oh! I forgot! The chapters are set up like, they don't say “Chapter 1: Jacob's Demise” or stuff like that. It's just, “1754” and then when that section's done, it goes to “1880” and then back to “1754” so that's really cool, I guess. Idk, lemme know how stupid it sounds, eh? Actually, I'm pretty pleased with myself, it's coming along much better than I thought, but I sit on my bed writing it and I'm like, “Wait, what was Alex doing? Where did Jacob go?” and stuff like that, so hush it

-Arachnid-
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1879: One short story that got out of my control and decided it wanted to be a book (^}_^)

Sounds great! Let me know when it's finished. I can't wait to read it!

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Blobfish993
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1879: One short story that got out of my control and decided it wanted to be a book (^}_^)

-Arachnid- wrote:

Sounds great! Let me know when it's finished. I can't wait to read it!
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1879: One short story that got out of my control and decided it wanted to be a book (^}_^)


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Blobfish993
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1879: One short story that got out of my control and decided it wanted to be a book (^}_^)

Alright! Here are the characters:

Name: Jacob Williams//Lives in: England//Gender: Male//Birthday: 02.11.1737//Age: 153 in 1890, 17 in 1754//Description: Blond hair, clean shaven face. Brown eyes. Average build, 5’9”. Wears brown pants, brown coat, white button-up shirt//Personality: Quiet, but will talk when provoked, sarcastic, loyal, very caring towards his younger
sister, Sara. Mischievous. Reads a lot//

Name: Sara Williams//Lives in: England//Gender: Female//Birthday: 06.01.1744//Age: 10 or 11//Description: Light red hair, shoulder length. Brown eyes. Wiry, small, and stronger than she looks. 4’7”. Wears clothes of the clothing, of the clothing type. JK, basically what Sarah Collins wears. My imagination isn’t the greatest at the moment//Personality: Bright, reads a lot, and kind.//

Name: Alexander “Alex” Collins//Lives in: England//Gender: Male//Birthday: 14. 08. 1863//Age: 27//Description: Brown hair, fair skin. Blue eyes. Muscular build, 6’2”. Wears black pants, blue button-up shirt, black coat//Personality: Talkative, kind, reads a lot. Strong, (more like natural teeth), quick on his feet, quick with a good comeback.//

Name: Cuthbert Forbes//Lives in: England//Gender: Male//Birthday: 13.07.1860//Age: 30
Description: Blond hair, thin blond mustache. Brown eyes. Average build, 5’10”. Wears typical police uniform//Personality: Sarcastic, fast on his feet. Very strong, and a top police chief. Caring towards his twin brother, Virgil.//

Name: Virgil Forbes//Lives in: England//Gender: Male//Birthday: 13.07.1860//Age: 30//Description: Dirty blond hair, clean shaven. A small scar across his cheek. Brown eyes. Average build, 5’9”. Wears typical police uniform//Personality: Also sarcastic. He enjoys picking on his twin brother, Cuthbert. Not as strong as Cuthbert, but he makes up for it with his brain. He too is a top police chief.//

Name: George Harker//Lives in: England//Gender: Male//Birthday: 31.05.1717//Age: 37// Description: Blond hair, light tan. Southern accent, blue eyes. Sturdily built, 6’0”. Wears white button-up shirt, black pants, black tailcoat//Personality: Curt, acts like he’s the
end-all and be-all, rude.//

Blobfish993
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1879: One short story that got out of my control and decided it wanted to be a book (^}_^)

OK, so, I need help figuring out what Jacob is… Erm, he's not:
A ghost
A Time Lord
A demon (Well…)
Any suggestions will be great?
EDIT: Honestly, anything.

Last edited by Blobfish993 (Aug. 14, 2017 22:19:34)


-Arachnid-
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1879: One short story that got out of my control and decided it wanted to be a book (^}_^)

Blobfish993 wrote:

OK, so, I need help figuring out what Jacob is… Erm, he's not:
A ghost
A Time Lord
A demon (Well…)
Any suggestions will be great?
EDIT: Honestly, anything.
A vampire?
Lol, said that cuz i'm reading a book called Department 19, by Will Hill. Look it up, tis' pretty good.

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Blobfish993
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1879: One short story that got out of my control and decided it wanted to be a book (^}_^)

-Arachnid- wrote:

Blobfish993 wrote:

OK, so, I need help figuring out what Jacob is… Erm, he's not:
A ghost
A Time Lord
A demon (Well…)
Any suggestions will be great?
EDIT: Honestly, anything.
A vampire?
Lol, said that cuz i'm reading a book called Department 19, by Will Hill. Look it up, tis' pretty good.
Hmm… I'm not sure. I don't think it'd tie into the story much, but I'll think about it!

jordan1060
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1879: One short story that got out of my control and decided it wanted to be a book (^}_^)


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Blobfish993
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1879: One short story that got out of my control and decided it wanted to be a book (^}_^)

jordan1060 wrote:

Mmm, thank you for that! I'll be sure to keep that in mind as I'm writing. Thanks

Blobfish993
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1879: One short story that got out of my control and decided it wanted to be a book (^}_^)

Hmm. Let's go over the list again. *brain farts*
Jacob is not:
1. A ghost (Ghosts can't kill. They're little moving sheets of see-through dust)
2. A vampire (Didn't work out well, -Arachnid-, thanks for the idea though)
3. A Remnant Posessed (They have a normal human lifespan, because as long as their human host is alive, they're alive)
4. A Time Lord (*grimaces* Not the greatest of thoughts that my sleep-deprived brain has ever had)
5. A demon (He does get posessed by one, though… ooooooh, idea)
Alright, so ignoring all that up there, maybe, just maybe, when Jacob becomes posessed by a demon, maybe it re-writes his DNA, and, verily and forsooth, he ends up immortal, and is trying to die, and ditdaditdadit… well?

Blobfish993
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1879: One short story that got out of my control and decided it wanted to be a book (^}_^)

Blobfish993 wrote:

Hmm. Let's go over the list again. *brain farts*
Jacob is not:
1. A ghost (Ghosts can't kill. They're little moving sheets of see-through dust)
2. A vampire (Didn't work out well, -Arachnid-, thanks for the idea though)
3. A Remnant Posessed (They have a normal human lifespan, because as long as their human host is alive, they're alive)
4. A Time Lord (*grimaces* Not the greatest of thoughts that my sleep-deprived brain has ever had)
5. A demon (He does get posessed by one, though… ooooooh, idea)
Alright, so ignoring all that up there, maybe, just maybe, when Jacob becomes posessed by a demon, maybe it re-writes his DNA, and, verily and forsooth, he ends up immortal, and is trying to die, and ditdaditdadit… well?
Amanda approves. Now to write it.

BFDCreator
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1879: One short story that got out of my control and decided it wanted to be a book (^}_^)

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Blobfish993
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1879: One short story that got out of my control and decided it wanted to be a book (^}_^)

BFDCreator wrote:

Sounds great!
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Aww, thanks!

Blobfish993
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1879: One short story that got out of my control and decided it wanted to be a book (^}_^)

1879

Jacob walked down a quiet street. It was dark, and he was alone. He stopped walking, and looked up at the moon. “Someday,” he whispered, almost to himself. “Someday, I will. Don’t worry.”
He continued down the street, only to be stopped by a little girl. She looked to be about ten, and was dressed in a nightgown and slippers. Her hair was loose around her shoulders, and her eyes were brown and frightened. “Sir,” she said, “can you help me?”
“What’s the matter?” Jacob asked, realizing the time had come.
“I-I can’t find my family,” she said, about to cry.
“Don’t worry,” he said, bending down. He could see her trembling, and, in one fluid motion, scooped her up in his arms. “I’ve got you.”

Ten Years Later, 1889
Sara sighed, watching the streets below. The cabbies honked and sputtered along, pedestrians dodging and ducking between each other and the cars, rain pattering the umbrellas, and the heads of those without. She sighed. Jacob was out, presumably running some errands. Only God knew when he’d be back.
The back door slammed. Sara jumped up, and raced downstairs, glad that Jacob was home. Automatically, she sensed something was wrong. Jacob never used the back door, that was only used by police to avoid a scene. She tried to keep the fear out of her voice as she called, “Jacob? Is that you? I thought you’d never-”
She cut short at the sight of Jacob, flanked by two policemen. They looked almost the same, except that one had a thin, blond mustache, and the other had a small scar on his cheek. Both were gripping Jacob’s arms, holding him upright. He was bruised and bloody, his hair matted. His clothes were dirty, and he looked tired. He struggled to gain breath, as if his lungs were punctured. “Sara,” he wheezed, “I have to tell you something.”
The policemen threw him on the ground, and he landed on his side, crying out from the impact. She ran to him, and kneeled by his side. “Jacob? Jacob, what’s happening?”
“Sara, I’m sorry. You need to wake up. Wake up, now!”
Sara blinked, and saw her room around her. It was very dark, and she had trouble seeing. She looked down, and saw her ten-year old body. “Jacob?” she called, her voice high and squeaky. A bright light appeared, causing her to cover her eyes. A man stepped out of the bright mass, and smiled. “Don’t worry,” he whispered. “I’ve got you.”

cs161397
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1879: One short story that got out of my control and decided it wanted to be a book (^}_^)

AHHHH!!! That is amazinnnnggggg!! Tell me more!!!

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Blobfish993
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1879: One short story that got out of my control and decided it wanted to be a book (^}_^)

cs161397 wrote:

AHHHH!!! That is amazinnnnggggg!! Tell me more!!!
More XD

cs161397
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1879: One short story that got out of my control and decided it wanted to be a book (^}_^)

Blobfish993 wrote:

cs161397 wrote:

AHHHH!!! That is amazinnnnggggg!! Tell me more!!!
More XD
*stares at it for 15 seconds* What are you talking abo- *gasps in realization* OH MY GOD YOU ARE A GENIUSSSSSS!!!!

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Blobfish993
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1879: One short story that got out of my control and decided it wanted to be a book (^}_^)

Blobfish993 wrote:

cs161397 wrote:

AHHHH!!! That is amazinnnnggggg!! Tell me more!!!
More XD
Ok, but seriously, you like?

cs161397
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1879: One short story that got out of my control and decided it wanted to be a book (^}_^)

yes yes yes yes yes yes yes yes!!! It's awesome! The plot is great, and your writing talent is amazing!!!

Last edited by cs161397 (Dec. 1, 2017 12:59:41)


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