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AhmadimuslimFOREVER
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swc megathread: march '25

Critique of : Unconditional love of a killer
Asked for general overview

Hi Kiara ! ^^ I really enjoyed reading this ; it was such an emotional and well written story , I’d give it a 9.5/10 or even a 10 ! Since you asked for a general overview I’ve started with my rating I’ll now move on to parts I liked and give feedback on them and then give feedback on parts or areas I think could be improved!

For a brief moment, it sounded like we were back in our bedroom, talking about our crushes and middle school drama.
For a brief moment, it felt like I was talking to the starry-eyed girl my sister once was.
For a brief moment, it felt like I wasn’t talking to a serial killer.


For a brief moment, it felt like everything was back to normal.

That just felt so very emotional to me ; the repetition which could have felt like a bit much anywhere else is perfect there ! It gives us a teeny bit of backstory of the narrator and his sister, although it doesn’t seem like much it has such a deeper sense that It definitely pulls on the readers heartstrings!

“I haven’t realized it- how many things I still want to do! There’s still- so many…So many things I want to do!”

I stared at her, shock plaguing my whole body. My bottom lip tremored, I backed away slightly. I stared at my sister, wide-eyed. I tried to convince myself she deserved to die. But no matter how long I looked at her, no matter how much I tried to make myself see a cold killer it didn’t work .
I only saw my sister.

That is so sad but so amazingly portrayed ; the reader sees a bit of the sister with a crack in the armour she showed before . It shows that although the narrator knows he should resent her he can’t the fact that he had to actually try to only see a killer just shows us how much he wishes it wasn’t true .
The narrator finally truly acknowledged that he doesn’t think of her as a killer but still his little sister.



I only heard my sister crying, pleading for her big brother to come back. Begging for her brother to be there with her. I heard her sob, a moment of weakness and vulnerability. Something I never expected to see on her after what she did, but even after what she did, I still wanted to love her.

Because she was my sister.

She was my sister and I left the room. I left the holding cell. I left and went home. I left my sister there, sobbing and crying for her brother

Wow , just wow that is so poignant ; it really brings tears to the readers eyes doesn’t it ? It gives the reader perhaps a sense of resentment toward the narrator for just abandoning his sister but turn although the reader knows the sister deserves they can’t bring themselves to think of her as inhuman not after how vulnerable she shows herself to be .



No one heard the cries from my sister the day of her execution, the day she died.
And no one heard my guttural sobs when her ashes appeared on my doorstep.

If the rest of the story didn’t make you emotional or cry this certainly would . I think ( including me ) the reader may have harboured a small hope that she might’ve not died but she did and the fact that no one was there with her makes it infinitely worse , the fact the even the brother cries makes it so much more emotional.

That ending was perfect and so deep you did an amazing job Kiara ! <3

Now I’ll give as much feedback as I can since this was honestly perfect .
Although there was a lot of vivid imagery you focused a lot on only one of the two characters perhaps you could make a balance ? I think it would’ve been even better if you had made even one sentence from the sisters perspective; it would’ve made the reader more empathetic. As far as I can see there aren’t any grammatical errors !

I had a lot of fun reading this so once again great job Kiara !




moosywoosy
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swc megathread: march '25

Interview Script: Meet Monty the Manticore!

{Scene: The Mascot Mania theme music blares as the audience cheers wildly. Asha steps onto the stage, microphone in hand, grinning mischievously.}
Asha: {with a wink to the audience} Welcome, folks, to another chaotic episode of Mascot Mania—where the mascots are strange, the questions are wilder, and things tend to… go off the rails in the best possible way! Today, we've got a guest who really knows how to stir up some trouble. Please give a warm round of applause for Monty the Manticore!


There shouldn’t be a comma after Welcome. Also it shouldn’t be ‘wilder’, it should be wild. If you want to emphasize that the questions are very wild, it should be something like ‘extremely wild’. I also think that ‘best possible way’ should be reworded to ‘best way possible’.


{Monty flaps his wings dramatically and strides onto the stage, striking a pose.}


I like how this part shows the personality of Monty, it gives the reader a good idea on the type of person Monty is. The reader already knowing early on the type of person Monty is will have the reader already like Monty early on.


Monty: {booming voice, striking a heroic pose} Thank you, Asha! It’s an absolute pleasure to be here. I mean, who wouldn’t want to meet such a magnificent creature like me? {grins wickedly} I’m just the most majestic thing you’ll ever lay eyes on.


This just supports the previous sentence, and it’s great at conveying the personality Monty has. Great job!


Asha: {laughing nervously} Oh, absolutely. I mean, who could miss… {glances nervously at Monty} you? Alright, let's dive in. First up—what’s your favourite hobby, Monty?
Monty: {smirking} Oh, easy one. My favourite hobby? Crashing the forums during cabin wars. {grins wide} You should see it—watching the campers lose their minds as the site goes down is chef's kiss. There’s nothing quite like a bit of chaos to spice up the day.


It’s not really natural dialogue to say “chef’s kiss” so I think it would feel more natural if chef’s kiss was an action, rather than something that Monty is saying.


Asha: {gasping in shock, eyes wide} Wait—YOU do that?! You intentionally crash the forums? {laughs nervously} That’s like… villain-level stuff right there!


I think that ‘villain’ should be something more along the lines of ‘super villain’ to show emphasis, since something about villain-level doesn’t sit right with me.


Monty: {laughs heartily} Oh, you bet! You don’t get a title like Monty the Manticore without a little chaos in your veins, Asha! {pauses dramatically} But hey, chaos is an art form, and I’m the artist.


Monty saying ‘Asha’ just makes the sentence not feel smooth, and it feels a bit choppy. So, I think removing the ‘Asha!’ would make it flow better.


Asha: {shaking her head in disbelief} I don’t even know how to respond to that. {sighs} Let’s just move on to something that might not end in total destruction. What’s your favourite food? This is a critical question, Monty. You’d better answer wisely!
Monty: {licking his lips exaggeratedly} Oh, this is an easy one. Fiery meats—anything roasted, charred, grilled until it’s practically on fire! A good sizzling steak or some roasted beast—anything with real punch, you know?
Asha: {eyes bulge, coughs violently into the mic, flailing} COUGH, COUGH! {coughs dramatically, holding her throat}No, no, NO, Monty! {whispers urgently into the mic} You have to say mangoes! M-A-N-G-O-E-S! Please! Just say mangoes!


This part’s great! It really shows how chaotic the two is, and also references SWC inside jokes!


Monty: {looking confused but amused} Wait—mangoes? {pauses for dramatic effect} You want me to say mangoes? {grins slyly}
Asha: {frantically, whispering under her breath} Yes, yes! Mangoes, Monty. Trust me. It’s the only right answer.
Monty: {pauses, looking at the audience as if considering it} Well… fine. {grins broadly} Mangoes are… tasty, I guess. Sweet and juicy. {smirking at Asha} But I still prefer the fiery meats, of course.
Asha: {sighs dramatically, muttering under her breath} Mangoes… {grins, relieved} There we go! That’s the right answer! {whispers into the mic, voice dripping with sarcasm} Fiery meats… reminds me of two other chaotic mascots… Gurtle and Skog. {shudders slightly, as if recalling a traumatic memory}


I like how this gives a comparison to two mascots we already know, since giving a comparison to the two chaotic mascots of SWC helps the reader envision Monty’s chaotic nature.


Monty: {laughing maniacally, tail flicking excitedly} Ah, Gurtle and Skog, the real troublemakers. Those two know how to cause a ruckus, don’t they? {smirks} You could say we’re… allies in chaos.
Asha: {eyes widen in alarm} Wait—ALLIES? Oh no. {eyes dart around the room in a panic} You mascots aren’t planning another revolution, are you?
Monty: {grinning wildly} Oh, it’s already in the works, Asha. {smirking} A little birdie might’ve told me… {pauses, looking around suspiciously} Skog, Gurtle, Blahaj—they’re all in on it. {suddenly lowers his voice, leaning in} This time, it’s going to be BIG.
Asha: {eyes widening in horror, whispering frantically into her mic} Security! We need security, now! {to the audience, trying to hold it together} Uh, folks, we might be experiencing a slight issue behind the scenes here… and by issue, I mean a full-blown, revolutionary disaster. {eyes dart to Monty}
Monty: {laughing wickedly, eyes gleaming} Oh, Asha, you have no idea. This revolution? It’s going to be glorious. Chaos will reign supreme. {pauses, winks} And if you’re smart… you’ll join us before it’s too late.
Asha: {panicking, voice cracking as she steps back} No, no, no! I’m not going anywhere near that again! I’ll pass on the revolution, thank you! {grabs her earpiece, whispering frantically} Where’s security? Get him OUT of here! {to the camera} People, stay calm. DO NOT trust Monty. DO NOT trust his fiery meats. And above all, DO NOT— {pauses, whispers dramatically} join the revolution.
{Monty laughs maniacally as he flaps his wings and flies offstage. Asha’s face is a picture of disbelief.}
Asha: {shaking her head in exhaustion, addressing the audience} Well, folks, that’s all for tonight’s Mascot Mania. I need a vacation. {looks around nervously} If I’m not back next week, it’s because Monty and { shudders } the OTHER MASCOTS took over the camp … { laughs nervously } which I’m sure won’t happen .But seriously, don’t trust the fiery meats… or the mascots … or any of this.
{The camera fades to black with Monty’s evil laugh echoing in the background as the theme music blares.}


I don’t have much to comment on this, but great job! I love how this shows how chaotic SWC is and also the chaos of the mascots.


I love how this clearly shows the mascot’s personality, and how chaotic SWC is in general. I quickly found myself liking the mascot, and there were a few times that made me chuckle. I love this!

Some small nitpicks I have is the fact that at some times, the dialogue feels unnatural and off. Additionally, this did show quite a bit of Asha’s personality, but I think it’d be nice to see more.

This is really nice, and I love the portrayal of the mascot! Great job with this!

Last edited by moosywoosy (March 23, 2025 13:35:49)

Milkysplash
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swc megathread: march '25

Writing Comp Entry - Sometimes, All It Takes Is A Whole Lotta Cat Food
527 words
Edited based on critique by Gigi, Hope, and Chuey

“Renée, you did not just-” Robert was either in shock or absolutely done, and Renée still couldn’t tell which one it was, even after three years of marriage and six of being in a relationship. She’d just opened the door when he called, and now Robert looking at her, then at the cat, then back to her. Renée smiled as she walked through the doorway, holding a tiny kitten in her arms, having returned rather late from the day shift.

“It was on the road,” Renée said, stroking the kitten as she held it. “I couldn’t just leave it there.” She continued stroking the cat and her voice went higher. “Couldn’t I, you tiny little fluffball?”

Renée usually made impulsive, rash decisions, and she’d a cat on the side of the road, when her heart had exploded. The kitten was a scruffy tabby, perhaps the scruffiest Renée had ever seen, but she was a cat in need of help.

Robert sighed. “I suppose we have been talking about getting a pet in the house, but this was not what I was expecting.” He was clearly annoyed, Renée knew, having dealt with her rather crazy antics over the years. “But you could have at least called.”

“It was seven thirty. I was exhausted,” Renée replied, her voice strained. “I completely forgot to call you.”

“Your communication skills are terrible.” Robert sighed.

“I know.” Renée grinned, continuing to stroke the kitten.

Renée looked at Robert. “And, before you say anything else, rescue cats are better than ones that have been bred. I’m sure Ally would appreciate and love this little one -” she waved one of the kitten’s tiny paws, “- just as much as any other cat.” Renée buried her face in the cat’s scruffy fur, making a point to show Robert how much she loved the kitten. “Please?”

Robert reluctantly held out his arms to take the cat, and Renée passed the kitten into his arms. As she leaned down to untie her shoes, she heard a sudden thud and watched the kitten leap back towards her arms.

“Woah, woah, woah!” Renée laughed, stumbling backwards and trying her best to catch the kitten. “He’s safe, I promise.” She stroked the cat lightly, trying to calm it down after such a sudden experience.

“I suppose we could have the cat…” Robert started, and Renée felt the sweet taste of victory on her tongue.

“… only for a night.”

Renée felt her heart drop. A night? This kitten was attached to her. Properly attached to her. She couldn’t just… adopt it out!

“Come on,” Renée pleaded, coddling the cat once more. “She loves me. She’s attached to me. If you take her away, it’s like taking her away from a parent.”

There was silence between them for a few minutes, before Robert began to speak.

“How did you even get it to like you that much?” Robert asked. Renée could tell he was still clearly reeling from the shock of having a cat jump out of his arms, and was trying to soothe some of the pain of rejection.

“Sometimes,” Renée smiled, “all it takes is a whole lotta cat food.”

Last edited by Milkysplash (March 25, 2025 07:11:02)

euphoriafall
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swc megathread: march '25

weekly #3
2375 words / 3000 points
weekly speedrun go brrrr


PART ONE (507)

UNRELIABLE NARRATOR (98)
Unreliable narrators offer an author a great way to mislead their readers in order to conceal the true events for a great plot twist. These unreliable narrators often subtly change or twist the truth, where it is perceptible upon rereading, but the reader remains oblivious on their first read. It is important that the author ensures no plot holes are made, though, and to offer a reason as to why the narration is unreliable. This trope can also be hard for readers to pick up on. It is often used in books with elements of mystery or suspense.

ANTI-HERO/MORALLY GREY CHARACTER (69)
A morally grey character, or anti-hero, can be used to add flavour and depth to a character’s backstory, to explain their morally grey actions. They also offer a new perspective on what it means to be a ‘hero’ and challenge the stereotypes of the ‘Ideal Hero’. But, it can be difficult to build empathy for an anti-hero, and they often require more character development than other types of heroes.

CHEKHOV’S GUN (109)
Anton Chekhov was a prolific short story writer who famously said that every element introduced in a story must be essential to its plot. This is a very useful rule to keep in mind when writing, to let the reader know what is important and what to consider. It also helps to cut down on extraneous, unnecessary description, and allows for foreshadowing to happen. Chekhov’s gun is particularly useful in short stories, the type of book Anton Chekhov wrote, but in longer novellas and novels it is usually reasonable to add descriptions that have no effect to the overall plot, and this trope doesn’t always need to be used.

THE LOVE TRIANGLE (102)
The love triangle is an extremely common trope, especially in romance and young adult books. Love triangles can be used to create unpredictability in the plot, and entertain readers as they wonder how the triangle will be resolved – will they choose one over the other? Will they all get together? Will none of them get together? They can also be used to develop the characters further in their decisions, that shape the direction of the plot. However, love triangles have, in my opinion, been overused in popular media, and it can be tricky to create a love triangle that isn’t instantly predictable.

THE CHOSEN ONE (129)
Usually a person, or a group of people, who have been chosen, either by prophecy or divine intervention, to be the only ones able to resolve the plot. This trope can offer escapism to the reader, to see a normal person become the protagonist, and embark on a long quest to do… whatever it is they need to do. But it’s also very cliché when used in the typical way, without a new perspective on the trope. The author could change what the chosen one is prophesied for – perhaps they have been chosen to be the villain? Or maybe they have been chosen as a sacrifice for the greater good? Or there may be multiple chosen ones, and they must compete within themselves to find the true chosen one.

AND… SOME BOOK RECOMMENDATIONS (BECAUSE I FEEL LIKE IT)
Unreliable Narrator: The Secret History by Donna Tartt
Morally Grey/Anti-Hero: Six of Crows by Leigh Bardugo
Love Triangle: The Infernal Devices by Cassandra Clare (subverts expectations of the trope)

PART TWO – Chosen One (this is absolutely not one of my favourite tropes but I literally have no time to plan out anything more. enjoy the silliness) (452)

“Is anyone here willing?” the shadowy figure hissed. “You must be brave enough to traverse even the most dangerous of uncharted territories in order to return to us our rightful moonstone.”

The room was uncomfortably silent, everyone sneaking glances at each other in the hopes that somebody would volunteer themselves.

“Well, what about a prophecy?” another figure asked. “Then, we’ll be able to figure out who exactly we need, and make them undertake this treacherous journey instead of us.”

“What an excellent idea,” the first replied, and around them came the quiet murmurings of agreement. “I can’t believe I didn’t think of that sooner. Time to create a prophecy!”

The figures formed a circle, and in the middle of the ring appeared a cauldron, and into the cauldron they threw mushrooms and rat tails and chunks of brimstone and all the other ingredients you usually put into a potion. And then it was mixed and it formed a silvery, viscous potion.

They started reciting a prophecy spell, and the potion formed a name – Starlight Eclipse.

“Of course,” somebody said. “So now we just need to get this Starlight Ruin person to undertake this mission. Easy enough, surely.”

Two weeks later, and Starlight is in her room, on her bed and staring up at her ceiling because she is mind-numbingly bored. Sure, she has piles of work right there on her desk, but she doesn’t want to do that! Instead, she’s watching the shadows on her ceiling move whenever the wind blows the tree outside her room.

Suddenly, a shadowed figure materialises into her room, but Starlight is so cool, so she pretends not to notice them and twirls a piece of her hair around her finger.

“Starlight,” they say, and Starlight rolls her eyes.

“It’s Starlight Moon Twinkle Eclipse, actually,” she pouts. “Who are you, anyway?”

“I am the messenger of the group who are dedicated to keeping the very fabric of our universe together, and I am here to inform you that you are our chosen one, the one who will save the world and unite the–”

“Wait. What do I get out of this?”

“Glory and the endless respect and reverence from everyone on the planet, of course. And you will be showered with gifts for your hard work and sacrifice.”

“Do I get to have a power bank? I need to be updating my followers Instaounce, obviously. I got fifty likes on my last post – do you know what that means? It means–”

“Alright, you get a power bank”, the figure huffs, irritation colouring their voice. “So you agree to this quest? It will be long and difficult, but you will be the saviour of our world.”

“Okay, whatever.”

PART THREE (as before, i also have no clue how i’m going to figure out a the secret history plot twist that won’t get rejected by scratch moderation so here’s the harry potter instead) (506)

Harry Potter, the chosen one, is widely regarded as a hero in school. Paraded around in the corridors, getting away with almost anything, and yet he’s still the favourite of all the staff. And his friends – just by knowing him they’re seen as icons. Well, if he wasn’t the so-called chosen one, he wouldn’t be treated so well. Actually…

It starts with the unexplainable – a student Petrified, and then another, and the students are whispering of You Know Who and untold dangers, of evil, Dark creatures summoned to do his bidding. The teachers, too. Despite assuring the students they have everything sorted, they’re just as terrified as them, and loath to admit it, but they are as unaware as them.

Whisperings of a giant snake. People crowd in their common rooms, staying in groups as to feel safer. It won’t make them any less likely to be targeted. Harry Potter disappears for days and rumours spread, until he appears out of nowhere – terrible headache, he claims, and though his dorm-mates haven’t seen him in days, they just assume he must have gone to the hospital wing and shrug and carry on with their lives. The teachers are much too busy and stressed to wonder where one student has disappeared to, especially as it seems as if he didn’t even disappear in the first place. They carry on with their work, heads down and quills scratching on students’ homework, letters to Dumbledore. It’s a miracle the Ministry doesn’t know yet, what with the terror of the students. Little do they know that their letters are being withheld from their parents – yet another plan by Dumbledore. Professor McGonagall approaches him with pinched lips and a worried frown, but he insists he knows what he is doing. There is nothing more she can do.

The hospital wing is full. The teachers try to cast an Undetectable Extension Charm, but a charm of that size and difficulty is no small feat, and they end up clearing out an empty classroom by the hospital wing to use.

Students ask to leave. Dumbledore says the safest place is Hogwarts, but that can’t be true. Harry Potter goes missing again, and so do a handful of dangerous potion ingredients from Snape’s cupboard. Nobody connects the two incidents.

The Chamber of Secrets is opened, and Ginny Weasley goes missing. The school is forced to make announcements. The sheer volume of owls that are sent and delivered cloud the skies above Hogwarts in a mass of feathers. People say Dumbledore is being forced to resign.

The cure is finally ready, but there is far too little. Hermione is cured, and together with Ron they uncover the entrance to the Chamber of Secrets, and they descend into its damp cellars together.

There, they find the unconscious form of Ginny, the Horcrux of He Who Must Not Be Named – and… Harry Potter?

The next day, breaking news on the Daily Prophet – Harry Potter, the chosen one for evil, is on the run. You Know Who is back.

PART FOUR (910)

After the necessary briefing and preparations, Starlight finds herself with a backpack full of supplies, selfie stick in hand, ready to embark on this mission. The shadowy people warned her that it would be a difficult journey, but Starlight Moon Twinkle Eclipse is obviously better than whoever these people think they are.

She’s outside a tavern, so she decides to head in. There’s nothing else that seems interesting out here, just fields and muddy paths, and all quests seem to start in a tavern anyway, so surely there must be a reason for that.

There’s not many people inside because it’s only mid-afternoon. The tavern keeper stands at the bar, listlessly wiping glasses. Why do they always do that too? They seem like really busy people, so why do they always end up wiping glasses? Anyway. Starlight approaches them, and asks where they are. The tavern keeper is more than happy to answer, and actually she ends up telling Starlight everything she’ll need to know for her quest. All the bad guys around the area, and all the traps, and she just so happens to know a secret path that leads to a secret cave in which there’s a secret stash of weapons which could help her fight off the monsters which will soon be coming her way.

She thanks the innkeeper for her help, and leaves, although not before overhearing a patron’s conversation about the corrupt Baron who lives in this baroncy. Of course, Starlight decides that she needs to free the people here from their tyrannical rule and she makes her way to the Baron’s house, where she uses her charismatic skills to persuade the Baron to become a travelling musician.

Then – on her way, to the cave stash. The map she was given by the innkeeper is hastily drawn and a mess of scribbles, but she manages to decipher the symbols and follow the path, through the dark forest and winding moors, to the cave. It’s hidden behind a bush, which Starlight pushes her way through, to reveal a cave stuffed to the brim with weaponry, resources, and food. Amazing! She grabs all that she can, and continues on her way, although not before snapping a cinematic photograph for her Instaounce.

The items she has stolen – no, borrowed. Surely, if she is to save the world, some people will forgive her taking a few things, just to help? Yep. The items she has borrowed weigh down her pack, so her progress is slow. At the end of the first day she sits down on a small boulder and lights a fire and tucks into her pot noodles. She doesn’t like this flavour but luckily she brought one of each type in her bag. Maybe tomorrow she’ll have the chicken and mushroom one.

A week later she is on the other side of the country and much the worse for wear. She ran out of her pot noodles three days ago and she had to actually cook. It was absolutely terrible. But now she’s out of those horrible woods, and maybe she can ask someone else in this town for directions or someplace to stay.

And then, just in front of her on the street – it’s the Baron turned travelling musician! She can’t believe her eyes, and the travelling musician seems as if he can’t either. He bounds up to her and instantly starts waxing poetic to her, thanking her for inspiring this radical career change, where he has discovered the job he loves most. Starlight shrugs and acts nonchalant, until the travelling musician offers her to stay in his friend’s house, as she seems like she could do with a place to stay. She instantly jumps to the offer and is led to a vast mansion where she is given a luxurious bedroom to stay in.

She sits down on the bed, alone at last, after the musician finally finished expressing his thanks, and contemplates her mission. She’d quite honestly forgot about it this entire time, but the words of those shadowy people come back to her. Once you get to the town on the other side of the forest, you need to find a massive mansion and steal the moonstone locked away in it.

Oh! The massive mansion. That she is in right now. She thanks her lucky stars and dashes to the door, taking a few furtive glances to either side to make sure she isn’t seen.

And would you have it – the moonstone is right there, in the room right next to hers. She takes it and slips it under her jumper, as bulky as it is, and runs back into her room, where she shoves the gemstone, in all its iridescent, gleaming glory, into a pair of fluffy socks. Don’t worry, she hasn’t worn them yet.

Suddenly, the Evil Queen who owns the house bursts into her room, and starts angrily complaining that her moonstone has disappeared.

“My poor moonstone! You know, I was just going to use that to destroy the whole world! But now I can’t, because it’s been stolen. What a betrayal. My dreams… all gone. What can I do now, but mourn my loss and hope that it is returned to me, the rightful owner, sometime.”

And with a swish of her cloak she is off, and Starlight Moon Twinkle Eclipse vaults out of the window and runs off with the moonstone safely tucked into her fluffy blue sock.


sweetzeal
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swc megathread: march '25

day 23 - changing swc - 23/3/25
  • 407 words
ah okay this is a good idea for a daily!
This is my first session here in swc but … I'll try to think of some ideas! (i have been liking it here so far so thanks to everyone<3)
So firstly, maybe less frequent dailies. I don't know if it is just me but I feel like I have no time for dailies at all
Instead of dailies, maybe tasks? And once you finish those tasks you can get _____ points for your cabin? (like in total)
For example : 5 tasks -> 1500 points ; 10 tasks -> 3000 points etc.

Secondly, for word wars, one problem that I think my cabin has is TIMEZONES… like there'd be situations where only one person is active to do the word war. And that's super annoying… (directing towards timezones) So an idea I have is to have word wars for like more than one day? Anyways I find it pretty fun so yeah. Not sure if this suggestion made sense but… haha.
And for word wars, maybe we should get points based on how much everyone writes + the base point given!!

Thirdly, (unserious one), is to make SWC logging points of your daily writing tasks only. So for example homework, diary entries, etc. but no extra tasks. Just that. Like in some way trackbear. But my addition to it is that they'll have leagues. It sounds like the competitive yet boring version of SWC doesn't it… I'm sorry about that. But I feel that logging points of your daily writing tasks just makes everyone more motivated to write.

Fourth one, make SWC a camp which is all year round. And allow new campers to come in at (i'm sorry i'm not sure which months is SWC held in still) and so on

Fifth one is to make SWC into a blog camp. Where members of cabins work together to make a blog of practically anything related to their cabin, lives, SWC and much more! So all the dailies, weeklies are “thrown away” in some sense (some journalism in this idea hehe #journalismftw).

Sixth one is to have talks/presentations/topic ideas/just SOMETHING by each cabin throughout the whole camp month.
At the end of camp, everyone will vote for which idea from which cabin they like the most. Then, that cabin would win additional points!

That's it! SWC is really amazing though, so thank you so much to everyone once again.
and of course, this is just my personal opinions + for the daily, so yeah!

Last edited by sweetzeal (March 23, 2025 13:57:03)

-NightGlow-
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swc megathread: march '25

Word War
word count - 341 words

That night we were planning to cross intto what was more commonly know as “uncharted territory”. yes, younger me would've known the dangers that would come with going on such a perilous journey, but I had to find some way to prove my worth when no on was taking me seriously. Deep down I was already having regrets for something that I hadn't even committed but this was the way things had to be - I was pushed to the edge so I might as well jump off and see what treasures lie underneath.

As we scavenged the cave walls I cam across some strange source of light. It resembled the bioluminscence you would see in a movie like Jurassic World - maybe this was a sign of living life that was yet to be discovered. Not thinking much of it, I motioned for our little group to continue deeper and deeper into the cave. At the time I didn't know how wrong I truly was, seeing as the bioluminscence, that source of light, was actually meant to be a warning. This was uncharted territory for a reason but I were to have any chance to bring back what was truly mine, I had to take these risks.

I had a lot going on my mind as I questioned why I had decided to risk the lives of others as well as myself. It was hard enough convincing myself to go on such a journey so I had no clue why I would even imagine or come across the thought of bringing my friends, of all people, to face their doom with me.

Minutes felt like hours and hours felt like days as we continued scavenging into th4e crevasses of the cave. Suddenly, I spotted some sort of strucutre not too far off into the distance. Shelter, that's what it was. It was probably a clue, I thought to myself as I shouted out to the group to follow me. We opened the doors and inside, was a nicely finished house. You hones
silverlynx-
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swc megathread: march '25

Critique for Ash
340 words

First of all, this was a lovely piece to read through! It had lots of great descriptions and emotion!

The river in Nallune ran clear, as it always had.
Every morning, the sun woke before I did, casting long shadows over the valley as it rose over the hills. I could hear the sounds of the village stirring below, the distant hum of voices, the smell of firewood and fresh bread. The peace here, in the heart of Vira’s plains, had always felt like a part of me. The way the river was constant, unchanging, flowing always in the same direction. I remember thinking that it was a promise of safety, of permanence. It made me feel like nothing could touch me.

Honestly, there wasn’t really much wrong with this part! The descriptions were awesome and it flowed beautifully <3
However, I think you could make your language a bit more powerful. Instead of ‘long’ shadows you could have ‘inky black shadows’ or something like that. And when you say ‘had always felt like a part of me’ you could say instead ‘had always felt rooted deep within me.’ I also think some more description of the river would be nice and maybe the surrounding area like the riverbanks and the houses around it.
Near the beginning you used ‘over the valley’ and then, in the same sentence ‘over the hills’ so maybe try change one of those
Of course, the descriptive ones are all just suggestions though <3

But I was wrong.
There was one thing the river couldn’t give me.
A mark.
I sat up, pushing my dark hair back from my face, the morning chill biting at my skin . Seren , my younger sister, was already awake. She always was—sunrise had a way of calling her. At ten, she was as full of life as I had once been, before everything changed. Before I realized that being unmarked meant something darker than I had ever imagined.
I think some context to what a mark is would be useful, as when I was reading this part I was quite confused about what it was at first. Also, maybe some backstory about the character, saying how happy she was when she was younger, saying how it crushed her when she realised how bad not having a mark was and maybe how people were mean to her because of it?? (I mean, I don’t even know your character’s backstory lol so don’t judge </3)
I just wanted to mention that you put a space after your comma - the judges won’t judge you for that but it just makes me rly sad lol

“Aeris!” she called from the doorway, her bright eyes flashing with excitement. “It’s time to go! You promised to help me gather flowers for the feast!”
I smiled softly, though I couldn’t quite find the joy I had once felt in her laughter. “I’ll be right out, Seren.”
She skipped down the hall, her energy filling the space, the kind of innocent joy I had long since lost. Seren had a mark—a small flame on her wrist. It meant something. She belonged.

In this section I think maybe some explanation of what the marks are or what they usually look like would be good Other than that, some description of what Seren looks like maybe and otherwise it’s great!

But I… I did not.
I couldn’t shake the weight of the Trials looming over me. There had been whispers in the village, hushed conversations between the elders, the nervous tension in their eyes when they saw me. The unmarked. Those of us who hadn’t received a mark at birth, those of us who were different. We were the ones who were kept apart, the ones who didn’t belong.

Again, some explanation of what the trials are would be good and maybe something about how she had heard how horrible they were, how people came out scared for life (idk lol), description of her fear e.g ‘a wave of fear and anguish washed over me, numbing my heart.’

I hope this critique helps and good luck in the writing comp!! <3
unercornshine
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swc megathread: march '25

inspired by: “Let Me Down Slowly” - Alec Benjamin
Scene 1:
I sit here, shivers running down my spine, sat in the cold of the once vibrant room, a hollow shell of the beauty it used to be: your radiance used to bask me in its glow, now trying to remember what it feels like to have that warmth; cuz you're gone, and i almost dont remember what it was like to have you - the pain stabbing through my chest, like you were never here for me, like you were only an illusion - an illusion who left me here to rot. It's so empty now, gloom clinging onto the walls, their heads bowed down, mourning whatever you used to be, dust settling on that weathered armchair you used to pick at and peel as you listened to my rants and ramble, laughing at the stupid things I used to say, and your laughter would fill the room, filling it with a light never to be replaced as my shadow looms across the creaky floorboards, like they're grieving in sadness of the loss of you. The walls used to hold voices and now they don’t know what to do without them, like even the air is waiting for something—someone—that isn’t coming back, like everything is too loud and too quiet all at once and no matter how much I try to fill the space, it doesn’t work, it never works, because it’s not just space I’m trying to fill, it’s you.

And you used to say ‘forever’ in a way that felt so real, but i'm left in the dust now and i know all of it wasn't, and i used to count the freckles that spilt from your eyes, like constellations from far above brought as a blessing to me here, your presence a grace no one else had the fortune to be gifted, but it's gone now, and your gone, and I keep thinking, was it real?—because if it was real, if it really meant anything, then why does it feel like I’m the only still one standing here, stuck, waiting, breaking, while you just… left?

You used to say my tears were beauty, you used to wipe them gently and tell me my pain was worth it, that even when i'm broken i look like a fantasy - is that why you left me, so i would slowly decompose and you could watch my beauty from afar, cuz im breaking right now, and it's not a sight to behold; i only wish one thing, that if you had to go you could've given me something, anything, because this silence: this aching, yawning, stretching, suffocating nothing you left behind? it’s cruel, it’s so, so cruel. And I don’t think I can do it, I don’t think I can just pretend I’m fine, I don’t think I can just move on and act like you didn’t devour a piece of me with you when you walked away.

I keep replaying it, you know, that last moment, the way you stood there, just for a second, just long enough for me plead—hope—that maybe you’d turn around, but you didn’t, not even slight hesitation, you just walked right out like I meant nothing, like the years and memories you left behind didn't exist, like I wasn’t still standing here, watching you go, like I wasn’t still waiting for you to stop, to turn around, to say anything at all. God, I was so stupid to think you might not leave, it was all just wishful thinking, the type of hope that has been my downfall.

And now i sit here, a corpse in this little empty room, beating myself up over memories you think nothing of, memories you've already forgot; i know you've already gotten over it, and i know i should too, but i cant seem to let go of everything that meant so much to me, can’t seem to stop myself from reaching for them, picking them apart, looking for something I missed, some sign that this isn't just all make-belief in my head.

But it doesn’t matter, does it, because you’re not here, you never will be anymore: even if you were, what would I say, what’s there even left to say? ‘Please, if you have to go, don’t do it like this, don’t leave me standing here trying to convince myself it didn’t mean as much as it did, don’t—’ No, I wouldn’t say that, i wouldn't take my burden out on you, I’d just… I’d just look at you, and maybe nod, maybe I’d smile, if I could make myself, if the tears wouldn't come spilling out my eyes and the sobs wouldn't come jumping out my mouth, maybe I’d make it easy for you, i'd try to accept it, because I don’t think I could take it if I had to watch you let me down slowly.

Scene 2:
a few years later
I'm back.
/again/.
I told myself I wouldn't return. I told myself last time would be the last.
I lied.
It wouldn't be the worst thing I've done.
I don't know what brings me here. I come back every time.
It doesn't ache as much. I guess I've accepted it.
You won't come back.
Period.
I never should've hoped. Never should've allowed myself to dream. To /care/.
But here i am.
/again/.
I feel like it should hurt more. Like the ache i used to feel should return. I want it to.
It doesn't.
Everything always leaves me behind. Everything and everyone.

The room hasn't changed much.
The chair is still falling apart. The walls paint is still peeling.
And the dust clings onto everything. The shelves. The floor boards. My skin.
It chokes me.
A cruel reminder of how you've choked me too.
I run my hand over the chair you used to pick at. You know, it's leather is still flaking. You never could leave things alone. Always picking. Always Fidgeting. So persistent.

I used to hate it. The noise. The way your restless fingers scratched and scraped.
Now, I'd give anything to hear it again.
But there's only silence.
The one you cruelly gifted me as you walked out that door.
I sit.
The chair groans beneath me, like it remembers too.
And for a moment, I imagine you're still here—right across from me. Smirking. Teasing.
Picking away at the world like it was yours to break.
I guess it was, because you
b r o k e
my world.

The cold is my only companion. It sticks with me thick and thin. It runs up my spine leaving shivers behind and I almost sigh with relief.
Ever-so-bitter relief.

I stay a little longer.
Just long enough for the ghosts to find me.
They always do.
No matter how much I try to leave them behind.

Then I leave.
I open the door and walk right out without a care of what I'm leaving behind.
(you)
(and everything I was with you)
Just like you did.

I know I should’ve left with you.
I should’ve walked away when I had the chance.
I should’ve saved myself.
But I didn’t.
Your absence rattles me.
It eats at me.
It lingers like the cold, seeping into my bones.

But the worst part?
The worst part isn’t the silence.
It’s not the emptiness that surrounds me.
It's not the fact that the cold is my closest companion.

I’ll be back.
I’ll always be back.
That's the worst bit
The bit that comes back to haunt me every time.

I always come back.
Every time I tell myself I won’t.
Every time I swear to leave it all behind, to finally walk away and never look back.

Because some ghosts…
Some ghosts were never meant to leave.

And I am one of them.
Bound to this place,
to the echoes of what once was.
Forever chained by the memory of you.

You.
The only thing I ever wanted back.


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Last edited by unercornshine (Oct. 11, 2025 20:50:14)

unercornshine
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umm… yall just ignore this ;'D
sci-fi ftw // https://scratch.mit.edu/discuss/topic/808229/?page=33#post-8465332 // 1,322 // writing comp entry inspired by ‘let me down slowly’ and was origionally created 4 the breaking rules weekly // structure, overview and thoughts, impact literally anything // pls i beg u be brutally-honest i will rlly apprieciate
129waterfall
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If I had the powers of the hosts, what would I do? I would add a bunch of other challenges that are really random for points. Also, I wouldn't make the results hinge so much on the writing competition (what about us untalented people?? *cries*) like it literally makes or breaks by whoever wins the writing competition, and isn't always about all the teamwork and dedication that went on during the session. That's just my personal opinion though, I do believe that the people who win writing comp are usually amazing and of course deserve points as recognition for their work. I do also say this as someone who has never entered the writing competition, so maybe I'm biased towards it having not as big of an impact - maybe if I put in the time towards a piece of writing I would realize that it takes a lot of effort and talent. I just don't like how the talent of individuals really impacts results so much.

There's also a bunch of random silly stuff I would have the power to do and you BET i would abuse this power (for legal reasons if I ever am a host for some reason which is very unlikely but I would not abuse my power this is a joke - and I'm pretty sure hosts don't even have the power to do this stuff soo) Infinite mangoes and points to my cabin, of course, and cabin wars would be rigged against everyone else *evil face* I would basically rig it all in our favor of course and distribute mangoes throughout the land. Ooh and I could make other cabins work as mercenaries for our cabin in order to get mangoes and if they don't they starve mwahahahahaa and we could have indentured servants but it's a broken system so they can't really get out of their indentured servitude. And in the mean time my cabin will bask in the glory of having all the mangoes and points. Also I'd like to bring back the days of mascots and swc parodies - those were the best times.

Also there's so many hosts now and with a lot of separate teams. Like I remember when there would be like one host or maybe two cohosts. I guess as we expanded we needed more. But unfortunately I feel like the golden age of swc was like one or two years ago and it's kind of fading a little - I'm pretty sure you can just see it in the amount of campers and (co)leader apps. Bring us back!! (although it lowk is because scratch itself is losing relevance sooo)

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swc megathread: march '25

Daily 23:
Imagine that you wake up one day with the magic powers of our beloved tyrants! What are some changes you would make to SWC? What are some suggestions you have? These can include serious ideas and silly ones, you’re the new host after all! Write 350 words of your plans for 300 points, and an extra 100 if you provide proof.

If I was tyrant- er, I mean host, I’d make it so Action wins of course, and I’d make it so there’d be more fun event like the Gurtle battle or the Goose clue, or the train race, since those were so much fun. Also I would make it so that every session had a mascot (Like Gurtle, or the Planet) since that was also very fun. And I would make it so all the little extra projects (like the Mercenary project, Critiquitaire, Word wars, ect.) match the theme of the session, and have little titles (that match with the session theme too) since that’d be fun. And I’d make there be more silly thing in the description (like fairy tales climbing the leaderboard!) or having their suddenly be a balrog with 100000000000 points on the leaderboard, whom you have to defeat. And maybe more stuff like Gurtle eating the description, since that was pretty fun too. Also I would maybe change the host’s official title to tyrant B) /j Also I would make all the cabins officially train cars! Since that’d be so much fun (All the cabins are now train cars. Your welcome. B) ) And I would make it so you all get free mangoes with my magical tyrant/host powers, and I would make sure that Gurtle got all the mangoes and links he needed. Hmmmm, what else… Oh and I would make it so Action wins B) /nsrs and I would make it so there would be two roleplay days, and maybe one of them could have a special event like how the second cabin wars has a special event thingy. (which is so so fun! Keep doing it hosts!) also I would give Alana an award for being so cool and being so good updating the leaderboard. And I would give awards in the memory book to the people who sent the most wars during cabin wars (Like Rose and Alana.) since their so speedy and cool. And I would suggest having mascots for every cabin, since those are very fun too (we love Harry the capybara). Anyway, that’s all!

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Daily 23/03/25
Hummm, where am I? Ah! Who am I? Never mind, I just woke up from a long sleep to improve SWC. I’m going to add the ability to create a word counter for words invented by campers, meaning words that have no real meaning—well, that depends on whether the campers justify them to give them meaning! And at the end of the SWC session, each camper will have to create a 2000-word story with at least 100 words invented by creative and inventive campers. The cabin with the most stories will earn an additional 5000 points.
Each camper, if they want, will have to create a character that most closely represents them, based on their unique, one-of-a-kind traits, like having two eyes of different colors. They will be able to incorporate this character into the shared story of the cabin, which is a story only the campers of that cabin can create. This story will help the cabin earn more points, which will be added weekly based on the total number of words written. For example, 1000 words would correspond to 200 points. That’s why, if they maintain a relatively high average word count each day for an entire week, they will earn an extra 150 points. This means the cabin with the most words written at the end of the session will earn an additional 5000 points, which will really increase the competitiveness between cabins. Every three days, if a cabin has a heroic character who helps them in their legendary story, this will add 100 points each week. For the entire session, campers will have to create an idol that represents them; it can be very strange or very beautiful, but the description must be at least 20,000 words or more. Each cabin will thus have a project that shows their progress and goals, which will allow them to reduce their daily word count by 100 words. This is the fourth goal to be achieved by each cabin, and the others will be voted on in the same project. This way, it will motivate campers even more to write! (354 words)






Milkysplash
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swc megathread: march '25

Critique for Gigi!
(Ahaha, I was going to try and get the whole thing critiqued for you but uh, life got in the way, along with Skylar seriously underestimating how long it would take for her to complete her work - so I’ve done the first 635 words, and will do the rest if/when I get time!)

Hi Gigi! Firstly, I absolutely loved this piece; it kept me on the edge of my seat the entire time wondering what Kyron was doing with his notebook. It really raised a lot of questions in me and kept me reading.

A beetle scuttled across the damp motel floor. Kyron sat on the hard mattress tilted his head to watch it’s movements. It’s black shell stopped, turned around and wandered towards the bathroom, where the bathroom was brown from dirt and there was at least two drowned spiders. He frowned at the loss of his entertainment and reached for the TV remote on the bedside table. When he touched it, Kyron remembered his secret desire to have a sturdy pair of gloves because it was greasy. He slathered his hands in hand sanitizer afterwards.
I think this paragraph is a great opening paragraph. By focusing on the beetle, it makes me view this scene like a camera pan in a movie - up from focusing on a small, rather insignificant object to the main character who is sitting in a motel room. I also like Kyron being painted here as a curious or otherwise interesting character - especially with the focus on the beetle at the start.

The ten o’clock news for the local city started to play. Across every region, the opening music was the same. Kyron nodded along to the quickening tempo, then shuffled up to the headboard and got comfortable. He made a habit of watching the headlines, not so interested in the increasing global tension but on the grisly crimes.
Again, I really love this second paragraph! I love how Kyron continues being painted as a rather strange character - and someone who’s interested in crimes. This paragraph really helps establish Kyron’s character further, and is a nice set-up to what is to come.

“Lauren Hills was arrested last night for the murder of her little sister.” Kyron leaned forward as if he could climb through the screen. The unnamed sister’s school photo flashed on the screen. She had thick, curly hair and smiled with confidence in spite of her buckteeth. As the reporter continued, the footage shifted to a shaky camera as dozens of police officers left a children's park with a screaming Lauren.

Kyron paused the news. He grabbed a large duffle bag from beside him and pulled out a red pen and worn down leather notebook. In the notebook were road maps, seeming random spots marked in red ink and pages upon pages of information on other murder victims. He flicked past until he found the most recent page in his scrapbook, detailing Lauren Hill’s address and personal notes from interviews with friends on where she hung around and what her little sister, Zara, liked to do.
In this section, I really liked how this bit is laid out: the news stating the fact, before cutting to Kyron and his notebook. It also really firmly establishes Kyron’s affinity for crimes, especially as he has so much information on it.

My main issue with the second paragraph here is that the introduction of the duffle bag and notebook feel a bit sudden. I’d suggest mentioning it earlier on in the paragraph - maybe Kyron left it lying around on the bed, or perhaps he moved it earlier? The context and timeline for the Zara Hills case also feels a bit sudden as well, as I couldn’t really orientate myself with the timeline here. Did this crime just happen, or was it a few days down the line? And if so, why does Kyron have a notebook with Lauren’s personal info? I wouldn’t suggest fixing all these issues at once here since most of the questions raised here can be answered later down the line. However, a timescale for this murder case would be nice, as it would help orientate the reader.

Kyron narrowed at his eyes at the page, re-reading the information like it wasn’t already burnt in his brain. Five seconds later, he turned the page with such a firm, sweaty grip that the bottom ripped. The looseness of the page shook him out of his stupor. He threw the notebook on the bed, open on the correct page.
I love this paragraph, but it does feel like things are moving a bit too quickly and too suddenly. I’d suggest either slowing the pacing down, or to expand on it and create a sense of excitement or urgency in this paragraph. I read this paragraph and the following paragraph as Kyron being excited that he’s finally found the right information - but I’m not sure if that’s what you meant here? Either way, I’d recommend expanding on this paragraph to make it feel less like things are happening suddenly - or if they are, change the pacing of this paragraph to incite a more sudden change.

He grabbed the map of the local area from the desk opposite the bed and thanked the scouts for still using ordnance survey to develop their survival skills. He tore up the city area and stuck it into his book (using his saliva as a make do glue.) From there, he uncapped the pen and circled the suburban areas on the edge of the city lines, ones next to a park, ones that matched the crime scenes. He lingered on the page, looking to his right hand side to see no one there.

By the end, there were four parks but only one was likely. Laura Hills did not stray far from her home. She attended the local comprehensive school a ten minute walk away and only otherwise ventured outside for emergency shops when there was no food at home. Zara Hills, like any eight year old, could be appeased by going to the park unless it was the dead of winter. He marked the park by the Hill’s house.
Nothing to change here, except a few minor spelling errors in the second paragraph which I’ve put in bold!

Aside from that, I love how Kyron speeds into narrowing down where Lauren Hills lives, and yet still adds intrigue to what he’s doing. Now that he’s narrowed down where she lives, I’m curious as to what he’s going to do with the information, which makes me want to read more to find out.

A motel is integral to any city, yet is not part of the city it is in. Kyron clicked his tongue at his miscalculation, not including the motel’s location in his torn up city map. He traced his index finger round the edges, looking for a landmark he recognised.
Again, there’s quite a sudden jump here and it would be nice to focus more on where Kyron is. To me, it seems like he already knows where Lauren is and is in her city, but some context beforehand would be nice. However, it does make me wonder what he’s going to do next.

He looked around the room. He opened his mouth, about to call that he was heading out when he stopped, closed his mouth again. The room was empty. As it should have been, but the hope he’d been cultivating died in his chest. Kyron slammed the door on the way out.
There’s a lot of mystery in this final paragraph, and I love the intrigue it brings to Kyron and what he’s about to do. I think this open ending is a nice way to finish off this story, and is also quite reflective of Kyron’s character.

Overall, this is a great piece of writing, and I can’t wait to read more! I wish you all the very best in the writing competition! Apologies that I couldn’t get more done, I was suffering in schoolwork like the crazy person I am, ahah-
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Nvm( just ignore this)

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swc megathread: march '25

weekly tropes 2115 words

part 1

Enemies to lovers:
Pros:
Helps to establish tension in scenes!! Characters that are drawn to each other yet initially dislike each other often have an interesting chemistry and are sometimes more exciting than your average friends to lovers couple.
Cons:
The transition between “enemy” to “lover” is often handled clumsily, which is really, really annoying.
The Mentor
Pros:
You get some great characters when you use these. The Mentor is often a quirky or even cantankerous individual, at least in my experience, and they can help highlight how far the character has gone on their journey.
Cons:
They often die, which is really depressing if they’re a likable character. Sure, it adds some emotion, but like. Why bro gotta die.
The Love Triangle
Pros:
It adds romantic tension? I guess? It can be powerful if handled correctly (which I’ve only seen once or twice, mind you)
Cons:
SO MANY. I hate this trope so much sobbing. Not only is it WAY overused but unless it’s handled very skillfully it usually just turns into a bunch of characters being total jerks towards and about each other. There’s also normally a point where the main character likes both love interests (or thinks they do) like come on who actually runs around kissing everyone they see. Please get a life, for goodness’ sake.
Ragtag Bunch of Misfits
Pros:
It’s often really funny, and the characters bond in some really special ways. Big(ger) casts of characters are quite fun and allow for a lot of relationship development, as well as some pretty silly dynamics. Love these lil guys.
Cons:
It can be hard to keep up with all of your characters, especially if you have too many. Having a group of characters can also limit the amount of time you’re able to spend developing their own unique personalities.
The Quest
Pros:
It gives the plot a direction. Using the Quest is an easy way to establish plot, as the end is already in sight. Now all you have to do is prevent your character getting there by any means you can, which allows room for character development.
Cons:
It isn’t a unique plot. You can put your own spin on it, and if you’re not looking for a super original plot it’s fine, but it’s been used hundreds of times, making it less effective if you’re trying to create a distinctive, new plot.

part 2

“Everyone? Everyone, can I have your attention?”
No one stopped fighting. The camp was in total disarray, supplies scattered on the ground as the group bickered and fought. Layla stood over Solis with a knife, threatening him as he shouted at her, while Lepos attempted to drag both of them apart. It ended up with them turning on him instead, and in moments all three of them were arguing. Violet was audibly sobbing, the flowers in her hair ash gray, while Corr buzzed around her head nervously, his shape flickering. Luna drew in a deep breath, a muscle ticking in the corner of her eye, before trying again.
“SHUT UP AND LISTEN TO ME,” she demanded.
The band fell quiet, turning to her expectantly.
Luna pointed to Layla, Solis, and Lepos. “Layla. Drop the knife, or sheathe it, or whatever. Solis, stop being such a jerk. And Lepos, could you please not antagonize either of them for five minutes?”
All three opened their mouths to protest, but she was already whirling on Corr and Violet. “Corr, human form. Now. Violet, dry up, would you?”
The sprite shuddered into shape, arms crossed. Violet sniffled, her flowers regaining a pale flush of color.
“I don’t know what’s going on between you two, but I need you to either fix it or ignore it. Violet, you’re supposed to be in charge of making sure they-” gesturing to Layla, Solis, and Lepos, “-don’t get out of hand. Use your emotional flowers or whatever. Corr, you’re not even supposed to be here. Your job was scouting, remember?”
Everyone fell quiet, waiting for her to continue.
Luna dragged in a breath. “Look, I don’t think any of us asked for this, right? We’d all be much happier working alone, with no annoying teammates to drag us down. But the thing is, we are teammates. And we’ve got to learn to work together if we’re going to make this work.”
She pointed to Layla. “Layla, you’re definitely a loner. You’re aggressive. I need you to tone it down, or better, use it as fuel. Don’t get mad at my annoying little brother. Get mad at the bad guys.”
Next was Solis. “I’m just going to say it: you’ve been a jerk lately. Stop mooning over the girl with knives and move on with your life. We need you, so grow up, will you? Lepos, for some reason you’ve managed to become the bane of everyone’s life, including mine. Dial down the personality, please.”
Violet was in line after those two, but Luna skipped over her, since the girl looked close to tears again. “Corr, I don’t think you’re really as…whatever…as you like to pretend to be. You’re part of the group too, so maybe act like it sometimes. And Violet…just do whatever it takes to keep those flowers happy, or whatever.”
Luna took a deep breath. “That was a lot, but we’ve got to come together, or we’re going to fail.”
The group looked at each other, and one by one, nodded.

part 3

It is a cool spring day, with the grass still wet and green from the morning dew. King Arthur sits in his court, and Queen Guinevere roams her gardens, struggling with the discontent that has seeped into her life lately. Everything should be perfect. She is queen, she lives in a beautiful castle with noble knights surrounding her, and she is with the love of her life…isn’t she?
She has everything a mortal woman could ever want…right?

The knight is approaching, his horse lathered with sweat. He has been riding hard these past few hours, but he is in sight of his goal now - the gray towers stretching towards the sky, with Camelot’s banners flying from the peaks. Sighing, the knight slows his horse, and he enters at a steady trot.
There are other knights entering the castle, and they shout hails to him as he passes. The young knight is popular, and all of them have witnessed his skill, or heard tales of it, despite his recent arrival to King Arthur’s court.
He nods and waves back, dreading his final arrival. A sight is waiting there he does not want to see.
Finally he dismounts, handing his horse over to a page, and enters the castle.
A rustle of silken skirts greets him, and he briefly closes his eyes.
Here it went again.
“Sir Lancelot!” Guinevere greeted him. “You’re back.”
He bowed to her and kissed the offered hand, then let it drop, to her disappointment.
“Where is Arthur?” he asked, craning his neck around the hall.
“Oh…somewhere. Don’t you want to walk in the garden with me until he returns? It’s fresh and cool out there.”
“If Arthur is not here, I must go to my wife,” Lancelot said, bowing again and then walking away.
The young queen stared after him, tears starting in her eyes for reasons that even she couldn’t fully fathom.
“I hate that Elaine,” she whispered to herself, and whirled away.

King Arthur found her in the gardens, with traces of tears on her cheeks. “Darling, what’s wrong?” he asked.
Guinevere turned to him, dashing a smile onto her face. “Nothing. Just a - just a rose that pricked me, that’s all.”
“A cruel wound it must have given that little hand, to make you weep so,” he said in concern, reaching for her hand, the same one Lancelot had kissed.
She jerked it away. “It’s fine. The pain will soon pass.”
A crease came between the king’s brows, but he only nodded. “I hope it heals soon, darling,” was all he said. “Here…let me…”
He plucked a rose from a nearby bush and carefully snapped off the thorns, presenting her with the now-harmless flower.
“For your beautiful hair,” he said, bending down to kiss her as he tucked the rose behind her ear.
Guinevere said nothing, but in her heart she was thinking she wished that the man in front of her was the king, but the knight - the knight she could never have.

part 4

Jane walked through the door and bang into her fate, also known as the new guy, Mark.
“I-I-I’m so sorry,” she stuttered, blushing like crazy. “Wow you’re cute I mean um sorry didn’t see you there.”
“Nah it’s okay,” Mark said, also blushing. He felt like his face was a bottle of hot sauce. “Your eyes are very nice. Not that I noticed or anything in the two seconds that our faces were inches apart.”
“Um yes,” Jane said, but then her boyfriend appeared and ruined the moment.
“Hi Jane I told you I get really jealous when you talk to other guys please stop,” Randy complained, slinging his arm around Jane who frowned and tried to escape.
“I can talk to whoever I want, stop bossing me,” she huffed, flinging her hair around which she had put in a high ponytail that morning just so she could adequately express her sass. “I’ll do whatever I want, leave me alone.”
“It feels like you don’t even like me anymore,” Randy said angrily, throwing off his baseball cap and throwing it on the floor and stomping on it.
“I don’t like guys with anger management issues,” Jane retorted, crossing her arms. “If you’re going to be a jerk we should just break up.”
“Fine then!”
“Fine then!”
Both of them stormed away, leaving Mark standing there awkwardly.
“Okay then,” he said, and went to class.

Jane came to Mark later that week. “So um I know we’re not really super close yet but I have a favor to ask,” she said, tugging on her ponytail.
“Yes, whatever I can do for you Jane,” Mark replied, smiling. Jane sighed. “Well the thing is I really miss having a boyfriend. I don’t even really like Randy, I just wanted to be cool like all the other girls.”
“Mhm yeah,” Mark said, wondering where this was going.
“So um,” Jane started, blushing, “I was wondering if you would pretend to be my boyfriend so that he gets jealous and wants me again.”
“Oh,” Mark said, staring at her. “Uh yeah I guess. If it would help you.”
“Yes thanks so much,” Jane said and walked away quickly so he couldn’t see how red her face was.

“Can you even believe Jane and Mark are dating, like not even a week after we broke up,” Randy complained to his best friend.
“Yeah that sucks,” his unnamed friend agreed. “It’s like she doesn’t even care.”
“The thing is I really love Jane but she can be so annoying. I wish she would dump Mark and be with me again.”
“Yeah that would be great,” his friend agreed. “You should tell her so.”
“I think I will,” Randy said, thinking very hard. “Yeah I’ll tell her tomorrow,” he decided.
“Okay good luck,” said the unnamed friend who was there solely for plot reasons and had no real purpose of his own. After Randy was gone he turned into a beetle and scuttled away to reappear no more.

“Hi Jane,” Randy said the next day. “I just wanted to tell you that I love you so much and I’ve been so sad without you, will you be my girlfriend again. I’m sorry I dumped you and also stomped on my hat.”
“Lol no,” Jane said. “I already found true love. At first I was just fake dating Mark to make you jealous but then we discovered we actually liked each other. Also I never liked you anyway.”
“Bro that sucks,” Randy said. “Why would you do that to me? You made me think you actually cared.”
“No one cares about you Randy, you can drown in lava for all I care,” Jane said, then she ran away to go throw herself in Mark’s arms.
Randy sat down on the ground and had himself a little emo moment for a while then he stood up and began wandering around, but then he saw Mark and Jane kissing and it broke his heart. He keeled over on the sidewalk, deader than a flashlight left on all night.
“Wow, look at that dead dude on the sidewalk over there,” one kid said. “People shouldn’t litter like that.”
“Is it littering if he’s dead?” another kid asked.
“Yes,” the other kid answered.

Last edited by ChueyTheCat (March 23, 2025 20:00:01)

silverlynx-
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swc megathread: march '25

Critique for Vicky

First off, when reading through this I was amazed! It was absolutely incredible, you used so many techniques in such clever ways and I really connected with the character and I could really understand their emotions! If you don’t get a fanfic prize then I’m literally gonna rage cos this is awesome <3

I sit here, shivers running down my spine, sat in the cold of the once vibrant room, an empty shell of the beauty it used to be: and your light used to radiate and bask me in its glow, now trying to remember what it feels like to have that warmth; cuz you're gone, and i almost dont remember what it was like to have you - the pain stabbing through my chest, like you were never here for me, only an illusion - an illusion who left me here to rot. It's so empty now, gloom clinging onto the walls, their heads bowed down mourning whatever you used to be, dust settling on that weathered armchair you used to pick at and peel as you listened to my rants and ramble, laughing at the stupid things I used to say, and your laughter would fill the room, filling it with a light never to be replaced as my shadow looms across the creaky floorboards, like they're mourning in sadness of the loss of you. The walls used to hold voices and now they don’t know what to do without them, like even the air is waiting for something—someone—that isn’t coming back, like everything is too loud and too quiet all at once and no matter how much I try to fill the space, it doesn’t work, it never works, because it’s not just space I’m trying to fill, it’s you.
I just wanted to mention, throughout the whole piece I love your use of the incorrect grammar! It works so well!
I was a bit confused at the colon you put in near the beginning of the paragraph. I think it would all just flow better if you put the ‘and your light’ in a separate sentence and then get rid of the ‘and.’
The illusion part I also felt a bit confused at because when you first mention it, it seems like you’re talking about how the character you’re writing from the perspective of is the illusion - the person who left them came for an illusion - but in the next part it makes it seem as though the person who left them is the illusion, so maybe just try and clear that bit up a bit.
You also repeated the adjective ‘empty’ twice, once in the ‘empty shell’ part and another time in the ‘it’s so empty now’ part. You could change it to something like desolate or deserted or bare so it doesn’t get too repetitive. You also repeated the words ‘light’ and ‘mourning’ so you could change them to something like ‘radiance’ or ‘grieving.’
I think a comma after ‘down’ would also be useful to separate the phrases.
Wow, that was really harsh! I’m being extremely picky lol

And you used to say ‘forever’ in a way that felt so real, but i'm left in the dust now and i know all of it wasn't, and i used to count the freckles that spilt from your eyes, like constellations from far above brought as a blessing to me here, your presence a grace no one else had the fortune to be gifted, but it's gone now, and your gone, and I keep thinking, was it real?—because if it was real, if it really meant anything, then why does it feel like I’m the only one standing here, stuck, waiting, breaking, while you just… left?

You used to say my tears were beauty, you used to wipe them gently and tell me my pain was worth it, that even when i'm broken i look like a fantasy - is that why you left me, so i would slowly decompose and you could watch my beauty from afar, cuz im breaking right now, and it's not a sight to behold; i only wish one thing, that if you had to go you could've given me something, anything, because this silence: this aching, yawning, stretching, suffocating nothing you left behind? it’s cruel, it’s so, so cruel. And I don’t think I can do it, I don’t think I can just pretend I’m fine, I don’t think I can just move on and act like you didn’t devour a piece of me with you when you walked away.
This part is so beautiful and I have absolutely no criticism whatsoever.
I love how you describe the freckles as constellations and the repeated verbs - stuck, waiting, breaking and aching, yawning, stretching - and it’s just all so amazing

I keep replaying it, you know, that last moment, the way you stood there, just for a second, just long enough for me plead—hope—that maybe you’d turn around, but you didn’t, not even slight hesitation,you just walked right out like I meant nothing, like the years and memories you left behind didn't exist, like I wasn’t still standing here, watching you go, like I wasn’t still waiting for you to stop, to turn around, to say anything at all. God, I was so stupid to think you might, wishful thinking, the type that has been my downfall.
And now i sit here, a corpse in this little empty room, beating myself up over memories you think nothing of, memories you've already forgot; i know you've already gotten over it, and i know i should do to, but i cant seem to let go of everything that meant so much to me, can’t seem to stop myself from reaching for them, picking them apart, looking for something I missed, some sign that this isn't just all make-belief in my head.

But it doesn’t matter, does it, because you’re not here, you never will be anymore: even if you were, what would I say, what’s there even left to say? ‘Please, if you have to go, don’t do it like this, don’t leave me standing here trying to convince myself it didn’t mean as much as it did, don’t—’ No, I wouldn’t say that, i wouldn't take my burden out on you, I’d just… I’d just look at you, and maybe nod, maybe I’d smile, if I could make myself, if the tears wouldn't come spilling out my eyes and the sobs wouldn't come jumping out my mouth, maybe I’d make it easy for you, i'd try to accept it, because I don’t think I could take it if I had to watch you let me down slowly.

In this section, near the end of the first paragraph, you could try to make the sentence ‘think you might, wishful thinking, the type that has been my downfall’ a little bit clearer by adding some context to what they ‘think you might’ do and say ‘but it’s all just wishful thinking’ instead of saying just ‘wishful thinking.’ I was also a bit confused at ‘the type that has been my downfall’ because you never mentioned any type, so maybe some explanation on that would be nice <3
When you say ‘I know I should do to’, I think you should change it to ‘too’ because I know you’re doing the incorrect grammar thing, which works really well for most of it, but this part I feel like the two words are just completely different.

Scene 2:
a few years later
I'm back.
/again/.
I told myself I wouldn't return. I told myself last time would be the last.
I lied.
It wouldn't be the worst thing I've done.
I don't know what brings me here. I come back every time.
It doesn't ache as much. I guess I've accepted it.
You won't come back.
Period.
I never should've hoped. Never should've allowed myself to dream. To /care/.
But here i am.
/again/.
I feel like it should hurt more. Like the ache i used to feel should return. I want it to.
It doesn't.
Everything always leaves me behind. Everything and everyone.

The room hasn't changed much.
The chair is still falling apart. The walls paint is still peeling.
And the dust clings onto everything. The shelves. The floor boards. My skin.
It chokes me.
A cruel reminder of how you've choked me too.
I run my hand over the chair you used to pick at. You know, it's leather is still pealing. You never could leave things alone. Always picking. Always Fidgeting. So persistent.

This part was so lovely! I loved the sort of disjointed, poem style of writing you used!
‘I told myself last time would be the last’ could be changed to ‘I told myself the last time would be the last,’ so that it’s just… correct spag?? haha
You also said ‘it’s leather’ instead of ‘its leather’ and again, I know you’re doing the incorrect grammar technique, but its and it’s are completely different. You also spelt peeling wrong when describing the leather btw!! You also repeat peeling quite a few times, so maybe try change it to something like ‘flaking.’
Other than that, stunning!

I used to hate it. The noise. The way your restless fingers scratched and scraped.
Now, I'd give anything to hear it again.
But there's only silence.
The one you cruelly gifted me as you walked out that door.
I sit.
The chair groans beneath me, like it remembers too.
And for a moment, I imagine you're still here—right across from me. Smirking. Teasing.
Picking away at the world like it was yours to break.
I guess it was, because you
b r o k e
my world.

The cold is my only companion. It sticks with me thick and thin. It runs up my spine leaving shivers behind and I almost sigh with relief.
Ever-so-cruel relief.

I stay a little longer.
Just long enough for the ghosts to find me.
They always do.
No matter how much I try to leave them behind.

Then I leave.
I open the door and walk right out without a care of what I'm leaving behind. (you)
Just like you did.
I feel like the ‘you’ in brackets should be changed to its own line so it’s more impactful. Maybe something like ‘I was leaving you behind, my old mind, my old heart, my old soul’ or something!
No other criticisms <3

I know I should’ve left with you.
I should’ve walked away when I had the chance.
I should’ve saved myself.
But I didn’t.
Your absence rattles me.
It eats at me.
It lingers like the cold, seeping into my bones.

But the worst part?
The worst part isn’t the silence.
It’s not the emptiness that surrounds me.
It's not the fact that the cold is my closest companion.

I’ll be back.
I’ll always be back.
That's the worst bit
The bit that comes back to haunt me every time.

I always come back.
Every time I tell myself I won’t.
Every time I swear to leave it all behind, to finally walk away and never look back.

Because some ghosts…
Some ghosts were never meant to leave.

And I am one of them.
Bound to this place,
to the echoes of what once was.
Forever chained by the memory of you.

You.
The only thing I ever wanted back.
OMG THIS PART WAS SUCH A GOOD ENDING ABSOLUTELY NO CRITICISM IT WAS SO BEAUTIFUL I LOVED IT AAAAAAAAAAA <3

Anyways! This was honestly one of the best writing pieces I have read for a very long time and I think that it shows so much talent! It’s just incredible <3
Good luck in the writing comp (like you’ll need it lol) and i hope this critique helped!!
euphoriafall
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500+ posts

swc megathread: march '25

critique for skylar

Firstly – I absolutely loved reading this piece – it’s sweet and light-hearted, and this interaction between Renée and Robert is really well developed. Their dynamic is just so lovely.
“Renée, you did not just-” Robert was either in shock or absolutely done, and Renée still couldn’t tell which one it was, even after three years of marriage and six of being in a relationship. She saw Robert looking at her, then at the cat, then back to her. Renée smiled as she walked through the door, coddling a tiny kitten, having returned rather late from the day shift.

Here Renée sees and hears Robert before she walks in through the door. I don’t know if this was intentional or not, but perhaps you could make it clearer either way – for example, have Renée already be inside the house, or show them talking to each other whilst Renée is still outside.

coddling a tiny kitten

I’m not sure if coddling is the right word here – to look after something overprotectively. Maybe something else, like hug or clasp?

Robert sighed… Renée sighed… Robert sighed

Here, they sigh three times in a row – it’s a tiny detail but with a small change it could really elevate the writing.

He was clearly exasperated

Exasperated might be too strong of a word here, as Robert seems to only be mildly annoyed.

“Your communication skills are terrible.” Robert sighed.

I absolutely love this line. I just wanted to say that.

“Oh well. It happened.”

I’m not sure as to the purpose this line serves – it doesn’t really flow into the next section of dialogue, or add anything to the previous conversation thread.

he was still clearly reeling from the shock of having a cat jump out of his arms, and was trying to soothe some pain

I absolutely understand what you’re trying to get at here, but I think it could be made clearer – for example, something like “soothe the emotional sting from the cat’s rejection of him”. That was honestly a really bad example but I can’t really think of any words right now. Sorry!

All in all, I adored reading and critiquing this, and I request more Renée and Robert because I just can’t get over their relationship, it’s so wholesome. Happy writing, and good luck for the writing comp! (and sorry for the short critique but I really have nothing more to say, it's amazing already!)
Thecatperson19
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swc megathread: march '25

Weekly #3 - Writing Tropes

Part 1: Trope Pros and Cons 
1,356 words

The Fabled (Rhyming) Prophecy - Often placed in the beginning of the story as a prologue of sorts.

Pros: A prophecy adds mystery and intrigue. It serves somewhat as a riddle, so readers are trying to figure it out alongside the characters. A prohecy can lead to delicious forshadowing and evil twists that leave readers gaping. Additionally, it frames the quest or the storyline, giving the reader a sense of the story structure and thus they know what they will be getting into.
Cons: If the prophecy is poorly written, it can be really obvious and make the reader think that the main characters are idiots. It can also be kind of cheesy or unnecessary if it is not properly entwined with the plot. A prophecy can be too revealing – if the reader figures it out at an inopportune time, then the book is spoiled.
Final thoughts: A prophecy is just another way of controlling the reader's information inputs. If poorly done, it can undermine the plot of the book. If done right, it should provide just enough details to leave the reader searching for more and become clear at very intentional moments.

Secret Royalty - Similar to The Chosen One, the main character learns that they, all along, have blue blood.

Pros: It can be a rewarding twist, as the main character finally gets a good lot in life or they are the nicest, loveliest person on earth but doomed to be a mere peasant. Allows for lots of interesting conflict when the main character's normal world and royal world clash. The author can now indulge in the most fancy descriptions of everything, seeing as with royalty, the setting and clothing must be posh and fabulous.
Cons: It can come out of nowhere and seem like an afterthought. If the main character already seems to have it all (maybe not necessarily material goods, but a pretty good life, nice family, and also respect), then at that point they seem almost spoiled or Mary-Sue like. Realistically, there also are just not going to be many secret royals running around, which kind of puts dampers on the whole business anyway, so this trope is usually rather idealistic and better suited for fantasy. If not done right, it will usually fall in the same old rut of “I'm royal but I just want to be like everyone else. Sigh. My life is so hard.”
Final thoughts: Must be done right, I suppose. Too often this trope leads to characters falling into stereotypical roles. If done right, it ought to introduce complexity and conflict - the kind that deals with class and identity and all sorts of introspective things that acknowledge that one thing is sometimes not neccessarily wholly good all the time.

No Parents - We learn that the main character's parents have died off or dissapeared at some time in their sad life, and thus they are all alone.

Pros: Eliminates having to think about the main character being held accountable for their actions by their family and also allows them to go on grand quests without worrying anyone or having to ask for permission. It also is a reality that many have to face, which can make a narrative poignant and create deeply rooted inner conflict. Can lead to found family.
Cons: The main character's family is killed off for no really good reason, making the story feel almost as if it has blinders on because it fails to address a very formative and influential part of literally every single person on Earth's life. The conflict emerging from the lack of parental authorities can be shallow and poorly developed, or simply not effective. Additionally, sometimes it is only done for plot convenience. When this happens, a story misses out on good sources of conflict and telling relationships, serving to make the character's world more closed to the reader.
Final thoughts: Removing family members from the main character's life must be done so with some kind of purpose in mind, of which that purpose ought to advance the plot or narrative of the story, not just serve to make the character more traumatized. An alternative that many seem to sadly forgo is creating large, complex familial situations, which, I wager, when used appropriately will offer much more rewarding results and create a more well-rounded world (Meet the Robinsons is my case in point).

Enter the Wise (Bearded) Mentor - At some point along the main character's journey, they come across a wise, old hermit/magician/person who is really good at the thing that the main character wants to be really good at. This person takes the main character under their wing, then at the moment in which the main character has finally learned how to wield some skill successfully, they die.


Pros: This character can be quirky and fun, and they also are a trusted figure who main character can go to. At first, if they play the reluctant mentor, then they also will have some character development as they get close to the main character. Additionally, they play an important role in the main character's development, which can make it seem less unrealistic, as they had to learn from someone else, not on their own.
Cons: This character archetype can start looking very similar. Read: flowing robes, long white or gray beard, and a staff of some sort. They sorry, he most likely meddles in magic of some sort and is excellent at it, though slightly grumpy about having to deal with the noob the main character is. Either that or he is a hilarious and quirky old man who is somehow very invested in impossible, modern day things. He is often an old man, which takes away from the reality that people have diverse mentor figures in their lives. This character also always seems to die or disappear right when the main character needs them the most, which the reader may find predictable. His sudden appearance may seem plot convenient, and, if he isn't a particularly impactful mentor (that is not to say he wasn't a good one, rather his presence and proceeding actions had no true effect on the main character), then he is rendered useless and can seem like a bore to the reader.
Final thoughts: It is not necessarily a harmful trope, but in order for it to resonate more with the audience, the mentor must be more to the main character than a comic relief or fountain of wisdom. It also would be nice if this character is not represented by a stock image of Gandalf, and instead the author takes into account that mentors come in all shapes and sizes and they are their own unique person.

MacGuffin - The thing! You know. That we have to get! That thing.

Pros: Very well suited for a treasure-hunting adventure, seeing as finding the treasure is the name of the game, or the trope. When the plot is centered around having to retrieve some mysterious or otherwise object, it gives the characters a defined goal, thus the reader knows what they're getting into. The twists and turns as the characters try to find the object or play keep-away with it with the villains create suspense and tension. The journey to the object can be fraught with conflict and challenge the characters' very beliefs and motivation.
Cons: When thrown in more as a subplot, it feels out of the way and random. The reader may feel as though having to detour and fetch something is a bore, and distracts from the tension that had been building. It is very much rooted in the actual plot of the book, so the author risks the reader never really connecting to the character if they do not shape a strong narrative with their journey (Read: Indiana Jones vs. National Treasure. The latter has a better narrative, thus I like it more. I'm just saying.)
Final thoughts: Can lead to wonderful adventures and treasure hunt shennanigins, but it only really is enjoyable if the trope is entwined with a strong narrative. Without the author putting thought into the character's development as it is related to the plot, it quickly risks falling flat and becoming a bore.


Part 2: Favorite Trope
Macguffin - 515 words


Every single moment had led to this.

She stared at the view screen, and, even though she couldn't take her eyes off it, her mind slipped away into a memory. It had been faint and tucked away in the back of her mind until now.

Her mother had taken her to a museum. It had a playground, which fascinated her young self much more than the actual displays. She crawled through the rocketship play set, pretending to be on an important mission.

Peeping out the soft port hole, she spied her mother sitting at a bench.

“Look at me!” she cried out, sticking her hand through the window to wave.

Her mother glanced up from her phone and smiled.“My little astonaut,” she said and raised her phone to take a picture.

She ducked her head out of the port hole and kept climbing through the play set.

I'd like to be an astronaut someday. she thought. This is fun.

And here she was now. She had somehow achieved that far away goal and was on the cusp of discovering something world changing.

“This could be the crux of our mission,” she whispered. “Finding the limits of the universe.”

She finally tore her eyes away from the view screen and looked at the faces of the crew. They had been together for so long, it seemed. As she observed their range of expressions, she knew that they all felt the same inside.

“Commander?” came one of them, waiting for his response.

His brow wrinkled.

“If that is true,” he started. “Then something's wrong.”

She hated that they had found what seemed to be problem instead of a solution.

“The universe is supposed to be expanding, not shrinking,” he continued.

As he turned around and gave them orders, she hunched over her station, watching the vast swathe of light and hoping, praying it wasn't true, or that she had seen it wrong, or perhaps that they would just be able to escape in time before the light took them, too.

But, as she stared and stared, tracking meteroids, and really watching that brilliant line across empty space, she could sworn she saw something more, something beyond, something that she innately recognized deep in the feral, visceral parts of her.

When she spoke up, begging the others to stay for just a moment's more, she couldn't put it into words when she tried. But, they had been together for so long, and they saw. And it scared them because risking being right, about who knows what, risked everything, and they so wanted to take the risk.

Unfortunately, Mission Control did not feel the need to. The hyperdrive turned on and in a blink of an eye that wonderful, terrible line of pure light was gone. Before they could even brace themselves at their stations, the crew was gone, too.

When Claribell woke up, no memories, hidden or otherwise, burst to the surface. The thought every single moment had led to this pounded in her head, and, for some reason, as she looked around the sterile white room, it made her sick.


Part 3: Unique Twist
The Hitchhiker's Guide to the Galaxy - the only survivor / the last of their kind trope - 657 words
quoted lines are taken from the book (though the second is slightly altered) and thus not included in the wordcount

“There was a terrible ghastly silence.

There was a terrible ghastly noise.

There was a terrible ghastly silence.

The Vogon Constructor Fleet coasted away into the inky starry void.”

Ford Prefect lit a match in the small galley cabin. It was empty. He shook it out.

Sitting down on one of the grubby mattresses, he reached into his pocket and pulled out one of the bags of peanuts he had bought from the barman just a few minutes earlier. He opened it and quietly helped himself to them, feeling marginally better as they returned some salt and protein into his body.

Hmm. What now?

It had been a long while since he had felt the groggy effects of a matter transferance beam. It felt terrible, but the familiarity felt good. But then, the thought of his own pleasure for finally escaping Earth felt awful. He was very grateful to the Dentrassis, of course, for letting him onboard, but the events that had just transpired had left him shaken, even with all the alcohol cushioning his system from the jump.

Moments earlier, Arthur had been going on and on about something or other. For once, he wasn't paying enough attention to point out the incredibly obvious. It surprised Ford, as it seemed like for some reason, stating the obvious was something humans loved to do and did so inncessantly. Arthur had, though, finally noticed the looming Vogon fleet in the sky, in the unfortunate manner of tripping, falling, rolling some ways away, and then, with his face fixed to the sky, shrieking with sudden fear as the ships tore across the sky and the world fell into chaos. Ford knew what was about to happen, yet he still was too slow to save him as Earth was demolished.

Coldness gripped him as he thought of his only Earthly friend, his memory quickly becoming more distant as the seconds passed by.

Don't panic. he thought to himself. Whatever you do, don't panic.

That reminded him, and with a start, he dug through his satchel. He pulled out The Hitchhiker's Guide to the Galaxy and stared at the big, friendly letters embossed on the cover reading: Don't Panic.

A thought hit him. His extended entry on Earth must be out of date, now.

He opened the book, screen glowing in the dim light, and looked up the right page.

The ship's intercom clicked on and the violent sound came through. The Babel fish in Ford's ear translated the words into perfect British English. It was interesting how that had become his language of choice after 15 years. Prostetnic Vogon Jeltz's voice filled the small room.

“This is your captain speaking, so stop whatever you're doing and pay attention. First of all I can see from our instruments that we have a hitchhiker aboard. Hello, wherever you are. I just wanted to make it totally clear to you that you are not at all welcome. I worked hard to get where I am today, and I didn't become captain of a Vogon constructor ship simply so I could turn it into a taxi service for a degenerate freeloader. I have sent out a search party, and as soon as they find you I will put you off the ship. If you're very lucky I might read you some of my poetry first.

Secondly, we are about to jump into hyperspace for a journey to Barnard's Star. On arrival, we will stay in dock for a seventy-two hour refit, and no-one's to leave the ship during that time. I repeat, all planet leave is canceled. I've just had an unhappy love affair so I don't see why anyone else should have a good time.

Message ends.”

Ford found travelling through hyperspace trying. He held tightly to The Hitchiker's Guide to the Galaxy and curled himself into a ball on the mattress. The ship jumped into hyperspace and the bottom fell out of his mind and for a moment, he could pretend he wasn't there anymore, just like the Earth and the friend he was leaving behind.

Ford came to, six light-years away from where he had been mere moments ago. He slowly uncurled himself and held up the guide, hands shaking slightly as he searched for Earth's entry. It lie, in its small little space, on the bottom.

“Harmless.”

He closed his eyes. In his mind he could see the updated entry he had sent off to his editor.

“Mostly harmless.”

It was an improvement, of course, though now out of date.

For a moment, he let himself slip into guilt. 15 years of research for one word. Hundreds of pages of writing, thousands of words, for one, out of date, correction. Restaurants to avoid in Los Angeles, tips for aliens in New York City, yoghurt on the Greek Islands. Not only gone, but rendered worthless to every other person in the galaxy except for himself. He knew what Arthur would say. And in that moment, Ford Prefect felt immensely sorry.

The sound of steel-tipped boots marching down the hall rang through the ship.

Vogons.

If he let them catch him, soon there truly wouldn't be anything left from Earth.

Part 4: Incorporating Them
Beauty and the beast (prince with an odious personality), damsel in distress, forced proximity - 1,349 words


In a hole in the ground there lived a boy. Not just any kind of boy. He had the kind of features that didn't require one too much thought to consider handsome, and, even though he lived in a hole, he had a sense of pride that would find itself unmatched in the tri-county area. This made sense, as he was also a prince, and princes were universally known for holding these two traits.

The unusual business of his living in a hole was the only anomaly that could be found when comparing his princely status to his current reality. It was not a very big hole, but certainly larger than that of a well. Upon hearing his story, many have made the assumption that the poor boy simply fell in a well. That is not the case. His earthen prison lay in a very plain field, which was surrounded by more plain fields, until all that one could see were rolling, plain fields of grasses, the landscape dotted by the occassional tree. Of course, the fields were not actually that plain. They glowed amber in the sunsets and were filled with lively wildlife, from the hopping hares to the gently grazing cattle that roamed the region. But the boy could not see this. The hole in which he lay was so deep that all he could see when he looked up was the soft blue of the sky and the bottoms of the clouds. It was so deep that he could not climb out, but that did not dissuade him from attempting to.

The hole was a far cry from the palaces most princes found themselves in. He had the misfortune of calling a hole in the ground his permanent address because of a witch. A few years ago, when he was a proper prince in a castle surrounded by his royal family, he decided to be a proper toad to a visiting witch. She decided that she didn't like his attitude, and cast him into a deep hole in the Earth where he could sit in exile and solitude until he got his act together. Witches have certain rights and privileges like that.

And how the boy tried to get out. He used his best tricks, smooth talking the witch when he visited, trying to convince her that he was a changed person. He stacked his sad array of furniture and triumphantly climbed up it only to realize he fell short about 17 more chairs. He yelled and cursed at the witch on other days, hoping that tperhaps in her rage she would at least exile him somewhere else where more interesting things were happening. And when all that was said and done, he dirtied his royal hands, and tried to claw and clamber up the walls of the hole. He could never make it up to the top. He always fell, and in those moments where he lay on the floor with the air blown out of his lungs and his bruises aching did he really, truly feel sorry for himself.

But then one day, something changed. The witch, it seemed, found another victim.

He was sitting, head tilted up, watching the clouds blow softly past. There really wasn't much else to do in the hole. But then, something delightfully new happened. A shout came from aboveground.

He stood, initially shocked, but then wary. He didn't hear shouts everyday. After a few years in the hole, he had learned that cows really didn't do much shouting or generally making noises that humans also tended to make. The witch shouted at him, though. She was loud. She had a horrible sense of humor and expected him to laugh at her jokes. Sometimes he did, when he felt like another attempt at convincing her to let him out. It didn't work. Sometimes he didn't laugh, and it just made everything awkward. The witch wasn't awful to him, which annoyed him, but she also wasn't exactly a saint either, which was evident by her way of treating those who offended her. He didn't think that the shout came from the witch. it didn't.

A shaggy head appeared at the top of the hole. It struck the boy as peculiar because it didn't appear like a person standing at the hole looming down at him. Rather, the head almost seemed to lay on the ground, as if someone was lying in the field with their head hanging in the hole, misinterpreted as a pillow. It also seemed peculiar to the boy because the ugliness of the head's haircut, he thought was so profound that he could tell even when staring at the back of this person's head.

“That's an ugly haircut,” the boy said.

“Hey!” she said, for it was now apparent to the boy, that, despite the ugly, choppy haircut, the person that the head and face and now voice belonged to was, indeed, a she.

His eyes widened as he took in a different face than the witch's for the first time in years. He would have considered it an entirely forgettable face before his exile, but now, after being so separated from the rest of non-witch civilization, he resolved that if he had time to commit it to memory, it would not be forgettable until a after few hours had passed.

“It is true.” The boy shrugged.

She narrowed her eyes at him, then turned her head away once more.

“Are you stuck?” he called out.

She did not respond. Then, with some effort, she looked back down into the hole.

“Yes. Though the irony of your question is not lost on me,” she said.

“I'm trapped in the magic brambles that surround your hole. They have me bound to the ground.”

“Oh.”

He paused.

“There are magic brambles?”

She narrowed her eyes at him again, which, he presumed, would be more imposing if she wasn't just a head hanging over a hole.

"Apparently there are. To stop people from trying to rescue you.“

He rubbed his chin. ”That must be why no one has come for me in all this time.“

”I can see why the witch thought to put you down here.“ the girl muttered.

With a start, he pointed up at her. ”Were you trying to rescue me?“

She looked away, which struck him as odd because there really wasn't anything else to look at

.”Maybe.“

Hope bloomed in the boy-prince's heart. Hope for a better future, a future outside of the deep hole he found himself stuck in.

”Well, just pass me a rope and I shall be properly rescued!“ he called out to her. ”I could even free you, if you want.“

Now she glared at him. ”I'm sorry if I offend you, but I really can't. In case you didn't hear me, I am bound to the ground.“

He sighed. His hope crashed and burned fantastically.

”It'll probably take a while, but I think I can get myself out,“ the girl started. The flames of his hope's burning wreckage simmered low. ”But I don't know if I'll even want to rescue you by the time I do.“

The flames lept up high again with renewed vigour.

He was prepared to shout at the girl, who clearly didn't even know who he was, but she cut off his train of thought with her own.

”It would be wretched of me, though, to leave you stuck in a hole in the ground,“ she sighed. ”Not even pompous princes deserve that.“

”That's what I've been saying!“ he burst out.

He could hear the faint sound of her giggling up above. ”Sure, I bet that's been working real well.“

”Not really,“ the boy said. ”This is going to be a long few days, isn't it?“

”You bet!" the girl replied, head turning away once more to, as the boy presumed, begin fighting the magical brambles or whatever she was going to do to get out.

He slumped against the hole wall.

It was going to be a very long few days indeed.


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  • total words: 2,089
  • part 1 words: 323
  • part 2 words: 424
  • part 3 words: 564
  • part 4 words: 778
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Part 1
Hero’s Journey // 82 words

A lot of books that I’ve read have the trope Hero’s Journey. For a short summary of what happens: Hero’s Journey is basically where the protagonist has to go on some sort of quest to retreive an object or person most of the time.
I like Hero’s Journey because you get to see new characters join along the way, watch them grow, and explore the world with them. It’s a very common trope in fantasy books, but I love it a lot!

The Damsel in Distress // 75 words

The Damsel in Distress is a common trope in fairy tales. Characters that are seen as a damsel in distress include Snow White and Rapunzel. Usually, a girl who is written as weak or helpless is stuck in a situtation. Then, a hero will come along and save or help the girl. Most of the stories will end with them falling in love.
I think this trope is a little too common in fairy tales, but it’s easy for people to understand it and kids like it a lot.

The Chosen One // 51 words

Some examples of characters that are like this include Harry Potter and Percy Jackson. The character is usually connected to a prophecy and they’re destined to defeat the bad guy.
I like this one, but sometimes it feels a little overused and it can be hard to relate to the character.

The Mentor // 65 words

The mentor is usually portrayed as an old, wise man. They help guide the protagonist through the story, giving them pieces of advice or showing them how to use their powers and skills.
I love this one a lot, the characters that I have met that are this way are likeable in my opinion. My personal favorite is Belgarath from The Belgariad by David Eddings.

Best of the Best // 50 words

These characters are the best at everything. I don’t really like these characters a lot because they can be unrealistic. At times, they can be nice and likeable characters if written right.
I probably won’t use this trope very often, but I’m still willing to read books with this trope.

Part 2 - used: the mentor
Timothy tapped his foot. Where was that old man up to now? He thought. He stood up and paced back and forth on the tile floor. Maybe he’s just oiling those old bones of his.
A couple minutes later, Gregory showed up. His white beard stretched down to the floor, along with his deep blue robes. Timothy gazed at Gregory’s light blue eyes that sparkled with wisdom.
Gregory placed a firm, but gentle hand on Timothy’s back. “Well, hey kiddo. What have you been up to now?”
“Nothing much, grandfather. I discovered that the herb snarkler has some healing properties that the old lady at the library didn’t know about. I’ve been doing well in my studies, I’m top of my class.”
Gregory gave a light smile. “That’s wonderful, I’m proud of you son. Is there something else on your mind? My wise old bones sense that that isn’t all.”
“There is something,” Timothy paused. “Well, more of a she. Her name is Delilah, her eyes are like an ocean filled with sparkles. And her hair is just.. Luxorious. I can’t help but staring at her. Her smile is like a flower.”
Gregory nodded. “That’s exactly how I felt with your grandmother, when I first met her.”
Timothy sighed, “Do you think Delilah and I will ever be married?”
“Maybe some day, if you love her unconditionally. Show her grace and patience, and maybe she’ll turn towards you.”
Gregory and Timothy started walking down the cobblestone path. “Tell me about how your mom is doing. Is she getting better?”
Timothy frowned. “Well, not really. She rarely talks and she’s always in bed. Frankly, I think she’s getting worse. I hope not though.”
“Have you tried giving her maple leaf? I’ve heard that the tea helps with comfort, maybe it’ll give her some.”
Timothy nodded. “I have tried that. Nothing works. Even if something does work, it only lasts for a bit.”
Blue birds flew by and landed on a nearby tree and tweeted loudly at each other. Their flying was like a dance that only they knew the pattern of.
Although Timothy was still just a boy, he knew the names of every herb that humans knew of. He studied all sorts of things, from the hidden meanings of shakesphere plays to numerous digits of Pi. He didn’t know how many, but it was a lot.
“Well, I have to go now kiddo. I hope you know that there’s people out there that care for you.”
Timothy shook Gregory’s hand and they parted ways.
Part 3 - used: Harry Potter but instead he wasn't the chosen one, Neville was.
It was September first. Harry Potter’s first day of school at Hogwarts. He was nervous, but excited. He had been so proud when the letter had come in the mail addressed towards him.
Lily, his mom, came up the stairs with a tray of breakfast. “Happy first day of Hogwarts, Harry!” She tried fixing his hair, but it still stuck up in the back just like his father’s hair. “You’re getting so big, stop growing for a minute eh?”
Harry got dressed into his muggle clothes and ran down the stairs two at a time. His parents looked at eachother and smiled.
His trunk and cage with his new owl, Hedwig, were already at the bottom of the landing. His dad, James, grabbed the cage and trunk and brought them towards their car. They started driving towards King’s Cross station. Harry stared out the window at Godric’s Hallow as they drove away.
An hour later, they made it at the station. It was bustling with people. His parents led him towards the brick wall where you could enter into platform 9 ¾, right between platform 9 and platform 10.
His dad went through first, pushing the car with his luggage and owl, and then Harry followed. His mom was last. Harry gasped at the huge train in front of them. Families were gathered around, waving bye to their students going onto the train.
“I love you, Harry. Have a fun time at Hogwarts! Make sure not to get into too much trouble. Send me lots of letters.” His mom gave him a kiss on the forehead.
“I’ll make sure not to, mom. I’ll send lots of letters, okay?” Harry picked up his trunk and cage and boarded the train.
There were so many different compartments! He peeked an eye into one of them, nope he definitely didn’t want to sit there. Some mean looking boys, probably in Slytherin, glared back at him.
He found an empty compartment and set his trunk above. A boy of his age pushed open the door panting. He had bright red hair, he was probably a weasly.
“Can I sit here?” he asked.
“Sure, take a seat,” said Harry.
“Thank you,” he gasped, “My name is Ron, what’s yours?”
“I’m Harry. You’re a Weasly, right?”
“Yup, I am.”
The train started moving away from the station. Harry saw his parents on the platform and waved. He was finally on his way to Hogwarts.
Halway through their journey, a girl with bushy brown hair opened the door of the compartment. “Has anyone seen a toad? Neville Longbottom lost his.”
Harry and Ron both shook their heads. They hadn’t seen one, but wasn’t Neville Longbottom The Boy Who Lived? The one who had survived You-Know-Who?
The girl left as quick as she had came. Harry decided it was time to change into his robes, so he quickly did that.
The trolley came by. “Sweets?” Asked the kind old trolley lady.
“Yes please, I’ll have some Every Flavour Beans and Chocolate Frogs, please.” replied Harry.
“I’ll have the same, please.” Ron said.
“Here you go,” she handed them their treats and they gave her a few brown knuts.
Soon enough, Hogwarts Castle was in sight. Harry gasped at the sight of it. He was finally here. Once he stepped out, he heard a familiar voice. Hagrid. “First years, First years! Over here!”
Part 4 - used: Heir to the Throne, Powerful Artifects, and Royalty Loves Commoner
Meadow gazed out into the field besides the strone brick castle she called home. She unconciously rubbed the ruby ring on her finger with an “R” for her family name, Randall. The Randall family was said to be older than time itself, nobody knew where they came from or where their history traced back to.
Being the oldest, Meadow Randall was in line for the throne. She didn’t want to be. She wanted to be a commoner, a farmer’s wife, with five children who lived on a small house on a little farm in the middle of nowhere. She wouldn’t have to worry about big responsibilities like when to send out soldiers or what to do with people who disobeyed the law. Meadow would prefer simplier chores like milking a cow or feeding the baby.
Her servant girl ran in. “Princess, His Majesty would like you in the throne room.” She took a small curtsy for Meadow.
Meadow sighed and stood up, then made her way to the throne room. It was a majestic throne room, with purple silk curtains hanging all around and all sorts of flowers in clay pots with intricate designs.
“Meadow, I think it’s time that you learn how to be a queen. Tomorrow, you will start training underneath your mom’s royal advisor, Miss Lucy.” her father told her.
Meadow nodded. She had to be in submission to her father, even though she didn’t even want to be queen someday. When she was of age or her parents died, she would have to find a man, only of royal blood her father told her, and they’d have to rule the kingdom together.
Secretly, Meadow had eyes for a commoner. His name was William. He had fluffy blonde hair and playful blue eyes. She had seen him once when she was picking strawberries in the palace garden. He was the farmer’s boy, tall and strong.
Meadow knew that he loved her too. She always caught him wandering near the palace gates. He’d make up an excuse and tell her he was looking for something or making sure the walls will still sturdy, even though they’d been standing for over one hundred years.
Sometimes they’d have small conversations here and there about the weather, duties, or drama happening in the village. Eventually, the conversations turned into deeper ones like family, school, and responsibilities. She learned that he was a middle child. He had a two older siblings, a brother and a sister, and two younger twin brothers. His job daily was to give the animals new hay, which he hated. He wanted to do more than just that.
She told him of her responsibilties as a princess, how she was expected to be graceful and use mannors. Sometimes she had to take care of her younger twin brothers. They were only five, so they were very chaotic princes. Meadow even told him of the magical properties of her ring, they would protect any member in the family who wore it. At the age of 10, a Randall would be given the ruby ring with an ‘R’ on it to signify that they were apart of the family.
One day, she overheard her father talking to her mother. “The gaurds have caught Meadow talking to a farmer boy on the other side of the gate multiple times. A commoner! She shouldn’t be socializing with a boy who isn’t of royal blood.”
“Yes, but remember my sister Lyra? She met a commoner boy and they ran away together.”
“That’s exactly what I don’t want happening to Meadow. She’s the oldest of the family, so she should get all of the responsibility. Tomorrow she’s going to start her royalty training. It’ll take up all of her free time, so it won’t give her any chances to talk with that commoner.” Her father said.
“She’s still young, maybe wait a few years.”
“No, she’s starting it tomorrow. That’s what I say.”
Meadow didn’t know what to make of this. What if she just ran away, like her aunt Lyra did? She ran to her bedroom to make sure she didn’t get caught evesdropping. She grabbed a sack and stuffed some items in it. She put an apple, an extra hankerchief, and a few other essential items.
Meadow waited until night came, then snuck out her window, snuck past the gaurds, and climbed over the castle wall. She was finally free! She ran, until the castle was far behind her. Then, in a small clearing she laid her head down on her sack and dreamed of being a farmer’s wife, tomorrow she was going to make those dreams come to life.
Closing
Return to Kenzie's Library
// i speedran this last minute but woah i got it done :00

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Okay, first of all, I don’t know if I could handle the responsibility; it could very well either drive me insane or make me turn evil.
But then, its kind of hard to go mad with power when you’re already a tyrant? Like, that’s just the baseline deal with being a tyrant already, yeah?
So maybe I would go the opposite way and just be really nice. Yet that doesn’t work either, since I’m a very competitive person. Most likely, I would just be really inactive until the last minute, as I always am, and people would get mad at me for it.
But as for changes I would want to make? Well, decrease the point value of the writing competition for sure. It annoys me how much it skews the results. Cabin rankings should be more indicative of a cabin’s teamwork and persistent effort, not just one person’s success.
I think I would encourage a month-long SWC roleplay, probably in a separate project, similar to word wars or the critiquitaire. I feel like the cabin themes and mascots don’t get enough usage outside of aesthetic purposes. The SWC fanfic dailies are fine, but I think a roleplay would be way more fun. Plus, then we could generate more SWC lore!
Relatedly, a better-organized description of the “SWC canon” should be available somewhere. A lot of the details of our lore are mostly playful and apt to change, especially since every cabin is kind of its own world with a unique storyline, but there are still plenty of solid points and recurring themes that are universally accepted by all SWC members. This would be especially great for new campers confused by our silly little subculture, as well as people who just want to write their fanfics based on real events as best as possible. If the roleplay is to be successful, a description of the “confirmed” lore is necessary, so that everyone’s on the same page.
Okay, onto less realistic ideas.
A virtual Main Cabin would be incredible. You know those VR games that allow a bunch of players to interact within the same digital space? Yeah, something like that. Not quite a whole metaverse, but something using those concepts. Obviously, not everyone has a VR headset, but pretend this is in the future where all that technology is super common and cheap.
A cabin-wide words leaderboard would be amazing. People are using Trackbear right now for that purpose, but having something actually on the same website as the rest of SWC would be ideal. I don’t have a clue how that would work, though, unless this next idea is possible…
Automatic word adding. Unrealistic given Scratch’s format, but imagine if you could post all your words into the forums and the computer would add them for you without you having to calculate them yourself. This one’s entirely because of my personal laziness when it comes to this, but it would genuinely make a major component of SWC so much more efficient.

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