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silverlynx-
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swc megathread ⌕ nov 2024

Critique!]
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First of all, I found this piece super hard to critique, because it was absolutely incredible! You used the perfect descriptions for everything and it flowed beautifully and was really connected with me as a piece! I loved it (also this will probably be the worst critique ever since it’s already amazing)!!


OK, to start off with I think that you could change the phrase ‘the cold icing me through’ since it just sounds a bit out of place, especially since you’ve used the word cold again in the next sentence. You could change it to something like ‘the cold chilling me through’ and the next sentence ‘sending icy shivers up my spine.’
I also think you could add some context in the verse afterwards to what comes seeping through, and change the ‘ALL’ in capitals to ‘all’ in lowercase letters with an exclamation mark, because I feel like the capitals just make it more… happy? Idk lol That’s probably useless though since it isn’t essential really, but I can’t find anything wrong with it hehe
I just want to mention on the first *creak* that you’ve put an ‘l’ at the end of it

‘Everlasting void of doom’ sounds a bit melodramatic, despite the amazing description, I think you could change it to something like ‘everlasting void of despair’ since doom sounds quite over the top.
Another thing would be the two exclamation marks and question mark following the ‘HELLO DEATH IS THAT YOU’ because ‘!?!’ makes it look a bit messy. (But that might just be my really strict teacher from primary school who would not let us have a question mark and exclamation mark together! I mean - disgraceful! :000)
I think you could get rid of the apostrophes around ‘head’ and that’s pretty much it!

In general, this was a fantastic piece of writing and these are all really unnecessary critique thingys since it was too awesome in the first place! I hoped this helped and I can’t wait to see the massive prize you’ll win with it! Good luck! <3
primosaur
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swc megathread ⌕ nov 2024

Sorry if this is out of place, I know I am not a member of this and you can feel free to delete/report it if need be. I've been trying to get info on how I can join this (although from what I've seen, I think I might need to join the next session) but I can't find any kind of centralized place to join and a lot of the information I've seen is intended for actual camp members. Could someone direct me to a person who can inform me on how to join next session/answer my questions?

Thank you for your help!
criminal-intent
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swc megathread ⌕ nov 2024

Colors as people daily!
(No clue what this is but it is something.)

Indigo awoke to Violet standing over her. Others might have started—after all, Violet’s face was enough to make most people start crying on the spot.

Her characteristic scowl covered her face as usual. Indigo merely stood, making her bed and ignoring her sister. “You promised you’d go shopping with me last night,” Violet whined. Well, she wouldn’t have liked to hear Indigo describing it as such. But what other word better described her tone of voice? Did Violet want Indigo to lie?

Indigo sighed, glad that Violet couldn’t hear her thoughts. “Sorry, Violet. I wasn’t feeling well.”

Violet pouted—and again Indigo praised the heavens that her sister couldn’t hear her think the word—but didn’t argue further. Instead, she seemed to accept the answer and headed off.

Surveying her room, Indigo noted that it was getting out of hand. She felt better this morning, but that didn’t mean much. The room was still a mess. Indigo shoved some dirty laundry into the basket, clearing up some space on the floor.

She knelt, meditative. After a few minutes, she took a deep breath. Indigo was feeling better today. Time to make the most of it.

Time to . . . go shopping with Violet, if that’s what she wanted.

But when Indigo stepped into the living area, Violet had gathered breakfast and snacks, snuggled into the couch with the TV on. For once, she didn’t have a haughty expression. Instead, Violet gestured for Indigo to sit down.

“Thank you,” Indigo said as she settled in beside her sister.

Maybe a day in was the best idea, after all.

+268 words, 300 points
-vanillamochabear-
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swc megathread ⌕ nov 2024

daily nov. 26nd - colors and emotion
. above anything else, blue was a loner. she had never felt the company of another soul, had never sought it, had never longed for it. she was perfectly content as she was, just to be. to simply exist, and nothing more.
blue was all that was the sea, its waters and currents endless weaving throughout the world. the waves that moved on unbothered despite all the chaos that there was beneath. there was calmness in shallow turquoise waters, and quiet in the nearly pitch black depths. the ocean that was eternally sleeping, letting itself be moved by the sweeps of crystal clear winds. she was a home, a fear.
blue was the sky. shifting its color through time, from something more grey into brightness and then into dark again. she was the spirit that wrapped herself around the world, soft clouds blanketing civilization from her friends (the harshness that was beyond). she watched all that happened from her place, eyes thoughtful but never interfering. it wasn’t her place to change what is.
blue was forget me nots, violets, and berries dappled on the sides of dirt trails. sweet smelling and kindly, she had always been a provider to the hungry. she laced herself into flower crowns which rested gingerly atop the heads of her children.
she was endlessness and infinity itself, nothing and everything all in the same universe. she embraced the chaos that was the world and turned it into her signature calm, peacefulness. she felt, from her little corner in the sea and the sky, but she did not let it show. blue was the mother to all things alive, there in the corner, perfectly fine with going unnoticed.
pugusialove
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swc megathread ⌕ nov 2024

writing using an ancient word war prompt:
“Ouch, that hurt.” (-@opheliio)

“I hope you know what you're doing.” I whisper, looking at the world under my feet.
“I'm not chewing anything, dear!” smiles my friend. As usual, she didn't hear me right. Nevermind.
She pushes me forward and I start to fly! Everything around me blurs, the wind whistles in my ears…
Wait, what's that souuuuuuuuuuuuUUUUUUUUU…
I am flying even faster now, but in the wrong direction!
TUD!
I find myself in a pile of leaves. Thank goodness, it could have been much worse if this thing kept working a little longer. I hear my phone buzz.
“So, how did it go?!” Sheila texted me. I look up and see her, leaning out of the window.
I want to yell in rage, but something stops me. Maybe it's her cluelessness, maybe it's the fact it was actually… Fun…
“Ouch.” I text back, after some thinking. “That hurt.”
And burst into laughter.
Buzz!
“We sure have things to improve here” texted my other friend, Zari. “But, in the end, this thing might become famous. What should we call it?”
Buzz!
Sheila sent us a voice message, with her little brother Pearl screaming “flying fox!!”
“Maybe… Lightning line?” I suggest.
“That sounds dull.” Zari replies. “Lets replace ⚡ with a synonym.”
“A synonym line?” I joke.
“Zip line!” sends us Zari. “Oh dear. Are you still outside, Winnie?”
Sheila sends a gif and opens the door for me.
Runaway--
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swc megathread ⌕ nov 2024

Daily - Colors
284 words

Blue sat on the top of a shipping container, clipboard grasped in their hand. Below them countless workers milled about, glancing upwards every now and then to request assurance or instructions. A small smile slipped onto blue’s face. She liked this job. Being in control, watching as tasks were routinely completed. It was nice. Satisfying, even.

And then there was Red. Red was Blue’s boss, and Blue wasn’t entirely sure how she had managed to get the position in the first place. Everything she did felt out of place and impulsive, like she decided what to do when she woke up each morning rather than planning it out in advance. The most annoying thing, though, was that it worked. Red was confusing and frustrating, but Blue knew better than to ask too many questions. Chaotic or not, she was still their boss.
Sighing, Blue jumped down from the container, following the last of the workers into the main office. They closed the door gently behind them, shifting the clipboard under her arm and walking behind the counter to the main office.

She knocked three times and waited.

“Blue! Get ‘in here!”

“Hey, Red. I’ve got you that paperwork you asked for and I-”

“How would you like a promotion?”

“How would I… what?”

“Well, I figured i’m better at all the sitting around yelling at people to do their job, and you could do the orginising. Like a personal secretary. Do you like that title? There’s no limitations so I could put your job down a ‘Making sure Red doesn’t ruin everything’ too, if you’d like.”

“Sounds…. Nice, actually.”

Blue stepped across the room, offering a hand. “I look forward to working with you.”
pugusialove
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swc megathread ⌕ nov 2024

more writing using an ancient word war prompt:
“I bet you guys are all wondering why I have gathered you here today.” (-@waterlily7859)

“I bet you guys are all wondering why I gathered you here today.” they said, tapping their fingers on the big round table.
“I am more interested in how you gathered us here.” said a half kraken named Ellyeh.
The host pretended to not hear it, did a dramatic face and continued: “Well, the universe is in danger…”
“Again?” multiple voices said in a grouchy chorus.
Those were also ignored.
“…and it's our important mission to work together and save it…”
“No problem. Give us our tasks.” someone in the depths of the meeting room said.
“Yeah, no need for a speech!” enthusiastically yelled a boy with purple eyes and a fin on his back.
“Agreed!” Ellyeh slammed the table in fear if a long, slow, filled with unnecessary details story that could be two sentences.
The host rubbed their eyes. They rubbed their ears. But it was still there. Creatures from different planets getting along with ease. “Really? You are just going to become besties like that? Without any conflict?”
“Exactly!” “Why shouldn't we?” “Positive.” “Tak.” The room became filled with all the possible ways to say yes.
“That's not right! There can't be a story without conflict!” yelled the host.
“It can now.” Pinkfluffystar (from here) said, and, before anyone could react, grabbed a marker and wrote:
ㄒ卄乇 乇几ᗪ
P.S. I'll be back! - host
ChueyTheCat
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swc megathread ⌕ nov 2024

color daily || 283 words

Today was going to be a great day. Mauve just knew it.
“Hi, Cerulean, Vermilion,” she greeted her parents as she went downstairs.
Cerulean was crying into her cereal bowl. Vermilion was shouting at the table.
“What’s wrong?” Mauve asked, even though she was pretty sure she already knew - something small that had turned into something big. Sometimes she wondered, briefly, how two such dramatic colors had combined to form herself, Mauve, one the quietest and cheeriest colors in the town. But thoughts like that were - oh, they weren’t quite mean but something was cackling in the back of her mind whenever it thought them that could maybe be mean if it wanted to and Mauve tried very hard not to listen to that voice. It just wouldn’t do. The Rainbow that had deciphered her personality when she was formed had foretold that Mauve would be sweet, soft, and optimistic, and Mauve tried her hardest to live up to that standard. It could be a little difficult, at times, when her parents stormed and raged (and wept) and her friends Saffron and Rose had such bright and bouncy personalities. Mauve always looked a little faded beside them.
She had, once, gotten angry, and the red in her complexion had deepened for a few hours. Likewise, she had cried a few times when she was younger, and for days afterward she had been bluer than normal. But it was dangerous to stray too far out of your assigned personality. Only Rainbows could do that, and ordinary citizens were never, ever allowed to become Rainbows.
So Mauve hummed a quiet little tune, and got ready for the day, determined to live up to her personality.

Last edited by ChueyTheCat (Nov. 26, 2024 23:35:53)

Zyzeryko
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swc megathread ⌕ nov 2024





Green tastes of karma, revenge. Some say envy, but that's not the right word—- though it's true that jealousy and justice are sisters. Two sides to the same coin. Two towers, abandoned, alone, with nothing but each other.
Maybe green can be both. Maybe she could be cold and just and admiring all at the same time. Some say jealousy is admiration turned sour—- is admiration green as well? If such a thing is true, what does that say of statues, podiums? Moments frozen in dedication to bloodshed. If jealousy and justice are sisters, one from a place of love and one from hate, are love and hate not only green? Could we connect any possible emotion to green?
It is the color of life. Maybe it is also the color of death, her face in shadow as she is rejoined with the trees? I don’t see why green isn’t everything, ever. Anger? It fades. And if it doesn’t, you must seek revenge. Revenge is certainly green. Sadness comes only from the sky and her gaze is green across us. Fear is panic and black, but when it is over, all you will see is green. Happiness is from the earth, and she is green where we have failed to kill her.
The only thing not dipped in emerald, is rage.
-WildClan-
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swc megathread ⌕ nov 2024

Gray was anything but simple. They had never cared much for appearance, so they dressed in the dull and the drab. The boring, even. But inside, they knew better than anyone, was where one’s true colors shone.
They had experienced many things in their life. They had dissolved themselves in the mysteries of the fog as easily as thoughts coursed through a mind. They had been everything from the soft, downy fluff of a feather to the cold, unforgiving rigidity of steel. They had felt the sharp, silvery glint of dreams and witnessed the foreboding churning of storm clouds against dark seas.
They had taken the middle ground in every argument and gained knowledge from the eyes of wisdom herself.
But now, their pallor only spoke of age. They had waited for this day for as long as they could remember, and now that it was here, they could only feel an odd mixture of serenity and melancholy.
“You know, I always wondered if Death would be dark or light,” they whispered to no one as the static came over them. “It’s a shame that color loses its meaning before then.”
No eyes are left to see when the moment happens, of course.
But in the end, Gray thought that it just felt like themself.
iinspirqtion
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swc megathread ⌕ nov 2024

Nocturne in C Minor - Chopin


Andante sostenuto
Right hand: Low G, whole note. High C, Eighth, and a half note. High D, eighth note. High E flat, Eighth, and a half note.
And so it begins…


I met him not too long ago when music still flowed through my fingers like silk. My hands had paused playing the ivory keys in the drawing room when I spotted him. “What a beautiful sound, My Lady,” his brown eyes pierced into mine as a blush spread across my cheeks, sitting on the piano bench. The piece in front of me is my favorite, a Nocturne by Chopin, something I’d been practicing for a long time.
“Thank you, sir, I didn’t quite catch your name?”

BURN

“Ah, you can call me James. I’m a loyal servant of your father’s,” he says politely. “I fought in the last war and was just recently promoted to general. I’m delighted to be in your presence,” his face is like a piece of art, with a crooked nose and green eyes, he seemed sly and beautiful.
“Likewise.”

Right hand: G, eighth note. High C, eighth and a half note. High D, eighth note.
Left hand: G, eighth note. Low C, eighth note. G, eighth note.


Raucous applause fills the room as I can’t help but smile, dressed up lavishly, just for the occasion. Pearls and bows adorn my dress, and I can’t help but feel as if I’m on top of the world. The only person I’m looking at is the one in the front row, eyes warm and loving. I had just finished playing the Nocturne for the first time in front of a crowd, and although I had been very nervous, the exhilaration of it all made it worth it.
As I hold various flower bouquets that were given to me, Father leads me to talk with other nobles. Wine glasses are held, and chatter erupts throughout the room. I say my greetings to all, each person as fancy as the other, and I feel as if I cannot be any happier. All the expectations that weighed me down, were gone. For now.

DOWN WITH THE SELFISH

I touch my hair, making sure that the pearl clip is right where I put it, making sure I still look fine. I searched the room for him, and he was right where I wanted him to be. His hands are open, his body comforting, and nothing compares to the soft words he whispers to me as I hope every day can be like this. I wish I could always be his.

We’re outside on the balcony, and he tells me about his time on the battlefield. “I know war is inevitable, but I’ve never wanted it. There’s just too much suffering,” he sighs staring out into the night sky.
“Then why did you become one?” I ask.
“I had no choice. It was either be recruited to be a soldier or be killed. I had to feed my family, so I thought that I could earn some money as a soldier. I didn’t think that when I came back they’d all be dead. They had to give all their bread to the count of our village, and since there wasn’t any left for them, they couldn’t survive,” his eyes turn glassy as if he’s about to cry, then turns to me, trying to look brave. “But now, I have you,” he smiles.
Each star in the sky seems like a life so far away that I never knew about.

Right hand: (Triplets) One octave above high C, One octave above D flat, one octave above high C
Left hand: Low C, eighth note, G eighth no-


“My lady!” One of my maids rushes through, into my room. The other maids glare at her, knowing that it isn’t proper behavior, but maybe she has a reason for such actions. “The Peasants and Serfs are revolting against the crown! Your father has ordered for you to be taken away, into a safe place.”
I heard shouts and screams from below, light flashing, and as I sat in front of the full-size mirror, decorated with inlaid gold and silver, a bowl of bread overflowing next to me, I was confused. “But Alice, why would they do this? Don’t they have a happy life? Why would they betray the crown?” James was an exception, right?
The maids looked at each other nervously. Finally, one of them speaks. “I’m not exactly sure, my lady, but they seem very upset. It’d be wise for you to leave now. General Carter has already laid out a path for you to escape on.”
Before I can say anything, I’m dragged out of my room, my protests landing deaf on their ears. I’m led out on a strange path behind the mansion, thick overgrown vines covering the walls. I couldn’t help but feel scared until I saw him.
All my fear and confusion melted into a liquid puddle as his face appeared. There was nothing to worry about, I assured myself. As long as he was here, no harm would befall me.
“Come on My Lady,” he gestures gently at me to take his hand. “I’ll bring you somewhere you belong, we’ll escape this chaos now.”
I look at the white satin glove he’s extending and take it without hesitation.

NEVER TRUST THEM

Right hand: …
Left hand: …


He brought me to his own house and told me that everything would be alright. I trusted him.
“I know this might seem a bit strange to ask,” he says shyly. “But I was wondering if you could play at another venue, one final time?”
“Of course,” I answer eagerly, confused about his use of ‘final’, but it’s James. It must’ve been some miscommunication. “When shall I perform?”
“Today at 3 o’clock. My servants will handle everything, you just have to let them get you prepared, and you’ll be done.”
As I got ready for the performance, my hands tapped delicately across the vanity table, trying my best to practice the piece that I had memorized, the Nocturne. It seemed fitting enough for this occasion, one that James was holding. A maid pulls roughly on my corset, and I wince. I miss my maids.
The maids here, the way they looked at me as if I had wronged them somehow, it felt strange. Too confusing. Did I do something wrong? Was there any way for me to fix it? There is a knock on the door, and he comes in, holding a cup of tea. “Thought you might want something to get you going before the concert,” he hands it to me and smiles widely, the kind of smile that even I have never seen before.
I take it and thank him graciously. He watches me closely and intently, as if to wait for the moment I was to bring the cup to my lips. Finally, the maids finished dressing me, and though my hair itched painfully from the tight bun it was pulled into, the thought of him caring for me melted all that hurt away.
Holding the cup close to my mouth, I take a sip. Then another, basking in the warmth. There’s a strange flavor, a new one I’d never tasted that he’d made just for me.
“It’s time to go,” he murmurs excitedly. “I know you’ll do great.” I stand up from the velvet cushioned chair and exit the room, holding his hand while the maids grin at me as if they know a secret I don’t. I wish I did, but
All I can do is play.

Play darling, play. Be the person we all need.

She walks onto the stage, as prim and proper as she could be, the epitome of a noble. The epitome of what the crowd hated. The side effects had kicked in, though she held her head high as she always did, her face was paler, more gaunt, more ghostly.
Perfect.
The boos start, and all sorts of food are thrown on stage. Tomatoes, bread, vegetables, it seemed like everyone had been saving their perishable foods for this moment, as after this, we would rebuild a new world.
She’s surprised, expecting a warm welcome, only to receive hatred and disgust. “Down with the wench! Down with the monarchy!” Her eyes widen, as if she’s only now starting to process what has been going on for years.
A shout comes from the balcony, where a young mother and a child sit, tattered clothes hanging on their sides. “You took my brother!” She shouted. “You forced him to go to war while you stood there in your fancy dress and jewels and then call yourself wretched! You don’t know suffering like we do!”
“Down with the monarchy!” The shouts turn into unison.
Everything’s gone according to plan, all the nobles are gone, except for this one. The most ignorant one of them all, and she was going to go down in a way that had never been before. Inviting anyone to come join the spectacle had been a good choice on my part, as this was to be a show for the ages.
Bless her heart, she stood strong, and still sat down on the piano bench, trying her best to ignore the cries of many, just like she had always done. As her hands lift gracefully in the air like a swan, she gives one last look around the auditorium of hateful hearts, before her gaze stops at me.
I can feel her heart plummet from this distance, it’s as if I know exactly what she’s feeling. She had trusted me, let me in, let down her walls, and now, here I am, the mastermind behind this whole scheme, with a front-row seat to her demise.
She starts playing, each finger pressing down on the ivory keys. The notes turn into a beautiful melody, sweetening our ears with lies. She never knew how much it cost to buy those keys. She never knew how hard we worked to let her eat so well every day when all we got in return was:
Sickness.
Disease.
Pain.
Hunger.
Hate.
This would be our payback. The notes glide skillfully through the piece, and though there are still shouts, it's as if the world is frozen. Telling everyone to listen to only her. Soon even the whispers die down as everyone stares in awe. So this is what the rich have been hiding. This pleasure, this joy, this want for more than just survival.
This unobtainable future.
Streaks of water are running down her cheeks, and she starts to falter, her emotions finally taking the better of her, and the poison. The more she cries the worse the playing gets. A messed up note here, another one there, her movements getting sloppy. It was as if she had no will to-
No, this was her first time feeling this, she should savor it like we all had to. Did she finally realize the consequences of her actions, or even at death’s door is she still proud and arrogant?
The poison has taken its toll, and as she finally plays her last note, the key resounds through the room, everyone hushes as she collapses on the piano, still as elegant as she was all those years ago. A statue frozen in time, her head down, dress whirling around her, arms arched around her head as if she was a dancer, defeated.
One second, and then another, and then everyone realized that the show was over. Raucous applause came over like a giant wave in the middle of the sea. People started to cheer, flowers thrown in the air for celebration, not only for her performance but for the future that awaited us.
It was a bright one indeed.
It was too bad that the ignorant heiress could never see what was right in front of her.
Like me.



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theawesomemarbler
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November 27 Daily
prompts: liar, dystopian, stress-inducing place, foil

“Weren, where are we going?”

Weren stopped in his footsteps, and turned around to see his best friend standing pretty far away from him.

“Mark, come here. You can trust me, you've always trusted me.”
“I know, and I still do… But you're not being the same as last time.”

Silence hung between them, as Weren once again approached Mark.

“We need to get out of here, before the government finds out we know their secrets. Don't you want justice for what they did to Luna? The whole town is suffering because of their greed, We got the evidence of the government wasting our money for all this corruption, and you're stopping right now even though we got here so far?”

Alarms started to blare, the government agents will be on their way soon. Weren turned to Mark, his eyes desperate. But Mark was clutching the documents of evidence in his hand tighter than ever, taking a step further away from Weren.

“Mark, please. We need to go. I don't want us to get caught. I know the only way out of here. I-”
“Weren! This isn't the way out! We're lost… We're goners. I want to believe you, but you keep sneaking away from me with excuses all these times when we make plans to infiltrate this place! All I'm asking now is where we're headed, because I saw the sign saying it's the way to the head office of the government!”

Mark was on the verge of breaking down, Weren rushed to him and hugged him tightly.

“Mark… It's okay, I'm sorry for making you worry. But really, you've got to trust me. I'm not turning us in. These times I've run away is because a friend working as a spy in these walls had provided me information about the place and asked me to join him on an exploration. There's a way out from this passage to the head office. And that doesn't require us to go to the head office.”

Footsteps were approaching their way, Weren looked desperately at Mark, still stubbornly rooted to the spot.

“Please, trust me.”

The government agents flashed at time, Weren had one option.

“They're here! Snatch them!”

Gunshots, alarms blaring in Weren's ears, as he reluctantly left his best friend behind. Tears formed in his eyes as he ran down the hallway.

Mark… I should've spent more time with him. Then he wouldn't be gone this way…

He had finally reached the door to the head office. He slumped down to the ground to catch his breath, hearing the echoes of the government agents yelling for his name. The secret passageway has to be nearby. But Mark can't be with him, he's gone, stuck in this building forever with the documents he held in his hands-

“Oh no.”

Frantic, Weren had tried to find the mechanism to open the secret passageway on the door. Pounding on a small compartment, a part of the wall split up. But Weren had to go. Leave the place empty-handed without any progress, without Mark.

Suddenly, the passageway sealed shut before Weren went into the hallway behind the wall.

“Hey! What's going on?”
“Come in. Didn't you just knocked on my door?”

Feeling trapped, Weren decided he couldn't run away, and twisted the knob of the head office, which was somehow completely dark.

“H-Hello?”
“You've played right into our hands, Weren.”

Weren shuddered. The plan should've gone right. The agent said so! Else he wouldn't be here.

“How did you know my name? Hold on… How did any of you got my name? Out of the ten thousand civilians in this town living in misery because of your corrupt system to sacrifice half of our property every month just to fund your project of making that robot to take over the world?”

The sound of laughter echoed in the room.

“Why, Weren, would you make such an accusation? That's entirely far-fetched that's for sure.”

Weren gulped. He had no evidence, but Mark had it in his arms!

“My friend, Mark. He had evidence, but he's probably dead now. The government agents caught up to him.”

Laughter reverberated once again in the room, only louder and longer this time.

"Oh, Weren. You've been fooled. Mark is very much still alive, unfortunately, he was not on your side. He was never on your side.“

Weren felt as though his world was being destroyed. His best friend, all this time they had been together, was it all fake?

”No. I don't believe you.“

A voice sounded behind Weren, but it's much calmer and gentler. Weren knew that voice anywhere.

”Mark! There you are, I'm so glad you're alright. Quick, we got to go. There's still time to leave-“

A blade had been inserted into Weren's abdomen.

”I'm sorry, Weren. I had enjoyed our time together, but I cannot let you go. I need to find Luna. That robot is the only way to get her. They used Luna as a mind to that robot. I have to see her again. I'm truly sorry, Weren. I really am.“

Tears filled Mark's eyes, as Weren crumpled to the ground, lifeless.

”Mark, give me the documents. Unless you want your fate to be like your boyfriend over here? You know very well how much you truly want to see Luna."

Mark obliged, but deep down, he wanted to reply.

“But you also know very much how I truly want to be Weren's friend.”

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-NightGlow-
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swc megathread ⌕ nov 2024

Daily 27: Lit Spinner
word count - 609 words

Prompts: warrior, epistolary, place from childhood, subplot

Dear Lilia,

It pains me with all my heart that I had to decieve you, but you must understand where I was coming from. I never meant any harm.. if anything, I love you more than anything in the world. You taught me that money cannot buy happiness and that you are the light that keeps me going each and every day. I wish we had more time. Oh how I wish I could explain myself. Just once chance to repay my sins and take a stance for once. I know you are no longer here and that's due to me, but please hear me out.

That summer day I was walking down the Enchanted Forest amongst the thick brush that lay in the baren lands. I was tired, exhausted. As I was retreating from the battle field, I spotted puffs of smoke drifting away from the top of a cabin not that far off from where I was standing. Comfort was the only thing I could think about. I was wounded and weak and I barely made it to the doorsteps of the brick cabin. A lady with a stern yet soft look opened the door, and to my shock, she brought me inside and bandaged up my wounds. Now that… is when it all started.

She asked me if I was on the case of the twelve dancing princesses. At the time I thought that such a thing was just a fairytale. However, the more we talked, the more I realized the possibility of turning my life around. I was too weak to do anything on my own and any family I had were gone. Dead. This was my chance to secure my future and lead a bright life filled with happiness and joy. Looking back at it today, I wish I never took this stride. I have no idea what kept me pushing through these difficult times… maybe it was the chance to fight for more? Or it was the chance to fight for someone I cared so deeply about. You.

Anyways, as the days went on we brainstormed different ideas to get me into the castle. None seemed plausible and I gave up hope - not that there was any to begin with. To me this was just a filler of my life, a way to spend my last few days laughing and enjoying the care and dignity of this women in her cozy cottage. Those days I would still remember the times I spent on the fields. Running around without a single care in the world. If only things were like that.

If only I had realized that some dreams are better kept a fairytale. Not everything is meant to become a reality. I'm sorry for any harm I ever caused you. Amira was out of line and I know there's nothing I could ever do or say to make up for it. But just know that I know that our story is incomplete. I will live the rest of my life mouring what would have been if things had just been a little different. Here's to all those hopes and dreams that never made it back from the stars. The ones we wished on as kids… and the dreams that made up the world.

I love you to the moon and back, through space and time, and where our world's ends will never meet. Thank you for never giving up on me despite the struggles, for being there through thick and thin, and for being my lifeline.

Signed,
Cedario
Froggola
Scratcher
1000+ posts

swc megathread ⌕ nov 2024

Daily for November 26th
550 words
prompts: visionary, dystopian, competitive place, plot twist

The sound of cheering in the background is loud enough to pierce someone's eardrums. Crowe doesn't bat an eye, as he organizes his desks from behind the safety of the arena walls. He dusts off every corner, including the bit of fuzz that flew from his books onto his vest. Crowe likes to look pulled together, perfected. He hums a tune, amidst the loud noises in the background, seeming to be off in his own world. Only the gods would know what goes on in his head. Horns begin to blow, signalling the start of a new match. Banging of drums and stomps of the crowd were well known sounds in the arena. Crowe sat down on his leather chair, crossing his legs and looking rather pompous, as he cradled the pen in front of him. He liked to think his senses had improved, the longer he spent here- especially his hearing. A slamming noise came shortly, making him jolt forward in his seat. “Come in Arla,” he said loudly, his voice husky and raw. A short girl came hustling into the room, her hands full of papers and books. “How'd ya know it was me?” She replied, with a heavy accent. “You're the only one disturbing me in my peace all the time,” he answered, crossing his arms. “What do you want?” Crowe knew well of her intentions. She had drawn up new ideas to propose to him, and like always, Crowe prepared himself to shut them down. She was like a little baby, always babbling on. But Crowe had trained her. He observed that her visits were becoming a little less frequent from before, and that was most likely a result of his harshness. Taking a deep breath, as if to prepare for a long speech, Arla dropped her scrolls on the desk in front of him, spreading them out evenly. “I know ya keep telling me all this is useless,” she gestured to the scrolls. “But ya have to listen.” Crowe groaned, leaning forward to examine what she'd brought. “Explain,” he said, slamming his foot on the ground. “We don't have to live like this anymore. They don't control us anymore. It sounds hard, but I promise you, it's simple. We- we just have to end it, don't you see? they can't do anything if we free the fighters, they're too weak.” She spoke quickly, her eyes lighting up. “Ple-” she began, but was interrupted by Crowe's shout. “Enough! I've heard enough.” He yelled, his eyes dull and locked upon her. “You don't understand!” Arla spoke again, shaking her head frantically. “No, it's YOU that doesn't understand.” He stood up, towering over her. “I've fed you, I've let you stay here, I've put up with your uselessness, but I've had enough! This.. This ‘they’ you talk about. They are me. I am them,” his face was pale, and he kept moving forward. “I began all of this, don't you see? I'm content here. I have power here. I am the creator of the games,” he said, once and for all, ending with a grin. Arla scanned his face, her face in utter shock. “I don't understand.” He growled, pinning her to the wall. “Of course you don't understand! You would never. You're too weak for the truth.”
mikamillie
Scratcher
59 posts

swc megathread ⌕ nov 2024

Red was a very temperamental color. It symbolized war, fire, and chaos. Recently, Red realized that it wasn't happy with all this war, fire, and chaos. It needed a new start. So, Red decided to take up something happier: a day where fondness was in the air. So, Red got out its notebook and started to scrawl down lovely words and symbols. How about the lovely feeling of a war victory? No, too violent. How about an arrow through the heart? For some reason, Red thought this was absolutely perfect.

When Red asked Pink, the resident expert about everything nice and good, about the symbol, Pink said, “That's a bit… gruesome.”

Red said, “I know! Doesn't everybody like it when an arrow goes through an enemy's heart?”

Pink said, squeamishly, “Ehh… no. Maybe you can make it more nice?”

Nice? How can Red make arrows through the heart… nice? Maybe if it simplified it just to a simple shape, and it would be like an arrow of fondness? Huh. Could be good enough for an entire day of happiness! It showed the design to Pink, chest puffed out, saying, “What do you think!”

Pink said, squealing, “This will be a great idea for a Hallmark Holiday!”

Red had no idea what a Hallmark Holiday was, but whatever it is, it probably is a compliment.

(224 words)
1lMaM
Scratcher
100+ posts

swc megathread ⌕ nov 2024

Sasha was trembling, even though she knew she was safe. Alexei had left with his trunk of clothes two hours ago, and he would be near the head officer’s chamber by now. Her position wasn’t high enough to know what information Alexei was gathering, only that he would be back by 1800. It was 1514, according to her watch, but she still worried. What if he had been spotted, if he had been pushed into revealing their location? Would she be taken, like him? She would be fine. He would be fine. He knew what he was doing as surely as he knew his hands. She settled down in the rocking chair, waiting.
Although Sasha knew she should expect less, the room made her uncomfortable. The walls were stone, the floor was stone, the roof was all perfect stone. It was dark as twilight in here too, one lamp flickering on the other side of the small room. And it was annoyingly damp. Did she have to live every day feeling like she’d just come out of a shower? Man… she hadn’t had one of those in years. It had been nice to remember it that first day.
This was more than a day.
Sasha slid on the gloves stowed in the corner, shivering, and looked inside the trunk. She hadn’t searched over the common room much, despite having been in the dull place for days. The trunk had a hairbrush, some fresh clothes, and a ring. Fresh things. Fresh luxuries. Excited, Sasha grabbed the things and dashed into her room, pulling the clothes on.
There was a brown shirt and grey pants reminiscent of pirate’s clothes. Amazing. She felt fresh already. She slipped on the ring. It had a chunky red gemstone inlaid into the silver band, and- was that gemstone glowing? Huh. Either way, whoever had abandoned the place must have been rich. Probably one of the non-loyalists in the court or something. Dmitri Andreev had executed them, but only half had remained at that point, the rest having fled from the country. Nothing a tyrant could do about those outside his reach. And then he’d executed the common folk who didn’t support him and, well… Sasha wouldn’t think about that.
She had to focus on the task at hand. Once Alexei returned, she would don her disguise – these clothes would work much better than the old things she’d been wearing for weeks – and go into the street. There would be a riot in the palace at 1930. Sasha would find the wounded, bring them out of the palace’s vicinity, and stitch them up. Some of the people were important for the Surgeons’ cause, and they had no way of knowing who. For if they fell into the hands of the king, horrible things would happen, things Sasha didn’t want to imagine.
Sasha glanced at the clock. 1757. Alexei was to be here by 1800, and that was worst-case.
She had to leave.
-
Heart thumping, Katerina strode onto the streets.
Katerina was Sasha’s skin, her armour. Katerina was loyal to Dmitri Andreev, but only for the sake of her life. She was, therefore, still able to live in her stone bunker of a house with her husband Ivan. Ivan worked in security for Nikolai Volkov, in Andreev’s court. Katerina herself was simply a good wife with friends in other parts of Magnitka, meaning she had to walk to get to their homes. No, she wouldn’t tell you their names. That wasn’t your business.
Sasha had worn Katerina many times, altered for different cities and situations, but it worked. Everyone took her for a normal person, credit to how easily she slipped into the character of an upper-middle class wife. She had almost been, before Andreev.
Not now. You’re Katerina, not Sasha. You’re okay.
People with the determined glare of soldiers were already gathering in the streets, eyeing her. It would be around 1920, then. Minutes flew by as her stomach tightened. Katerina would watch with indifference, either not seeing the soldiers or knowing Dmitri would protect her. Sasha knew he wouldn’t.
The first shot sounded.
-
Sasha wound through the maze of bodies, picking the ones who wouldn’t die with her treatment and loading them onto her cart. Most of them were unconscious, but in a stable condition, despite the blood everywhere. They would live. She would make them live.
Huddled behind the far wall of a house, she got to work.
Her eyes flew between patients, hands working slowly and delicately as she sewed and wrapped cuts, administering medicines like she was giving them water. They had to live. They had to live.
She was working so fast, she didn’t notice the ring.
It started small. The gemstone glowed, as it had in the tower, slowing blood flow and making small cuts scab over. It was probably her desperation that had sparked it. Something abstract like that. Sasha didn’t care, as long as they were alive. As long as they were alive…
The gemstone was glowing a fierce red now, uncomfortably close to the colour of blood. She helped it along, but it seemed to instinctively know what to do – closing wounds, calming patients, setting bones. Was this… magic?
If it was, nobody was ever going to steal it from her.

885 words
HippotheHippo
Scratcher
71 posts

swc megathread ⌕ nov 2024

Paranormal || 447 words
“Welcome to the Colors Anonymous Support Group..” droned Lime, the effusive definition of happiness and joy. In the crayon box, maybe, but not here. Here, Lime was doing her mandated duty to be considered a color by the Alliance. Every single color had one of these duties. Blending with other colors, admitting new colors to the alliance… and running support groups.

At the support group, every color attended from behind black one-way shields that hid their true color. The only one who could see their identities was Lime, who couldn't care less. This was her seventh of ten month-long daily support groups she needed to host before she got a whole month off. She dreamed of that month every night.

“… so now, if we could all go around and open up a little bit about why we're here today, starting with participant one.” Lime sighed internally.

The first of the six participants was Magenta, who Lime had already branded as a fanatical, airheaded wuss. “I'm so SAD all the time and I can't STAND not being on the rainbow and I'm JUST so OVER IT!” Magenta ranted through hysterical sobs.

“Not as much as me,” Lime thought to herself. Then, aloud this time, “Thank you, One. How about two?”

The next one was Orange. “I feel… underappreciated,” he started in a baritone. “Sure, I'm on the Rainbow, but I'm simply not as loved as colors like Blue… or Red… or Purple,” Orange said, a wistful look in his eyes. “I just want… more attention.”

“Thanks for opening up,” Lime said. “Now, how about our third participant?”

Teal was up next. The jock of colors. “I dunno,” he said. “Blue and Green both told me to show up or I'd be banned from the crayon box another year.”

Lime bit back a snide remark. She'd recieved a very strongly-worded memo from Blue and Green that morning, threatening Lime that she'd better get their perfect little angel “shaped up” and “back under control” before the end of the month to “maintain his demographic” for another year. “Okay, maybe we'll help you realize why you're here by the end of the month,” Lime said, skipping over the “how about you try to give it your best effort?” That she'd been instructed to say by the Colors Anonymous Suppport Group Leader Handbook. “How about number four?”

“I'm not ready to open up,” Pink said automatically. “I'm just… too cloistered. Y'know?” This was followed by an obnoxious check of her manicured nails and a smack of her glossed lips.

Lime sighed. She already hated her whole group, and she only knew four of them.

It was going to be a long month.
unercornshine
Scratcher
100+ posts

swc megathread ⌕ nov 2024

Critique for silvi!!! :P

:turning on waffling mode:
most of the critique is about how to better ur structure, tbh, this is just my personal preff, personally, I value structure a lot in writing but u don't have to agree with me. also, btw, u told me to be brutal so… and here I'm just waffling 2 get my words in here so if it seems like u rlly dont know what I'm on about, just remember this… lmao XD!!! also, sry if u dk some of the many abbreviations I use: its a habit now… ;P oh, and also, most of the critique is about how to better ur structure, tbh, this is just my personal preff, personally, I value structure a lot in writing but u don't have to agree with me.

1)
Content Warning: Contains upsetting scenes, mentions of death etc
I sat on the beach, sinking my fingers into the silky fine sand, the pale silvery moonlight washing over me.
immediately when I started reading this I thought, :palm face: she forgot 2 miss a line. ik it's just a minor mistake but it makes it kind of confusing on where the actual text starts and is confusing for the reader, all you need to do is skip a line between the content warning and actually story.

2)
I hadn’t been this happy since before Koji… died.
this is not actually a mistake, just something that could further better ur writing. where it says ‘before Koji… died’ I feel instead of just using ellipses for suspense, there is 2 better ways that you could build a sense of dread:
a) since it is written in 1st person, perhaps you could make it evident the struggle of the reader when thinking about Koji, perhaps u could make it more like this:
before Koji~
before he/she… he /died/
b) or, discarding the 1st person point, you could change the structure to make it seem more dramatic like:
before Koji…
/died/.
just changing the structure like that make a lot of impact, although ofc yk best.

3)
how peaceful and… wonderful this place was.
the ellipses is a bit unneeded here in my opinion.

4)
her * ears
me and the readers r confused… wt is the * for?

5)
“T-There’s a tsunami coming,
not a correction, but I couldnt help myself, T-T lmao XDDDD!!!

6)
With no Karu?
when did Karu die? I read over the paragraph a few times but it still does not say, I feal like the losing of Karu should be mentioned, the readers will be hungry for that.

Apart from that I do love the story, it's rlly unique and the most amazing thing about it is the unique storyline and concept, GL!!!!

460 words.

Last edited by unercornshine (Nov. 27, 2024 18:47:38)

silverlynx-
Scratcher
100+ posts

swc megathread ⌕ nov 2024

Writing Comp Entry - Half Moon
1747 words

Content Warning: Contains upsetting scenes, mentions of death etc

I sat on the beach, sinking my fingers into the silky fine sand, the pale silvery moonlight washing over me. The gentle crash of waves on the shore and the warm fragrant breeze caused my eyes to gently droop, sighing contentedly. A rare smile played on my lips. I hadn’t been this happy since Koji…

died.

I gazed out at the dipping mountains, rivers carving lines into their emerald faces, cascading down in glimmering waterfalls, reflecting the stunning indigo sky, painted with streaks of rose and amber. I was so lucky to live in this place. Japan.

“Beware.”
I leapt to my feet, my heart thudding in my chest. I glanced around wildly, searching for the source of the sound.
“Beware.”
I fixed my eyes on a shimmering rabbit that sat just a few metres away. Its body was made of cold white strands, shifting every time it moved. Its eyes, however, were a pure dazzling gold, specks of warmth. The rabbit padded towards me.
“My name is Mizuki.” It told me solemnly, “I have sensed a wave coming. A wave larger than anything in existence. And you must run. By the time you wake up, you must run. Otherwise you will live no longer.”
My brow furrowed. “Mizuki, I need to-”
Mizuki snarled. “You have to run!”
Then her eyes softened for a moment and she placed a paw on my hand. It was cold as ice, and seemed to flicker ever so slightly whenever I moved.

“Are you a spirit?” I whispered to her, my voice dropping.
She nodded mutely. “For a long time now…”
Her voice trailed off and she stared wistfully at the ocean, her ears drooping.
I flung myself back onto the sand and just sat there for a while, drinking in the tranquillity.
“Akari, you must go!” Mizuki yelled suddenly, running up to me.
I smiled gently. “Thank you, Mizuki.”
“Now, go!”


I woke up with a start, my forehead coated in sweat, shivering.
“Da!” I shouted, my voice gravelly and sore. “Da!”
I listened to the echoing footsteps through the house and took one last look through my window at the waving bamboo and the fluffy clouds. I shook my head. Survival was the most important thing right now. I watched Da sprint into my room, his hair ruffled and his eyes dull.
“What is it?” He asked me worriedly.
I paused for a moment. “T-There’s a tsunami coming, Da. I was told in a dream by a spirit called Mizuki.”
His eyes widened. “Mizuki.” He murmured. “Beautiful moon.”
I looked up. “Beautiful moon?”
He bit his lip. “That’s what the name means. I once knew a spirit called Mizuki. Long time ago.”

And then I noticed it. The yawning silence. No birds. No wind. No cicadas. Nothing.
“Da. Something’s wrong. Very wrong.” I said urgently. “We need to run.”
But he just stood there, frozen.
“Da!” I screamed. But he wouldn’t move.
I pushed his arm over my shoulder, and started hauling him out of the door. He stumbled alongside me, his movements slow and clumsy.
“Mizuki…” He slurred.
I collapsed onto the terrace in exhaustion, panting. I studied the horizon. I could just see the foaming crest of a wave, gently rolling towards us. But it looked so small. We still had time. The tsunami probably wouldn’t come for a little while yet.* But I knew that Da wouldn’t make it. His face was creased with lines and his fists were clenched, a pearly white.

I choked with guilt. I had to leave him. I knew that both of us would die if I took him with me. He had always been like this. In his own world. Wrapped up in his mind, completely blissfully unaware of anything or anyone else. I wish that Mama was still here. She would make everything alright. She had some sort of magic to calm Da down. But now she and Koji died, it was just me and Da.
“Akari?” Da breathed, his voice cracking with emotion.
I gripped his hand. “Yes?”
“You have to go. You won’t survive with me. I want to die knowing that you’re safe.”
The words felt like a dagger striking my heart. I couldn’t just leave him. But I had to. Otherwise we would both die. A tear trickled down my cheek.
“I’m sorry.” I muttered, my lip wobbling. “I’ll see you when I’m a spirit too. Maybe you’ll see Mizuki again. Goodbye, Da.”
“Goodbye, Akari.”


I scrambled down the steps, not daring to look back, as the roaring began. The thunderous grinding rumble. Dust and grit swarmed into a cloud, pushing me back towards the sea wall. Speakers blared out at me.
“Tsunami warning. Red alert. Get to high ground! Now!”
The voice started off calm, with a slight tremor, but then grew to a crescendo of fear and terror.
“Run!”
And so I ran. My legs whirred automatically, and soon I got swept up with the screaming crowd. Their faces were taught with fear. Their desperate voices blurred together. They were terrified.
“Akari?” Someone yelled. “Akari!”
A familiar face pulled me to the roadside.
“Hikaru?” I gasped. “How did you-?”
Hikaru - Karu - had been my best friend since I was 5 years old. My only friend.
“Listen.” He interrupted seriously, “Everyone else has no idea where they’re going. But we have to get to the top of something stable. Like a mountain or a block of…”
His voice quietened and his mouth hung open.
“Look at it, Akari. It’s so big.” He breathed in awe, his eyes shining in horrified amazement.
And that was the last time I ever saw Karu. When he died. That was when the wave made contact. The tsunami. That was when my life broke into a million pieces.

The water surged into the crowds, a moment of deafening silence hanging over us for a fragile second and then all we could hear was the booming of the ocean, the rushing foaming water in our ears, the shattering of glass. A hand brushed my arm and I twisted around in the water, wishing it could have been Karu. But I never saw their face.
My head broke the surface. Trees were lying limp on the ground, buildings tumbling towards me, rubble flying through the air. The relentless current pulled at my legs, willing me to get sucked under. I craned my neck out of the water, trying desperately to stay afloat, but I knew I was going to die. What was the point of staying alive now, when the life I would live afterwards would be tainted with this? What was the point of staying alive with no Da? With no Karu? They would both be long gone by now.

I felt my body weaken and the ocean took its harsh icy grip in me again. My heart thudded in my chest. Through my blurred vision I glimpsed the occasional face, branches getting whirled through the water helplessly, and even one sodden bird, its head under its wing. Its eyes were narrowed and its body was racked with coughs. I watched sorrowfully as the life inside the poor creature ebbed away, leaving just a shell as a reminder of the endless death that was to come. Maybe that’s what was going to happen to me. Maybe that’s what should happen to me.
Memories flashed through my mind.
Mama skipping along the road, her hand in mine.
Tears sprung to my eyes.
Da smiling warmly at me, his eyes creased with joy.
I sucked in a deep breath, water flooding into my lungs.
Koji reaching out a hand to me in his last moments. My brother. “Take care of Da…”
I had to let them go. I hadn’t taken care of Da. I didn’t deserve to live.

I stared at the surface of the water, my eyesight dimming, shadows creeping into my view. The last thing I saw were the silver strands cradling me, wrapping me up, and the lustrous golden eyes of Mizuki before everything went black.

I snapped my eyes open. Everything was white. Everything. The walls, the beds, the sky. Even my clothes. Where was I?
“Karu? Da! Karu!” I screamed, my voice raw and gravelly. I yearned for their faces, I yearned to have the comfort of seeing them again.
“Da! Are you safe? Are you out there?”
The door banged open and two nurses ran in, exchanging a glance. They nodded.
“Hello, Akari. Are you OK?”
‘Of course I’m not OK!’ I wanted to argue. But fatigue was washing over me.
“Is Da OK? Is Karu OK?” I retaliated. I immediately regretted my words. Hurt and sympathy glimmered in their eyes at my brutal tone.
“I’m sorry. I just don’t understand. I’m so tired…”


“Akari.”
I knew the voice at once. Mizuki. She was the one that had saved me.
“Thank you.” I told her quietly. “Thank you so much. I thought I didn’t deserve to live. But everyone does. Don’t they?”
I grinned at her, forcing brightness into my smile. Mizuki sat there.
“Not everyone. I don’t.”
My heart melted at the sight of her, her tail sagging, her face dipping towards the ground.
“Of course you do!” I cried indignantly. “Even if you weren’t good before, everyone deserves a second chance. And you saved me! You warned me! You had never even seen me before, and yet you saved me. Of course you deserve to live.”
She placed her head in my lap.
“You know, your Da used to call me Half Moon. Because he said it was like I wasn’t really there sometimes. Apparently I was like a candle. My flame was so strong, so bright in the height of my life, but now it’s starting to fade. And soon it will die all together, just leaving ashes.”
I stroked her fur, and scratched behind her ears. “I wish Da could have been happy.”
Mizuki curled her claws into my hands. I winced.
“He used to be. He was so energetic, so full of life. But his flame died too soon. His flame was Mari, your mama. You’re such a brave girl, Akari. So brave.”

I knew what was going to happen before it did. I felt Mizuki’s body go cold in my hands. I watched it curl into wisps of delicate smoke, dancing in the air, before disappearing altogether.
“Goodbye, Mizuki. Goodbye, Half Moon.”


Last edited by silverlynx- (Nov. 27, 2024 19:27:53)

mikamillie
Scratcher
59 posts

swc megathread ⌕ nov 2024

*4:00, time of party*

TSUKASA: Happy birthday, my dear sister!

SAKI: Wow! Everything looks put-together and not made at the last minute!

TSUKASA: Oh, definitely!

TSUKASA, thinking: That's where she is wrong. There was so much done last minute, it's almost crazy.

*1 hour ago, at the bakery*

TSUKASA: I'm going to get the PERFECT cake for my sister! She is going to love it!

*Distant fufu~ing*

TSUKASA: Oh no. This is either going to be helpful or extremely unhelpful.

RUI: Yaa~ Tsukasa-kun!

TSUKASA: Salutations! What brings you to this here cake store!

RUI: Well, I am getting a cake for my friend Mizuki. Besides, this is called a bakery.

TSUKASA: Hahaha! No. This is a cake store.

RUI: Read the sign.

*The sign says CREME BAKERY*

TSUKASA: Gaaaaaah! You're right!

TSUKASA, trying to distract from the cake store incident: Well, Mizuki likes cute things, right?

RUI: Fufu~ yes.

TSUKASA: Well, maybe you can get this one, with all the bows and sparkles! Mizuki would love this!

RUI: Of course! Fufu~ this'll be a pleasant surprise for them~

TSUKASA, to himself: Well, there goes Mizuki's left pinky.

*TSUKASA, realizing that it's almost 4:00*

TSUKASA: It's almost Saki's birthday party! Time to get out of here while I still can, or I'm going to be late!

*Tsukasa dashes all the way back to the Tenma house*

SAKI: Hi there! So, how's your day?

TSUKASA: Very wonderful! I helped out my good friend with advice worthy of a star!

SAKI: The purple one? The one who invents things and tests them on you?

TSUKASA: Yes, that one! My fellow weirdo, and partner in crime! Not that I would want to commit crimes with him…

SAKI: Oh, cool!

*SAKI leaves*

TSUKASA: Time to show Leo/Need my wonderous cake for the pa- GAAAAAAAAHHHH! Where's the cake?

ICHIKA: Are you okay? We do need the cake for Saki's birthday party.

TSUKASA: Y-yeah. It's fine. I definitely have got this!

*TSUKASA runs to the cake store and buys a yellow and pink cake for SAKI*

TSUKASA, looking like a sweaty wet cat: Here! See? I got the perfect cake for Saki!

ICHIKA: Huh. This looks like it could work.

TSUKASA: And, the world future star does it again!

SHIHO: Oh no. He's going to go on one of his “world future star” rants.

SAKI: Hey guys! What's going o-

ALL EXCEPT SAKI: SURPRISE!!!

(401 words, jester, home, script, flashback)

(not all of it takes place at home, but at least half does)

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