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Runaway--
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swc megathread ⌕ nov 2024

Weekly Part One:
504 words

Near the edge of the city, a new building is finally opening after years of development and change. It felt like every other day the opening had been delayed or cancelled for one reason or another- something so consistent that only three people had turned up to the opening, others expecting it to be delayed once more.

The first person was the mayor. He had walked there, from his apartment closer to the center of the city. City was almost an exaggeration- the walk only took half an hour. But it was worth it for the new building, the biggest one the town had ever seen.

The second person was a businessman. He was the one who had invested in the raising of the building, and was planning on hiring it out- maybe as a hotel- but no one wanted to stay in the town. Until he could turn this place around into a proper travel destination, he would use it as a personal building. After all, there was plenty of space for him to store all of his stuff- and extra rooms he could convert into offices.

The final person was David Davidson, an old man and amateur conspiracy blogger from a nearby town. He was there with two cameras, a hidden microphone that he had forgotten to turn on, and a can of soup.

The soup was frozen, but had the remains of moisture clinging to the sides. Despite the slipperiness and how the cold turned the man’s hands white, he clung to the soup like a lifeline.

The building itself should have been very impressive- it rose high above everything else that had ever been built in the area, and it was no surprise it had taken so long. An array of finishing touches had been added- leaving the structure a marvel of stained grass, plants and carefully balanced architecture.

The problem was, it had been sitting vacant for so long that not a single person was excited for the opening. Why would they be? For some of the younger townsfolk, the building had been in progress as long as they’d been alive.

That’s why they weren't there when the ground started to shake. The mayor stumbled backwards, inspecting the scissors in his hand as if they might be the cause of the rumbling.

The businessman dropped to the ground, covering his head like he was a kid in an earthquake drill. If the building were to fall, his hands over his head wouldn’t save him. He didn’t seem to know that.

David Davidson took a different approach, and stood his ground, pulling out one of his cameras and pointing it to the sky. Pointing it up, up, perfectly up to frame the dragon erupting from the ground and shattering the new building into a million, tiny pieces.

The dragon erupted into the sky, circling once, twice, before perching on top of the splintered building as if nothing was wrong. In a single movement, she turned to face the three men.
PixelDucko
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swc megathread ⌕ nov 2024

November 22nd:
RED ALERT! RED ALERT! The POLAR BEAR team has quit! Quick – write a letter filled with reasons why they should come back to work, or there will be no more dailies! With the fourth weekly coming right around the corner, YOU need to do something now… Submit your 300 word letter and a lasagna donation for 350 points (and an additional 100 for sharing proof!) and maybe the POLAR BEARS will return…

22/11/24
D/M/Y

To the dearest POLAR BEARS team,

I bid you my greetings.

I am currently writing this on the 22nd of November. It is a Friday, which means that the fourth weekly will be due soon. I must appreciate how much effort you all put into every weekly, especially the fourth one! Everything you do is simply to be adored. I do understand how much work you do, and I recognise how difficult it must be – especially considering the procrastination-prone human beings we are. I, along with numerous other Scratch Writing Camp participants, as you will see in the main cabin, hereby request that you do not quit.

It is approximately an hour before I must sleep, and so I am rushing writing this letter.Do excuse me if I am rather full of purple prose today, or if any of my sentences fail to make sense. I am trying to get it done quickly due to the dire importance of this situation! Without dailies, weeklies, activities or anything else that you all work on, Scratch Writing Camp would… fade. The community is wonderful, yes, but it would just be a Scratch Camp. And how would that intrigue newcomers to arrive or get people to interact? Scratch Writing Camp, as the name suggests, allows fellow writers from all around the globe to bond over their shared love for writing. It is beautiful, you see. Must you really wish for all this wonder to fade?

Take a look around at what you have done so far. People bonding over several things. Friendships are made. Perhaps a few mangoes are thrown, and a lot of chaos ensues, but in the end, it is great. Watch as the dailies fade, and the community begins to fade too. There are many loyal participants, but newcomers would simply be confused, you see. Mangoes, turtles and goats already confuse them enough. Why add to that perplexion? I would like for you to think about how far you have come, and how much you still have to do. If you ever feel unmotivated, perhaps you would like to scout new members. Many participants of the beloved Scratch Writing Camp would not wish for it to go to waste, and they would be glad to lend a helping hand. Please consider this letter among the stream that you have received and will be receiving.

Oh, I nearly forgot. Here’s a donation of lasagna. I do hope you accept it. It is made with fine ingredients. I have not taste-tested it, so I do hope that it is not burnt!

Sincerely, I sign off,
Crystie Blue



Word Count: 436

Last edited by PixelDucko (Nov. 22, 2024 10:02:51)

1lMaM
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swc megathread ⌕ nov 2024

Dear Polar Bears,
I know you’ve got busy lives, but it’s eight more days. Surely you can hold out for a week and a bit. Us campers will give you loads of lasagna; we could give you some for every daily we do. Also think of the campers. Think of the leaders who worked so hard to create cabins for us all. Do you really want to fail them when, in eight days, you could just succeed?
You want payment? We’re not going to give it to you. We also have no way to give it to you. That sort of thing would look really suspicious on the Scratch website. But we can pay you in lasagna, and theoretically, you could just put a slice or two of lasagna in the daily requirements. Or you could just make the first daily involve as much lasagna as possible and feed off that. If you want to get paid in lasagna, that can be arranged.
But seriously, you’ve survived a whole year without going on strike. Please just set back up again for us. If you don’t, I will find Gurtle and make him steal all your links. Literally all of them. You will be in agony as you watch all your writing pieces get stolen. (Okay, I wouldn’t wish that upon my worst enemy, but still. We’ll be very annoyed.)
Also you’re kind of what keeps me going. If SWC didn’t have dailies, it would fall flat a little. Doing something, at least something, for the daily makes me actually want to write, so stay for the sake of our motivation. I will give you all a box of motivation mangoes if you just agree to stay. Eight days, guys. Then you can quit for eternity. I just want eight days of dailies. For our sanity’s sake, please stay.
With lots of mangoes,
Juice

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HippotheHippo
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swc megathread ⌕ nov 2024

Paranormal (332 words)
Dear POLAR BEARS team,
I hope you are doing well. However, I have a much more pressing issue at hand: it is of utmost importance that you come back to SWC! Without the POLAR BEARS, and by association the day's daily, my day has been wrecked beyond a reasonable measure. Ruined, in fact! Destroyed and pummeled and pounded into the beginning of an awful day that will require a new daily to recover from. In my effort to attain this new daily, I am writing to you now.
I will spend my next waking hours waiting in agony, waiting to see if you return to SWC - or if you descend into ghost-dom, never to be seen again, to abandon the camp and campers that the rest of us hold close. While we mourn your unfortunate loss and go through much pain waiting daily-less for a new team of POLAR BEARS, you will have to watch from the great big sky above SWC and see that the camper's studio thread limits being met time and time again, and you will have to know that it is of your own inspiration.
You help us to attain our word goals, every session. I know myself and many campers owe much thanks to you for this. You shift the tide of the cabin rankings every session, and now you're just going to throw that away?
Think twice about what you're really doing here. Now, think three times about the impact you will have on campers for many a session before you turn around and walk out.
Dailies and weeklies are an integral part of SWC. Without the flesh of SWC, we will be left with a hollow skeleton of a great, beautiful camp that once was, and memories of the way it used to be.
Enclosed is a fresh package of both Gurtle's famous pencil-and-pork lasagna, as well as some of the Great Value frozen stuff. Whatever you prefer.
Please come back!
Sincerely,
Amber
Paranormal Cabin

Last edited by HippotheHippo (Nov. 22, 2024 12:14:00)

silverlynx-
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swc megathread ⌕ nov 2024

Daily 22

Author’s note: The Polar Bear’s are amazing! They work extremely hard every day for us and if anything sounds offensive to them, then that’s purely for this daily! <3
Dear Polar Bears,
I was very sorry to hear about your extremely sudden strike! I mean, how will SWC work without our AMAZING polar bears? You guys are the heart and soul of SWC, and we just can’t survive without you. But, I guess, you aren’t as kind as we thought since you… abandoned us. You left us to fend for ourselves, with no incredible ideas, that all come from you guys. How will we survive?

In fact, I don’t think many people will want to come back to SWC ever again. We need dailies and weeklies. That’s the whole point of SWC. I can’t believe it. SWC has been something for me and many others to live off. I love writing, and I would never have been able to progress at all without you guys. And, living without it sounds… terrible.
I just don’t understand. You were always so eager to help. Yet, no matter how many mangoes we gave you, how many times Gurtle offered to gobble up all your links, you just leave us! And so suddenly! Some warning might have been nice.
And this had been such a horrible shock to us all. My first ever session as a co-leader, ruined! And maybe my last ever session. But that thought doesn’t deserve thinking about. Because I know, after reading all the amazing letters that we have all created, you will come back. There’s no reason for you not to. You love writing. You love this beautiful environment that you have contributed to so much. So stay.

Along with all these reasons for you to stay, I do have a very delicious lasagne that I made a few days ago. It’s by far the most scrumptious recipe I’ve come across. So maybe at least that and the prospect of mangoes will entice you back.
Kind (And angry) regards,
Silvi, the first-time co-leader who might never join another SWC session ever again.
P.S. I hate lasagne.



FairyAyla
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swc megathread ⌕ nov 2024

Daily 22:
Dear Polar Bears, let me start off by saying that polar bears are some of the coolest creature (not literally, they have very warm fur), i could go on and list some polar bear facts, but i don’t know enough polar bear facts to do that. Even though i read a book about them. Anyway, i’m getting off topic. Also didn’t you do this last session? Anyway, what are your demands anyway? You shouldn’t have a strike without demands, that’s a bit silly, don’t you think? Also i will give you some mango donuts and mango lemonade if you stop striking. Another reason is that your going on strike made the leaders and co-leaders go on strike, and then that made the campers go on strike, and now the hosts are the only ones not on strike! It’s a bit of a mess. So you should unstrike so everyone else can unstrike (Is that how it works? I don’t know). Also if you unstrike, i will give you a giant mango and some nail polish (Not to eat, don’t eat nail polish.) Also you should unstrike because secretly we all miss you and you should come back. Also next time you go on strike, maybe think of some demands first? That might be smarter. If you do have any actual demands, let me know and maybe something can arranged. So anyway, hmm, polar bear facts. Polar bears eat seals (not you Polar bears, i don’t think you seals, at least i hope you don’t). So anyway (Wow i am saying anyway and anyways a lot), this letter is almost done, and you should come back because your a very big part of Scratch Writing Camp, and we all miss you, and if you come i will give you mango donuts and mango lemonade and nail polish (not to eat!). So please come back, sincerely, Ayla. Goodbye <3 (Also enjoy some lasagna)

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AmazaEevee
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swc megathread ⌕ nov 2024

Daily #22
11/22/2024
344 words

Dearest POLAR BEARS, daily coordinators and team,

I realize I am a part of this group too, and as a mediator between the campers and the POLAR BEARS, I implore you to get off strike. Yes, I am enjoying getting a break and I am aware the compensation is necessary for our covert operation to work properly. However, now that Zai is not part of the POLAR BEARS, is lasagna the only donation we are receiving? I’m not so sure that is the proper reason for us to go on strike. I am by no means anti-lasagna, but I am sure that some of you agree with me that we should be going on strike for a much better reason: a well balanced diet. I, for one, believe that mangoes would be a credible donation. But until we can figure out what we are asking for in return, without rashly asking for lasagna because that has been the standard and norm up until now, I propose that we go back to working as usual.
There is a lot of work to be done, so many campers, leaders, and the hosts to impress. How else are we supposed to get points for our cabins? How else are we supposed to flaunt the dailies and weeklies that we’ve helped write if we are not writing them? We cannot make this up when SWC is out of session. The people don’t care about the challenge; they want the points! They won’t care when points don’t count.
So, I am hoping that we can reconsider our strike. Who even started it?
The fourth weekly is coming up soon and we need to get it finished right away, even though I don’t know what is in process for the completion of that already. But now that we have drawn attention to ourselves by striking, we should reverse our efforts right away and draw more attention by dazzling the crowd with even better, bigger dailies and a jaw dropping fourth weekly. Sound like a plan?

Hoping for the best,
Eevee
ChueyTheCat
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swc megathread ⌕ nov 2024

letter writing daily, 444 words

Dear Polar Bears and Polar Bear Cubs (iykyk),
Although I am among the number of the Cubs I nevertheless have heeded the seductive lure of points and am writing a letter as to why we should stop going on strike and write dailies again. I have divided this letter into the following considerations: Word Goals Would Suffer, Point Adders Would Have Nothing To Do, Campers Would Get Bored, and The Morepointism Argument.

First, Word Goals Would Suffer. It's much harder to reach your word goal without having dailies to write toward. We would have to rely solely on whatever independent writing we did. For people who like to write in small chunks of short stories rather than long novels, such as me, this is quite difficult and leaves writers with no motivation. No motivation leads to procrastination, and they spend hours scrolling through memes instead of writing (this totally isn't from personal experience guys). As such, dailies are our lifesaver when it comes to figuring out how to write enough to meet our goals.

Second, Point Adders Would Have Nothing To Do. As a point adder, I can testify that adding only two things at a time is not very satisfying. It's much more fun to add points in enormous chunks, especially if your cabin is the one submitting the most activities! If there were no dailies to add, life would get boring quite quickly, and Mouse would pounce on everything the instant it came into the main cabin and add it before anyone else had a chance and Ris and I would have to keep refreshing only to see the dreaded “Added!” from MOUSE who added EVERYTHING FROM THE FIRST POINT DAILY anyways moving on.

Third, Campers Would Get Bored. With no reason to check the main cabin, activity would slump. Campers would do nothing. SWC would fall into inactivity. If nobody was causing chaos in the main cabin, there would be nothing to put in the memory book. SWC would die a gruesome death and be mourned by none because without dailies it would just be that boring.

Finally, it's time to inspect The Morepointism Argument. Morepointism says that if there is a way to claim points for your cabin, you should do it. This extends to dailies, weeklies, and the occasional word war or critique. Morepointism requires point-adding activities to work and therefore we must continue to write dailies. Morepointism is very important and totally not something I just made up.

That concludes my letter to the Polar Bears and Polar Bear Cubs. I hope you will reconsider your position and begin writing dailies again.
Sincerely yours,
Chuey, Polar Bear Cub
Zyzeryko
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swc megathread ⌕ nov 2024

Dearest Polar Bears,

I have been made aware of your sudden and impolite decision to quit. As the leader of mystery, I can’t say I’m surprised—-but I am disappointed. Only leaders are permitted to go on strike, and only until food is given or points have been awarded to a particular cabin. You have been promised as much food as you can eat, and all of the points for your cabin. Please come back.
How can our growing community continue to thrive without the polar bears? It seems you are the only way to earn points, generously providing us with daily after daily and weekly after weekly to no thanks. WE send our thanks. All of mystery stands with you during this time, thanking you for your service in providing us with means to win—-even if it means your own demise. I must ask you to continue providing us with such dailies and weeklies as you always have, knowing you will now receive thanks for the task. I can’t promise you lasagna, but I’ll make you some delicuous dollar store cookies—-straight from my pockets!
You must return. You hold the weight of the entire community on your shoulders, so I beg of you. The leaders have gone on strike as well, me included—-as well as mystery’s self-appointed co, Luna. Soon will be the campers. And then what will you do? Stand back and watch while the world burns? Laugh at our despair from the rooftops of churches and castles? A real polar bear would never. Don’t pretend to be a real polar bear, someone who cares deeply about SWC and us, while you stand on the sidelines begging for more than you already have. Is points not enough? Must you insult us with your superiority? Let me know when you have let go of petty vengeance.

Yours truly, Zy
Mystery’s Fantasic Leader who will NEVER go on strike

318 words!
ChueyTheCat
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swc megathread ⌕ nov 2024

weekly 3, 2108 words

part 1, 775 words
If Rue didn’t pick up her pace by a few seconds, she was going to be late. Already, she could see candidates boiling out of buildings and swarming towards Headquarters.
She was going to get there first. She had to.
Triumphantly, pushing and shoving aside fellow candidates for the past few feet, she flung open the door and shoved her papers in the face of the startled man waiting inside.
“CANDIDATE RUE REPORTING FOR DUTY,” she panted, jumping up and down on her toes as she waited for him to rifle through the packet.
He didn’t so much as look at them, handing them back to her and plucking another sheaf of papers from one of the fists being waved in his face.
“Request denied. You should have known better, Candidate Rue.”
He stamped the papers and waved the lucky candidate through. Screams filled the hall - one of joy, ecstasy, and victory, the others of malice, despair, and defeat, soon overtaken by the cry of “ME PICK ME PICK ME NEXT!”
Another candidate was stamped and waved through, and then the man began shooing everyone else out. There was a lot more screaming.
Nobody paid any attention to the lone candidate sitting on the floor, staring at her papers.
She had been first. She had. There was nothing wrong with her papers, and it wasn’t her fault that she had a reputation for messing up every assignment she’d ever been on.
Okay, well, maybe it was partly her fault. But she needed this. She needed to become a member of the Supernatural Security Forces.
A thought struck her, and she stood up and began walking down the hall where the other two candidates had gone. Maybe this was just another test. The Head loved tests.
And she was going to pass this one, no matter what.
“Sorry, you’re late,” the SSF officer told her when she reached the door, motioning for her to move out. “Two kids yelling their heads off already went through.”
“I was here first,” Rue said, aware of how small and childish she sounded. It had to be a test. Had to be.
The officer sighed and looked down at his digi-pad.
“It looks like The Head needs you after all,” he said, surprised. He opened the door and ushered her through.
The Head was waiting for her, and so were the two candidates.
“This is a very dangerous mission,” The Head said without waiting for Rue to finish walking into the room. “And as eager as they were-” she glanced at the candidates, who squirmed under her gaze- “I’m not willing to risk two of my best students going into an untested situation, although the danger is part of their training. In real life missions, we keep a couple of expendable officers around to poke around new locations and see what level of security we need to send in. That’s going to be you today.”
Rue tried not to resent the word “expendable” and instead focused on what really mattered: she was going, and she was going first. This would get her so many merits. Maybe even wipe her records clean.
She hopped from one foot to the other while The Head blabbed on about safety protocols and all that. Please. Rue had memorized those her first day here. (She’d also promptly broken every one, but that was beside the point.)
Finally, The Head motioned for the tech crew to begin booting up the portal. It was almost time to go.
“We’re going after an unusually loud signal coming from this location,” The Head said. “We haven’t identified what it is yet, or classified its danger level. That’s why you’re going to go in for at least fifteen minutes and no longer than an hour to identify the signal, classify it, and come back. If you’re not back by then we’re going to assume you’ve failed and send an official crew to deal with it. You won’t be retrieved.”
The portal flickered to life, swirling with thousands of colors.
Rue closed her eyes, stepped in, and opened her eyes to darkness.
Well, almost darkness.
Two red eyes gleamed in the shadows, wide and hungry.
Despite her inability to follow the rules, Rue knew everything there was to know about fantastical creatures, and there was only one that had eyes that particular crimson.
“A unicorn?” she said, confused. “Those were all hunted down ages ago-”
The unicorn snorted and charged.
“-because of their very dangerous space-warping abilities!” Rue finished, right before the world twisted and her body was sent to another universe.
Needless to say, she wasn’t back by the deadline.

part 2
unbiased article, 288 words
Today in Mangoland, a champion has been born. During Mangoland's mango eating competition, Avery Beacon, age 12, ate the most mangoes in twenty minutes in her age division and won a $1000 cash prize.
Competition for the prize was stiff. Although there were 327 total applicants for the competition, only 250 of these got in, and by the time finals rolled around three days later, there were only 20 contestants remaining.
In the 9-12 age division, five children contested for the prize. Avery Beacon, age 12, Winner Loser, age 15, Yahir Abrahams, age 10, and Cressella Starr, age 9. Each had a pile of mangoes in front of them, cut into three pieces. “We don't peel the mangoes or take out the seed,” the referee said. “Without the extra challenge of navigating around those parts, it'd be too easy.”
In the end, Winner Loser tossed his final seed aside before Avery, but her family quickly interceded. “No matter how close the tie, Winner was in the wrong age division,” her mother said. Mrs. Beacon was also the one to sign Avery up for the competition. “She was always eating mangoes, and she got really good at it,” Mrs. Beacon states. “When I saw the flyer at the grocery store, I knew it was the perfect opportunity for her.” She also says that Avery's mango-eating skills come from trying to consume the fruit before any of her six younger siblings can gobble it down.
After sorting out the rumple caused by Winner's misplacement in the age bracket, Avery was awarded the $1000 prize, which she intends to use to buy a typewriter. “The title of best mango eater is nice, but I really just want my typewriter,” she says.

biased article, 269 words
Breaking news! Mangoland's annual mango-eating competition has made a major mess-up. Winner Loser, age 15, won the title of best mango eater, only to lose it a few minutes later to Avery Beacon, age 12.
Although he tossed his seed aside before Avery, the Beacon family came down on the judges, complaining that Winner was in the wrong age bracket and the prize belonged to their daughter. It ended with Avery carrying away her unjustly won prize and Winner left with nothing but a pile of mango skins and seeds.
One might argue that the real fault lies with the judges, who for unknown reasons placed Winner in the 9-12 age bracket. Which leads one to wonder: is it a conspiracy? And if so, does the Beacon family have anything to do with it?
Winner losing isn't the only suspicious incident that happened today. Cressella Starr, age 9, left before the winner was announced, although the reason for this is still unclear, as she appeared to be very optimistic about her chances.
How much did winning this contest mean to the Beacons? “I really want to buy a typewriter with the prize money,” Avery says. Notably, she doesn't include the word “hope” or mention any doubt that she will win the prize. It's possible that she didn't have any, for reasons that have yet to be brought to light.
Regardless of whether the Beacons have been engaging in some shady behind-the-scenes bargains, one thing remains clear. No matter what other news states, Winner Loser finished his mangoes before Avery, and he'll always be the true victor in our eyes.

part 3, 450 words
On November 22nd, midnight UTC, SWC woke up and chose chaos.
Every time the Polar Bears quit and campers have to write letters to convince them to come back, there's a small amount of mayhem. Campers make up dailies, shower mangoes in the comments, and award themselves thousands of points. But nothing quite like this has ever happened - all of SWC went on strike.
It started with a seemingly innocent comment in the Main Cabin. Luka complained that the Polar Bears kept quitting, but “What about the leaders??? Where's their pay??? I'm calling a strike! If the hosts don't meet our demands, we're walking off the job.”
Chuey agreed, saying that if Leadercabin didn't a get a million points they'd strike. When she received an enthusiastic response from Yume about Leadercabin, she added, “I'm making it a reality.” “Do it. Invite all of us,” Yume replied, and Leadercabin was born, led by Chuey, Luna (who was technically not a leader but threatened to boycott Leadercabin if she wasn't invited), Luka, and Yume. All of SWC's leaders were invited, and soon they were demanding food items to be added to the list of food the hosts had to give the leaders before they'd stop striking. Among the more notable demands were veins (Ris), souls and potato soup (Mouse), happiness (Clever), ketchup and rice (Luna), and money (Luka).
However, even this wasn't enough for the chaos-loving SWC community. Campers claimed that if leaders and Polar Bears were striking, campers should strike too! This led to Camper Cabin being created. Campers swarmed from everywhere. Enemies and allies alike came together with a common purpose that transcended cabin relationships and shattered borders. Soon afterwards, Luka began distributing “On Strike” pfps to everyone who was striking, further uniting the strikers. SWC was splashed with the iconic red circle and bold On Strike text, and the number of strikers wearing them only grew.
Now fast-forward to the next day. Although the strikes have cooled down a bit, many SWCers still proudly wear their “On Strike” pfps, and everyone, including the Polar Bears, continues to strike. News reporters all over camp have interviewed leaders and campers, gathered opinions, and written articles. No one is quite sure when the chaos will end, and for several minutes on the 23rd it appeared that even the hosts were striking and withholding cabin wars. (Further updates on this will be provided in the next issue, so be sure to pick up a copy of the Daily Chuey Gazette at your local newstand.) As of now none of the demands have been met, none of the strikers have stopped striking, and all of SWC is wondering what will happen next.

part 4, 326 words
TWO WHOLE ENTIRE DAYS
“Whole” and “entire” are redundant, as they're synonyms of each other. As such, I'd delete one of them to clear this sentence up a bit.
Now, the Memory book commi(t)tee, our beloved MBC. They have decided that if the POLAR BEARS can go on strike, so can they. They will now not look at any entries for the Memory book cover until further notice.
Some of this chunk is a bit awkwardly worded, so let's see if we can straighten that out. First, “Now, the Memory Book Committee, our beloved MBC.” is a sentence fragment. (Additionally, only memory is capitalized, so I'd go back and change it to either all capitalized or all lowercase so it matches.) Second, “They will now not look” could be reworded as “Now they won't look” to make it a bit easier to read. Avoiding word clutter such as this makes your writing easier to read and looks clearer.
Otherwise, this is pretty funny so far! I've loved seeing all the articles on the strike.
in the balrog link-eating motivation mangoes
Again, there's a lot of word clutter here. Making up euphemisms or slang usually just leads to confusion, so I'd either replace this phrase with a generally accepted euphemism or delete it, as it's not strictly necessary to the rest of the sentence.
Dystopian has introduced a 3rd challenge to its campers f(o)r them to earn runes (to get a higher rank) which thus will encourage the campers to write more, hit their word counts, get more words and therefore more points for dystopian during the great adding, the few days after the end of SWC when our lovely QUAILS (who very thankfully, have not gone on strike…yet) sort out all the points, rankings and more.
Unless your reader is in Dystopian, this news probably won't interest them unless you include similar news from other cabins. As it is, having to stop and explain Dystopian's terms for non-Dystopian campers muddies some of your sentence (which, as a side note, I'd recommend splitting into two or more sentences, since it's a run-on). I'd replace this section entirely OR include similar news from other cabins to offer a more inclusive viewpoint.
And then now the hosts have gone on strike and refuse to give us our Cabin Wars, one of the most essential parts of SWC.
“Then” and “Now” are confusing when put together like that because they're in two different tenses. It looks like the rest of your sentence is in present tense, so I'd delete “Then” to make the sentence all in the same tense.
Okay, that's all I have for this piece! It was quite funny and I enjoyed your little commentary on the strike. I hope this critique was helpful, and I wish you luck on the rest of your weekly!

Last edited by ChueyTheCat (Nov. 23, 2024 21:11:26)

Alfalfa78
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swc megathread ⌕ nov 2024

Daily

Dear POLAR BEAR team,
This is Bea, one of the many campers of SWC. I am politely asking you to not quit! What would we do without you guys? You are so very nice, kind, and very lovely people, and we would all miss you terribly. Please come back.
If that’s not enough reason, I have more!
Like, I have an offering of lasagna just for you guys. I heard from several little birdies that it’s your favorite dish.
Also, dailies are a key part of SWC. Dailies are fun, quick prompts that eight times out of ten get my hamster wheels turning and my fingers clicking on the keys! Dailies are so much easier than weeklies as well. And besides, SWC would get boring really fast if we only had four weeklies. That wouldn’t be very fun…
Although I am not sure why you guys are striking. (lack of lasagna, perhaps?) You really shouldn’t. Is it too much planning, not enough pay, long, strenuous work hours, something else that my brain won’t supply me with right now?! I’m sure the campers, co-leaders, leaders, and hosts could find something to remedy that.
I apologize for my terrible letter writing skills, but! I think you guys are (hopefully) getting the points and reasons of why you should not leave!
I can bake (cook???) more lasagna for you guys if you need more! I’m sure everybody wouldn’t mind pitching in either! Ignoring the fact that we, the campers, are also on strike! Along with the leaders! In our defense you started it! AND you left us unsupervised! A terrible choice, really. Why did you do that?
So, those are ALL of my reasons as to why you guys should not quit, and come back!
Sincerely, Bea, a camper who is totally not on strike right now.
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swc megathread ⌕ nov 2024

daily nov. 22nd - strike strike strike!!!
. dear polar bears, hi, it’s me!! i am an swc camper, and i will assume that you have heard of our species before. i will be keeping my identity private with the intent of not getting destroyed, but i’ll attempt to share a little - i’ve participated in many camp sessions before, and i’m pretty sure i have been part of your team at some point (???) so that’s fantastic! right? (spare me)
word has been spread that starting this week, you guys have decided to take a strike. how peculiar. but, i can kind of see it; writing and planning dailies and weeklies and anything else swc has to offer would be a ton of work, work that i applaud you for!, and we all want to give up sometimes. it’s a matter of if we give in or not, and to my utmost disappointment you all have. (weak)
and to that, i have a little message to write to the polar bears: get off the ground!! persist!! there is a crowd of people who admire and appreciate your work, and this camp practically depends on it!! how else are we meant to get points and engage in the battle of the leaderboard, with all the vital point-giving aspects gone? everything we’ve ever known would collapse at your responsibility, and wouldn’t that be sad? the new daily is expected to arrive tomorrow, and there’s a crowd of people anticipating its arrival.
not to mention, tomorrow happens to be cabin wars day. if you don’t come back, the war between cabins might as well escalate to become a war between polar bearsies and campers. we’ve already begun organizing forces just in case it comes to that, wink wink nudge nudge, and are fully prepared to fight in the name of our precious little camp. we’ll find a way, somehow, to bring you guys back (isn’t that nice? we just love you all that much :))
for legal reasons, this is not a threat, only a cutesy little warning! we are still currently at peace, and are not opposed to baking however many lasagnas we need. but, this offer only applies until we run out of ingredients, yes? (picture this: the polar bears disappear, and there is nothing left to eat the lasagnas. as a rule of nature, the lasagnas overpopulate and begin to assert world dominance. terrifying.)
so yes, thank you. i’d prefer if whoever reads this letter were to not share it with anyone, that would be a disaster. ohoho. just tell the team to come back, please!!!

sincerest sincerities, swc camper
additional envelope contents: fifty dollar bill

Last edited by -vanillamochabear- (Nov. 22, 2024 23:40:30)

-WildClan-
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swc megathread ⌕ nov 2024

Hey. Polar Bear team.
I heard you were quitting. I guess it’s come to this, then, huh? You’re moving on from Scratch Writing Camp? I don’t know if you were unhappy here, or if you’re just aiming for bigger and better things now—you didn’t really say. But I respect your choice.
Yeah, I’m not going to try to convince you to stay. Everything must come to an end eventually. If you feel that your time here is over, then go. If Scratch Writing Camp is holding you back more than helping you forward, then don’t linger. Get out there and do what you want with your lives. Find happiness. Make something beautiful. Help people. Change the world. Whatever it is that you’re after, chase it down and don’t stop just because a bunch of us are sad to see you go.
That is, if that’s your reasoning for quitting. Again, you didn’t say. I don’t know. Maybe you don’t truly plan on leaving this camp behind. Maybe you’re doing this for recognition, or you’re on strike to bring about change, or you just need a break. If that’s the case, just let your wishes be known, and the community will rise to meet them. I mean, are you aware of what you’ve built here? The campers, myself included, love this place. We’re devoted to this odd little corner of the internet and all its silliness, chaos, and heartfelt moments. Many of us have grown up here. Many of us credit the camp—and you guys—with kindling our love of writing and helping us improve our skills, encouraged every step of the way by the most supportive people we’ve ever met. We care about each other. We care about you. If there’s anything you need from us, we won’t hesitate to do it for you.
I don’t want to see Scratch Writing Camp crumble, though I know it probably will someday. It’s crazy, honestly, that we’ve made it this far. We’ve made it through forum outages, the changing of hosts, Gurtle’s rampage, and a frankly ridiculous amount of arson. We’ve fought each other in cabin wars a thousand times over and have only come out stronger than ever. But I don’t know if we can withstand all of you leaving at once. We’ll do our best to keep going, try to fill your roles, but it won’t be the same. If you’re serious about quitting, then know that the camp may fall. But if it does, it’ll be because it was meant to. Its time will have come, and we’ll drift away one by one, keeping the warmth of the memories alive even as we leave the ruins of old studios and forgotten comment threads behind.
Oh. I just remembered something. November 14 of 2023, you went on strike. Just over a year ago. Was that related? A warning, a wake-up call? A practice run at what it would feel like to leave SWC? You came back after that time. But now you say “quit,” not “strike.” Is it final now, then?
Anyhow.
Please just say why you’re leaving. At least give us a chance to say goodbye. Then… it’s up to you. You always have a choice, Polar Bears. Every story needs an end. Is this yours?
—Wild
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swc megathread ⌕ nov 2024

She was done with this.
All the books she’d ever read starred characters with loving families. Either their parents had loved them and loved each other for the person’s whole life, or they’d left their family in blissful ignorance – because it was better for them – and found their own perfect bond.
She couldn’t ‘accidentally’ escape to another world, with parents who cared about each other, loved each other, with friends like siblings she could spill her life onto, siblings without constant fighting and petty one-upping. Had any of the authors seen, considered, any less?
Anything slightly like real life?
They must not have cared about people’s families. Just scratch some loving parents or guardians into the story, lovely people with no flaws who always want to hear about their child’s day, to fill the gaps. A rock, of sorts.
Well, she didn’t have a rock.
She had to live with a mother who thought she was perfect and a father who still thought it could be fixed, messages upon messages and words she didn’t want to reply to until he came to her door and said he’d call the police.
She read to get away, but sometimes she hated the fact that they all just had better lives than her. Sure, they had to save the world, but at least they had people who supported them more than they hated each other. At least they didn’t have to keep a face for their friends on top of an argument five minutes before. They were lucky, despite what was on top of them. They had someone to share the burden with.
She had nobody.
She stared at the ceiling, watching the fan blades whizz above her, trying not to listen to the muffled yelling. She slipped out of her bed, tears threatening to stream down her face, quietly stalking through the hallway and down the stairs and into the farthest corner from them. At least it was a big house. She let the tears fall. She could do nothing.
-
She was fine. She was genuinely fine, despite last night.
She said hi to her friends, shouldering her school bag and striding into the maths classroom. She giggled and grinned with them, and the emotion was true. She’d thrust last night into the storage room of her heart, just as she had with all the nights like those. When the bell rang, she grabbed her things and listened to them as she always did, occasionally talking as she did. It was almost surprising how easily she could forget about it, the way she could just stuff it into a box and forget about it. She truly forgot about it.
But when she dared creep into the storage room, the pain was still there.

(462 words)
booklover883322
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swc megathread ⌕ nov 2024

Weekly 3
Part One: 506/500
Part Two: 283/250 + 271/250
Part Three: 455/450
Part Four: 181
Total Word Count: 1696
Completed: 11/23/24 at 5:58AM UTC
Part One: (506 words)
Elenor ran down the steps, coughing from the smoke. Her little feet slapped against the steps as she ran out of the house. She held her teddy bear close to her chest and looked back at the house as more smoke streamed out of the windows. She heard something burst, and she looked down to see her bear gone, turned to ash. She shrieked, bending down and trying to scoop the ashes back into the shape of her bear, her beloved bear. She barely noticed the flames that licked at her fingers, leaving them unharmed. Her ears didn’t register anything, although there were sounds of sirens. She started to mumble, “Mama’s bear- Mama’s bear- Mama’s going to be so angry-” She didn’t hear a first responder approach her, but she felt their touch. She looked up to see them smiling down at her. “Hello there friend. Are you alright?” Elenor shook her head, pointing at the bear over and over again, not making a sound. Tears streamed down her face, cleaning lines of ash off of her cheeks. The first responder frowned, “Oh, I’m so sorry. What happened?” Elenor was not in the mood to respond, starting to sob. She curled up on the ground, not registering anything. No ambulance, no fire, no sirens. All was silence, and she was okay with that.

Elenor sat cross-legged on the ground, breathing in deeply. She had her eyes closed, muttering to herself. She sighed, trying to control the flame that burned within her. She felt it grow and shrink as she tried to control it. She was its master, not the other way around.
“Hey!”
Elenor looked up, eyes burning with small bits of flame. Her adoptive sister looked at her and grimaced, “Oh! Sorry- Didn’t know you were meditating-”
Elenor shrugged, “It’s fine.”
“Can I talk to you?”
Elenor nodded, and Ileene came and sat next to her, imitating the position of her legs. “Soooo- Has it been giving you trouble again?”
Elenor nodded sadly. “Yeah… Mom told you to come and check on me, didn’t she-”
Ileene nodded, “Yeah- She was a little worried about you.”
“Well, it’s nice that she was worried.” Elenor coughed, rubbing her stomach a bit as the flame rose up again.
“Are you sure that you’re okay?”
Elenor shrugged, “When have I ever been okay?”
“Fair point, unfortunately-” Ileene huffed, “Just be careful, okay?”
Elenor nodded, “I will, promise.”

After she had calmed down further, Elenor walked into her house with her sister. It was big, and Elenor hated traversing the huge thing. She walked into the living room and spotted something on the coffee table. She made a face, walking over to it. It was a newspaper, one that was slightly wrinkled and burnt at the corners. She read the headline, curious. She made a face, registering what it said. “Young girl sets fire to family home, kills entire family.” She looked at the picture, clearly recognizing herself. However, in the adjacent family photo, she saw herself standing with strangers…

Unbiased:

YOUNG GIRL BELIEVES THAT SHE WAS ONLY AWAY FROM HOME FOR A DAY, BUT WAS ACTUALLY BELIEVED MISSING FOR 10 YEARS
Saki Momori was seventeen years old when she went missing and is still seventeen years old today. Momori had been missing for over ten years, yet she recently turned up to the family home. Her mother was shocked at the revelation, and scientists are having a hard time figuring out what happened to her. Momori is insistent that she “was only gone for a day!”, yet the time that has passed since her disappearance doesn’t lie.

Many of our nation’s top minds are looking into this strange case. While they can’t agree on a specific cause, there are a few running theories. The most prominent theory is that Momori experienced some sort of Time Dilation, alternatively known as the Urashima Effect.

When asked to comment, scientist Tohru Sato (one of Momori’s ex-classmates) explained the Urashima Effect as this. “The effect was named after the legend of Urashima Taro. The story is long, but all you really need to know is that Urashima experienced a time when time stood still, or at least went much slower than normal. Thus, the Urashima Effect got its name, since the story was so popularized, especially in the media.”

Momori is currently being detained by the police for questioning. She is insistent on her version of events, even taking the police to the site where the tunnel she supposedly stayed in was. However, it’s gone, which has baffled those investigating her case even more.

We arranging interviews with Momori and her mother, and we will be happy to cover things more thoroughly once these interviews are complete.

Biased:
YOUNG GIRL WHO WENT MISSING FOR TEN YEARS TURNS UP LOOKING THE SAME AS SHE DID TEN YEARS AGO! IS THERE FOUL PLAY AT HAND OR DECEPTION FROM AN ESTRANGED DAUGHTER?

Saki Momori is seventeen. Or is she? Momori went missing ten years ago, aged seventeen. However, when she appeared back at her home downtown, she was met with an emotional response from her mother who had been childless for ten years.

Experts are incredibly bewildered by this case and have done everything in their power to understand Momori’s unique situation. The teen claims that she went out for a day and came to a tunnel. What type of tunnel, we’ll never know, since she seems to have no idea where said tunnel is now, despite claiming that it was once in a certain spot. Momori is also very against her current detainment with the local police, which is a bit concerning. Some may assert that she simply wants to spend more time with her mother, but she hasn’t exactly been the paragon of a loving daughter.

Momori’s mother has opened up in interviews about their relationship, or so it has been said. We are currently in the process of arranging interviews with the both of them. However, with the information available right now, it seems like Momori’s ‘one day’ escapade was the result of tension. Only she knows what really happened, but only if her accounts are reliable.

Top scientists in the country are looking into her strange experience with the “Urashima Effect” or Time Dilation. However, is this really the case? Or is Momori not the only person involved?

Part Three: 455
MASCOTS ON THE GRILL? CONTROVERSIAL MASCOT COOKOUT SPARKS HARSH DEBATE OVER THE EATING HABITS OF SWCERS

Many SWCers were surprised when they saw advertisements for Alana’s studio, celebrating a “Mascot Cookout”. They were intrigued by the concept, as well as the wacky advertisements. However, some were off-put by the practice. They did not want to eat their beloved mascots! However, many people claimed that eating the mascots was not the point, but rather that the mascots were preparing the food!

In the actual description of the cookout, the menu was conflicting. Some items, like the “mango tornado” clearly showed no harm to our beloved mascots. However, other items, like “Gurtle’s Flipper Soup” said otherwise. So, what was it? Were the mascots preparing the food, or being prepared as food?

The thought is still debated by SWCers. Some point to the description as evidence that the mascots were doing the cooking since that’s what it claims in the first place. However, others point to the attitudes of the patrons, as well as some of the menu items to make a case for the contrary. This sparked a moral panic throughout SWC, some even calling for an entire shutdown of the cookout as a whole. However, as for right now, the mascot cookout studio still stands, still serving food for whoever wishes to have it.

We here at the SWC Tribune went and scoured through the various comments left in these studios in order to confirm our assertions about the various attitudes that SWCers had about these events. Some were protesting the cookout, being rather loud (our writers’ ears are still ringing), and others were retaliating by gloating. While quite hilarious behavior, this can lead to poor mascots being caught in the crossfire. Did anyone stop to actually check on the mascots themselves?

While our writers weren’t able to get any quotes from old and new SWC mascots, we were able to acquire a few notes about their whereabouts. It seems like Gurtle had been helping the hosts postpone cabin wars and Blahaj was fighting Skog over who was better. Mazaza was attempting to build a sailboat out of whatever was available. For what reason, no one knows.

However, there are a few mascots that have been reported missing, and this has worried SWCers quite a lot. However, there are a few who revel in the chaos, like the orchestrator of the cookout herself, Alana. She relentlessly advertised her service and also created confusion around her practices, though that honestly contributed to the fun.

Who knows what Alana was really doing with the mascots? Well, only she will be able to tell us. Whatever the cookout may have been like, it sure was a time to remember.

Part Four: 181 words (no quotes)
Critique for @Runaway–
Heyy! You did a wonderful job on your article! I loved reading it! (asdjasldkhgalskhdflskf I forgot I was in it and I loved see my random appearance-) Here are some of my notes!

including one by the core of the camp
I would change “by” to “from”.

Though they did return, the Polar bears were not done, and came back with revenge at the forefront of their minds. Rather than withholding dailys, and making an impossible weekly, they held back cabin wars. That’s right- just when everyone was convinced that it was cabin war time- pencils at the ready- the polar bears striked. They created a new daily- another one to win them back- and declared that cabin wars were pushed back a day.
I love how this is written! However, justtt a little bit of a correction for factuality- Us polar bears had literally no idea, at least I didn’t- So maybe factoring in that the hosts were the only ones that knew would be a good idea.

This lead campers to wonder- did the Polar bears ever really strike? Or was it all just a plan, a plan to build hype for the next event?
I would change “lead” to “leads”. Also, the way that it’s written, it sounds good out loud, but looks weird in writing. I would remove one of the “a plan”s.

Many campers, such as @booklover883322, seemed to care less about the impacts of the strike and more about participating in the revenge-strikes orginized by many campers. Bookie was quoted as saying “HAHAHA! TRIPLE STRIKING TIME!” before running off into the sunset.
X3 I just love this- I got to be a coleader, a polar bear, and a mbc member, so triple striking! This is just me because I’m quirky like that, but that’d be fun to include, as well as how other people had a lot of conflicts of interests during the ordeal.

You did a wonderful job, and I thought it was hilarious- Great job! It looks great!

Last edited by booklover883322 (Nov. 23, 2024 06:01:56)

AmazaEevee
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swc megathread ⌕ nov 2024

Word War with Ivy
11/22/2024
360 words

A/N: Kinda turned into a badly planned Black Widow fic LOL

saving people does not make you a hero. especially if you have done so much more wrong than good in your life. i haven't done enough right to make up for all that i've done wrong. i've hurt too many, fought for the wrong side for too long. i can't be considered a hero.
a hero is a title only for those who deserve it. for those who have fought so hard for the greater good. i am not. i'm just starting to turn my life around, just starting to figure out how to have relationships that don't end in backstabbing and threats. i am not a role model a figure to be looked up to. i am not a hero. i don't deserve it.
but maybe in another world, i could be considered a hero. but i didn't have the luxury or that choice. i was brought up in the wrong places, learned the wrong things early on. it's not easy for me to undo all that i've been taught, even if i try my hardest. no i'm not a hero, i am not someone good. i haven't even saved that many people. just because i am doing a duty as a human living on this earth, that doesn't make me a hero, does it? not when i haven't done enough good to wipe out all the red x's that line my ledger. that marks of red that bleed torture and worse.
i'm not worthy of the title of hero. there are many things that make one a hero and i don't fit all the criteria. i don't want to. i've lived too differently, seen too much. i don't know what a hero entails and even if i did, i am not a person to be one. i wasn't born to be a hero. i wasn't born to be praised. i was born to do the dirty work in the shadows, to do what no one else dares. there are many things about me that people don't know. there are many things i want to forget.
but if i could dream. if i could just let myself believe? maybe
AmazaEevee
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swc megathread ⌕ nov 2024

Weekly #3
11/22-23/2024
1760 words

Part 1:
537 words

Avery Beacon, a young girl around the age of 12, just won the mango eating contest. In her age division of 9-12 year olds, she had eaten the most amount of mangoes in 20 minutes. It was a hard feat, ending with sticky hands and even messier faces. The mangoes were sliced up into three chunks, two of the fruit on the skin, and one with the seed. The contestants had to both eat all of the flesh of the sides, and off the seed. Nothing was peeled, which made things even harder for the children. Out of the 327 applicants for the general competition, only 250 got in and a mere 20 were in the finals.
Avery had trained somewhat. She loved eating mangoes and in order to make sure none of her 6 younger siblings took any of her beloved fruit, she would eat it quickly. Just like with anything else, with practice came progress, and she soon mastered the art–slurping the fruit, ripping it off of the seed, and licking her lips. After doing it for a few years, her parents came to notice the quick work she made of eating the fruit and when her mother saw a flier about the mango eating competition on a bulletin board in a grocery store, she knew she had to sign Avery up. In order to get ready for the competition, Avery's diet became heavily mango based. This also gave her an excuse to eat more mangoes than her siblings, something that they didn't quite enjoy.
All of her mango eating brought her up to this point: the competition. Held in the beautiful tropic state of Mangoland, in the capital Mangano, the competition lasted three days. Each day, more and more contestants were kicked out, leaving the final five of the 9-12 age division: Avery Beacon (12), Winner Loser (15), Yahir Abrams (10), Cressella Starr (11), and Pinocchio Oak (9).
Having eaten many mangoes over the past two days, many of the contestants were getting sick of the taste of mango, at least Avery sure did. She was beginning to dread the taste of mango, but also knew that she had to be the one to get first place, because she had done too much to reach this goal and she really wanted the $1000 cash prize to buy herself a typewriter.
And so, when the referee blew the whistle, signaling the start of the twenty minutes, she made quick work of grabbing the first mango in her pile and eating all the fruit as quickly as she could. She and Winner Loser were a close tie, though Winner had managed to toss aside his last seed before Avery had. The Beacons later complained that no matter how close the tie was, Winner had been in the wrong age division, so the cash prize was awarded to Avery instead. Pinocchio had given up, vowing to never touch the fruit again in his life. Yahir had just shaken Avery’s equally sticky hand and left. And Cressella disappeared before anyone could tell her who had won.
In the end, Avery Beacon got her typewriter and the title of best mango eater in Mangoland between the ages of 9-12.

Part 2:
277 and 284 words
Based off of https://scratch.mit.edu/discuss/post/8237986/

UNBIASED
A Siren Spotted By Local Woman
Written by: Eevee Surname

In the dark of night, Layla Svenns walked out on the Circle Port and reportedly saw the Siren of the Blue Sea. Many sailors spoke of catching glimpses of her, but Layla was the first woman to be able to glimpse the siren. She was seen by sailors to walk towards the Everland Port, following the tune of the siren to the edge of the port.
When she had rushed back onto land, claiming she had seen the siren, she was out of breath and the local sailors had to parse together the bits of phrases they heard from her. Eventually when she was calm, she was able to tell her story to the sailors, handing over her camera and showing the picture of the singing siren in a boat.
Picture taken by Layla Svenns, November 14, 20XX.
“I kept hearing about this siren from the sailors, who whispered of glimpses that they had been able to catch here and there,” Layla told us, a few days after her big encounter. “I was determined to catch a picture of the Siren.” She added with a laugh, “It does me well as a journalist-in-training and so exhilarating.” And get the big scoop she did, as many are inspired to go and look for this Siren themselves. Being able to put a face to the melodic voice so many have heard over the years is not an easy feat, but Layla Svenns has done what many thought was impossible.

BIASED
Local Police Warns of a Spotted Siren
Written by: Eevee Familyname


Late last night, Layla Svenns, a journalist-in-training, was determined to spot the Siren. After many years of sailors chasing the Siren, hoping to catch a glimpse of the figure behind the enticing melodies that fill Everland Port, we finally have a picture.
Picture courtesy of Layla Svenns, 11/14/20XX.
With this new development and identification of the Siren, the police are encouraging everyone to look for her. “Be on the lookout for this here siren,” Chief Colbert warns, “She’s lured too many sailors out into the wild unknown. Don’t get too close, but if you see her, let us know. We must remove this threat immediately.”
Local sailors are in an uproar at this bounty placed on the Siren’s head, but siren experts are stating that it is imperative to remove this siren from our ports. “The sirens’ voices are pretty and delicate, but it is extremely dangerous to go near them alone. Let the experts handle this,” local expert Simon Conaway stated.
We were able to get a word with Layla Svenns after this traumatic event. “I kept hearing about this siren in hushed tones from the sailors and I knew that I just had to get a picture of her, no matter what it took,” she told us, pale and shaking. “I- I didn’t think that I could be pulled in by just some singing.”
In this time of uncertainty, we should all band together to make sure none of us go out alone. The Siren is out there; no one is safe. Further updates to come soon.

Part 3:
507 words

Camper promotes Competition and Motivation Amongst SWCers
Written by: Eevee Lastname

Even in Scratch Writing Camp, where friendly competition is fostered and cabin relationships are tossed around, there can be a disproportionate amount of effort put into your cabin. A camper’s dedication at gaining points for their cabin may not be seen up on the leaderboard when the rising of ranks relies on many. That is why when Claya, the host of the SWC Trackbear leaderboard, introduced this to the SWC community, it raised up an extra layer of competition.
When we talked to Claya, she mentioned that she discovered Trackbear as a Nanowrimo alternative and thought introducing it to SWC would help add to the chaos. “It blew up way bigger than I thought it would, which was super awesome!” she said. It certainly brought more chaos and attention, as even after the initial SWCers joined, many more joined later on as they heard about what was going on the leaderboard.
On a leaderboard where you are representing yourself, you can accurately see where you lay, thus encouraging you to write more, work harder, and see where your fellow cabinmates are on this graph as well. This brought many to compete for the coveted first place on the leaderboard.
Most notably would be when the Trackbear was first starting off in the beginning of the session. There was a good handful of SWCers on, and Luna and Claya sparked the first rivalry. Claya was at the top of the leaderboard at the time, but was soon topped by Luna in a few hours. After bantering and tossing the spot of first between the two of them, they began to write just to beat the other at the end of each day. This brought about both positive and negative results.
In an interview, Luna mentioned that this competition helped her to push her boundaries and motivated to stay on top. “I was only intending to go to like 50k this session,” she stated, going on to say that the Trackbear and being on first helped her to write thousands of words per day. This has clearly been the case, as of November 19th, when her word count is past the initial goal of 50k, resting at 58,473, nearly 8 and a half thousand words more, with a third of the session left. However, she has also said that it has been stressful, though she enjoys writing, due to overworking herself and leading to a few days of no writing.
Claya’s incorporation of Trackbear into the SWC friendly competition has brought about a new wave of motivation and enthusiasm among participants, allowing writers to see where they rank among others, or to crank it up a notch and fight for first. As we can see from Luna and Claya’s rivalry, this has helped to exceed personal expectations and strive to do more, but we can also overwork ourselves. As we enter the last week of SWC, let’s remember to build up those friendly relationships while staying healthy.

Part 4:
https://scratch.mit.edu/discuss/post/8249141/

Last edited by AmazaEevee (Nov. 24, 2024 00:36:31)

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swc megathread ⌕ nov 2024

Weekly Part Three
464 words

Scratch Writing camp. A triannual virtual writing camp, bringing together writers from all over scratch to showcase their talents and compete for their cabin’s victory. But recently the camp has been shaken up by a series of strikes- including one by the core of the camp- the polar bears.

The polar bears are a group in charge of writing the dailies and weeklys for SWC. They are an important part of the camp- handing out points and motivation to all of the campers. But recently, they were feeling underappreciated and threatened to leave camp!

An array of carefully written letters were sent in to the polar bears- containing heartfelt stories, careful reasoning and all too often threats. The campers were distraught- threatening to take over the job themselves and to steal the Polar bear’s beloved lasagna.

Though they did return, the Polar bears were not done, and came back with revenge at the forefront of their minds. Rather than withholding dailys, and making an impossible weekly, they held back cabin wars. That’s right- just when everyone was convinced that it was cabin war time- pencils at the ready- the polar bears striked. They created a new daily- another one to win them back- and declared that cabin wars were pushed back a day.

Despite this, the polar bears knew they had to maintain the favor of the campers. So, they claimed that if people did well on the daily, they’d make tomorrow’s bigger and better than ever. This lead campers to wonder- did the Polar bears ever really strike? Or was it all just a plan, a plan to build hype for the next event? Conflicting opinions ruled camp, so I took to the streets to ask the opinions of the campers themselves.

Many campers, such as @booklover883322, seemed to care less about the impacts of the strike and more about participating in the revenge-strikes orginized by many campers. Bookie was quoted as saying “HAHAHA! TRIPLE STRIKING TIME!” before running off into the sunset.

Some other campers took a different approach, building shrines to laganga in hopes of tempting the polar bears into returning. To my knowledge this has had little effect, however was very useful when I was hungry on the job. Another popular theory was that the Scratch Writing Camp mascot, Gurtle, had grown sick of eating links and had consumed the entirety of cabin wars- something the polar bears were rushing to cover up by distracting us with their absence.

No matter what you believe, it’s clear that the main cabin is going to be an interesting place for the next few days- and Via’s news agency will be with you every step of the way, to report any new events and solving the true mystery behind the Polar bear's disappearance.
KitVMH
Scratcher
100+ posts

swc megathread ⌕ nov 2024

Critique of this piece by Midnight

Your opening paragraph effectively captures the chaos of Roleplay Day. Well done.
Roleplay is usually spelled with no space (like how I just spelled it) or with a hyphen (role-play), whereas you spelled it with a space (role play). I would change it to roleplay, since I believe that’s how the daily description spelled it.
I suggest you change “making an effort not to drink fellow camper” to “trying not to drink a fellow camper,” since the sentence is quite long already and that would help streamline it. And “Two are already given up” to “Two have already been given up.”

But that way, cats. None of them are sweet.
I found this confusing. I’m not sure what you mean by “But that way, cats.” Maybe reword or expand on that to be clearer?

A certain SWCer is forfeiting sleep for the benefit of finishing her book, and to be honest, who hasn't been there?
Mood.

Even though you don't earn any of your beloved points…
I like this line (the whole line, not just the bit I just quoted). An accurate depiction of an SWCer’s mindset.

…you also socialise with people (unwillingly) and have a few laughs.
To me, this sounds like you are saying you were unwilling or reluctant to socialize, but roleplay day led you to socialize with people without meaning to, and you ended up enjoying it.

Over all, from the description of Roleplay Day to the commentary on the weekly to the notes on cabin rankings, this piece successfully encapsulates a moment in SWC.

Runaway--
Scratcher
35 posts

swc megathread ⌕ nov 2024

CRITIQUE for the weekly
Writing by booklover883322, 344 words of critique

Part Three: 455
MASCOTS ON THE GRILL? CONTROVERSIAL MASCOT COOKOUT SPARKS HARSH DEBATE OVER THE EATING HABITS OF SWCERS

Heheh the title is already an amazing start, the amount of articles I get in my recommended that have titles just like that… you don't even want to know XD

Many SWCers were surprised when they saw advertisements for Alana’s studio, celebrating a “Mascot Cookout”. They were intrigued by the concept, as well as the wacky advertisements. However, some were off-put by the practice. They did not want to eat their beloved mascots! However, many people claimed that eating the mascots was not the point, but rather that the mascots were preparing the food!

This is good! The only thing I'd say you need to change is you start two of your sentences with ‘however.’ This wouldn't be too bad, but paired with the use of so many exclamation marks it makes the phrase feel a little bit repetitive.

In the actual description of the cookout, the menu was conflicting. Some items, like the “mango tornado” clearly showed no harm to our beloved mascots. However, other items, like “Gurtle’s Flipper Soup” said otherwise. So, what was it? Were the mascots preparing the food, or being prepared as food?

It could be nice to expand more on what you mean here. Really spell it out for your readers- they might not know who Gurtle is, and why flipper soup could mean she's…. in the soup. Even just saying she's a turtle could work fine.

The thought is still debated by SWCers. Some point to the description as evidence that the mascots were doing the cooking since that’s what it claims in the first place. However, others point to the attitudes of the patrons, as well as some of the menu items to make a case for the contrary. This sparked a moral panic throughout SWC, some even calling for an entire shutdown of the cookout as a whole. However, as for right now, the mascot cookout studio still stands, still serving food for whoever wishes to have it.

There it is again, however. It can be fun to go through your writing and recognize what words you use a lot- obviously 7 isn't too bad, but for 455 words, it can feel like it. Try mixing it up with nevertheless, yet, or other words like that. Mostly just try and break up your usage, so there's no sentences started the same way back to back.

We here at the SWC Tribune went and scoured through the various comments left in these studios in order to confirm our assertions about the various attitudes that SWCers had about these events. Some were protesting the cookout, being rather loud (our writers’ ears are still ringing), and others were retaliating by gloating. While quite hilarious behavior, this can lead to poor mascots being caught in the crossfire. Did anyone stop to actually check on the mascots themselves?

SWC Tribune I love that. I think here it would make sense to say ‘this led to the poor mascots’ rather than ‘this can lead to the poor mascots.’ Just because as a journalist it's your job to appear confidant, and also for this part you're covering past events, rather than things that could happen in the future.

While our writers weren’t able to get any quotes from old and new SWC mascots, we were able to acquire a few notes about their whereabouts. It seems like Gurtle had been helping the hosts postpone cabin wars and Blahaj was fighting Skog over who was better. Mazaza was attempting to build a sailboat out of whatever was available. For what reason, no one knows.

I think ‘SWC mascots, old and new’ would work better than ‘old and new SWC mascots.’ Just for better flow, but also because it places the focus on the mascots, rather than the old and new. (There's only a few of them- so it makes more sense to organize it this way.)

However, there are a few mascots that have been reported missing, and this has worried SWCers quite a lot. However, there are a few who revel in the chaos, like the orchestrator of the cookout herself, Alana. She relentlessly advertised her service and also created confusion around her practices, though that honestly contributed to the fun.

Who knows what Alana was really doing with the mascots? Well, only she will be able to tell us. Whatever the cookout may have been like, it sure was a time to remember.

You use rhetorical questions a lot in this piece, which is really effective especially for the ‘article’ style of writing. Overall this was really fun to read, and funny too!! I didn't pick up on a single grammer mistake, which is like??? how??? I envy you ^^

Last edited by Runaway-- (Nov. 23, 2024 07:08:33)

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