daboydodo wrote:

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Platypus_WKeyboard wrote:

daboydodo wrote:

can i be here

You'll have to sign up.

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what to sign up on

Here: https://scratch.mit.edu/projects/872014413/

Okay, my plan is to work on a story treatment for Superman while making TSFOSM 3 and 4. Anything you want in it?

HexagonWorld wrote:

Okay, my plan is to work on a story treatment for Superman while making TSFOSM 3 and 4. Anything you want in it?

Krypto, no Zod and Superman deciding to just let his adopted father sacrifice himself for no reason

I had an idea for Hellblazer (the prequel novel to Constantine) but it might be to dark.

Hex how's your part of the Superman story going

Platypus_WKeyboard wrote:

I had an idea for Hellblazer (the prequel novel to Constantine) but it might be to dark.

Bump.

macandcheeseking wrote:

Hex how's your part of the Superman story going

I was about to ask that.

Act 1:

We open with a dream. A child being abandoned by their parents. Launched into the cold, unfeeling abyss of space. Clark Kent narrates over the dream. He's been having it for the past few days and he wonders. How could anyone do that? Abandon their child like that? Launch them in a rocket to die. Do they not care? He doesn't know why he's having this dream. He doesn't know who this child is. But one things for sure. He'll find this child. Whoever it is…

Cut to TITLE CARD: Superman and the City of Tomorrow

HexagonWorld wrote:

Act 1:

We open with a dream. A child being abandoned by their parents. Launched into the cold, unfeeling abyss of space. Clark Kent narrates over the dream. He's been having it for the past few days and he wonders. How could anyone do that? Abandon their child like that? Launch them in a rocket to die. Do they not care? He doesn't know why he's having this dream. He doesn't know who this child is. But one things for sure. He'll find this child. Whoever it is…

Cut to TITLE CARD: Superman and the City of Tomorrow

Like it so far.

I have no clue how to actually introduce Superman in a way that isn't super cliche like the one All-Star scene or the For All Seasons scene.

HexagonWorld wrote:

I have no clue how to actually introduce Superman in a way that isn't super cliche like the one All-Star scene or the For All Seasons scene.

Cliche is fine. Or introduce him in a scene that gets the audience to get his character quickly.

Platypus_WKeyboard wrote:

HexagonWorld wrote:

I have no clue how to actually introduce Superman in a way that isn't super cliche like the one All-Star scene or the For All Seasons scene.

Cliche is fine. Or introduce him in a scene that gets the audience to get his character quickly.

my brain defaults to have a crime and have citizens in tons of danger, and then Superman flies in and saves the day

Act 1:

We open with a dream. A child being abandoned by their parents. Launched into the cold, unfeeling abyss of space. Clark Kent narrates over the dream. He's been having it for the past few days and he wonders. How could anyone do that? Abandon their child like that? Launch them in a rocket to die. Do they not care? He doesn't know why he's having this dream. He doesn't know who this child is. But one thing's for sure. He'll find this child. Whoever it is…

Cut to TITLE CARD: Superman and the City of Tomorrow

POW! Superman gets punched by a purple fist, the fist of Parasite. He picks up the figure and throws him to the ground when suddenly, Bizarro pounces on him. Superman shakes him off as Livewire shoots a bolt of electricity at Parasite, giving him enough energy to get back up. The battle continues. Toyman, Atomic Skull, Silver Banshee, Microwave Man, all arrive just to give Superman a battle he'll never forget. Superman pushes through them, fighting no matter what, as he reaches exactly what he wanted the whole time. Or rather… who he wanted. A child. A small, scared child. He picks up the child, tells them it'll be okay, uses his superspeed to get her out of the way, then comes back. He turns around to see all these villains ready to pick up the fight. He smiles.

Daily Planet. The office is bustling with work. “KENT! KENT! Where is that man…” grumbles Perry White. “LANE! Do you know where Kent is?” Lois Lane. Pulitzer Prize winning investigative reporter, former army brat, terrible typist replies “No. Probably got captured by a supervillain again.” She gets a call from Jimmy Olsen, photographer. “Hello? Again? Alright. Oh, is Clark with you? They always put you in separate places, don't they. I'm on my way.” Perry sees Lois leave her desk. “Lane? Where are you going?” “Getting Jimmy. Bunch of villains are attacking Waid Hall, he got captured again.” Lois gets up, and rushes down the stairs. “Lane! LANE! WHEN YOU HEAR THERE'S DANGER, YOUR FIRST INSTINCT SHOULD NOT BE TO RUN TOWARDS THE DANGER! LAAAAAANNNNNEEEE!”

HexagonWorld wrote:

Act 1:

We open with a dream. A child being abandoned by their parents. Launched into the cold, unfeeling abyss of space. Clark Kent narrates over the dream. He's been having it for the past few days and he wonders. How could anyone do that? Abandon their child like that? Launch them in a rocket to die. Do they not care? He doesn't know why he's having this dream. He doesn't know who this child is. But one thing's for sure. He'll find this child. Whoever it is…

Cut to TITLE CARD: Superman and the City of Tomorrow

POW! Superman gets punched by a purple fist, the fist of Parasite. He picks up the figure and throws him to the ground when suddenly, Bizarro pounces on him. Superman shakes him off as Livewire shoots a bolt of electricity at Parasite, giving him enough energy to get back up. The battle continues. Toyman, Atomic Skull, Silver Banshee, Microwave Man, all arrive just to give Superman a battle he'll never forget. Superman pushes through them, fighting no matter what, as he reaches exactly what he wanted the whole time. Or rather… who he wanted. A child. A small, scared child. He picks up the child, tells them it'll be okay, uses his superspeed to get her out of the way, then comes back. He turns around to see all these villains ready to pick up the fight. He smiles.

Daily Planet. The office is bustling with work. “KENT! KENT! Where is that man…” grumbles Perry White. “LANE! Do you know where Kent is?” Lois Lane. Pulitzer Prize winning investigative reporter, former army brat, terrible typist replies “No. Probably got captured by a supervillain again.” She gets a call from Jimmy Olsen, photographer. “Hello? Again? Alright. Oh, is Clark with you? They always put you in separate places, don't they. I'm on my way.” Perry sees Lois leave her desk. “Lane? Where are you going?” “Getting Jimmy. Bunch of villains are attacking Waid Hall, he got captured again.” Lois gets up, and rushes down the stairs. “Lane! LANE! WHEN YOU HEAR THERE'S DANGER, YOUR FIRST INSTINCT SHOULD NOT BE TO RUN TOWARDS THE DANGER! LAAAAAANNNNNEEEE!”

Looking great so far!

HexagonWorld wrote:

Act 1:

We open with a dream. A child being abandoned by their parents. Launched into the cold, unfeeling abyss of space. Clark Kent narrates over the dream. He's been having it for the past few days and he wonders. How could anyone do that? Abandon their child like that? Launch them in a rocket to die. Do they not care? He doesn't know why he's having this dream. He doesn't know who this child is. But one thing's for sure. He'll find this child. Whoever it is…

Cut to TITLE CARD: Superman and the City of Tomorrow

POW! Superman gets punched by a purple fist, the fist of Parasite. He picks up the figure and throws him to the ground when suddenly, Bizarro pounces on him. Superman shakes him off as Livewire shoots a bolt of electricity at Parasite, giving him enough energy to get back up. The battle continues. Toyman, Atomic Skull, Silver Banshee, Microwave Man, all arrive just to give Superman a battle he'll never forget. Superman pushes through them, fighting no matter what, as he reaches exactly what he wanted the whole time. Or rather… who he wanted. A child. A small, scared child. He picks up the child, tells them it'll be okay, uses his superspeed to get her out of the way, then comes back. He turns around to see all these villains ready to pick up the fight. He smiles.

Daily Planet. The office is bustling with work. “KENT! KENT! Where is that man…” grumbles Perry White. “LANE! Do you know where Kent is?” Lois Lane. Pulitzer Prize winning investigative reporter, former army brat, terrible typist replies “No. Probably got captured by a supervillain again.” She gets a call from Jimmy Olsen, photographer. “Hello? Again? Alright. Oh, is Clark with you? They always put you in separate places, don't they. I'm on my way.” Perry sees Lois leave her desk. “Lane? Where are you going?” “Getting Jimmy. Bunch of villains are attacking Waid Hall, he got captured again.” Lois gets up, and rushes down the stairs. “Lane! LANE! WHEN YOU HEAR THERE'S DANGER, YOUR FIRST INSTINCT SHOULD NOT BE TO RUN TOWARDS THE DANGER! LAAAAAANNNNNEEEE!”

I Like it so far. keep going.

Uh… wait what does Sam Lane want besides freeing Metropolis and how is he getting it?

HexagonWorld wrote:

Uh… wait what does Sam Lane want besides freeing Metropolis and how is he getting it?

Hmm. Maybe he wants to prove how good of a general he is?

Platypus_WKeyboard wrote:

HexagonWorld wrote:

Uh… wait what does Sam Lane want besides freeing Metropolis and how is he getting it?

Hmm. Maybe he wants to prove how good of a general he is?

What gets Metropolis free and why do Lois and Clark have to go against him to free it in their own way?

HexagonWorld wrote:

Platypus_WKeyboard wrote:

HexagonWorld wrote:

Uh… wait what does Sam Lane want besides freeing Metropolis and how is he getting it?

Hmm. Maybe he wants to prove how good of a general he is?

What gets Metropolis free and why do Lois and Clark have to go against him to free it in their own way?

Because he's going way “militaristic” with it. Or something similar?

HexagonWorld wrote:

Platypus_WKeyboard wrote:

HexagonWorld wrote:

Uh… wait what does Sam Lane want besides freeing Metropolis and how is he getting it?

Hmm. Maybe he wants to prove how good of a general he is?

What gets Metropolis free and why do Lois and Clark have to go against him to free it in their own way?

Maybe he's being funded by Lex whose using the tech to free it in sketchy ways or something?

Platypus_WKeyboard wrote:

HexagonWorld wrote:

Platypus_WKeyboard wrote:

HexagonWorld wrote:

Uh… wait what does Sam Lane want besides freeing Metropolis and how is he getting it?

Hmm. Maybe he wants to prove how good of a general he is?

What gets Metropolis free and why do Lois and Clark have to go against him to free it in their own way?

Because he's going way “militaristic” with it. Or something similar?

He wants to nuke it with Kryptonian technology at the Fortress?