pixpickle wrote:

-StarryyEyed- wrote:

we're having that spring festival arc happening, i mean, but nO MEI AND CAVIN IS NOT A GOOD IDEA X'D MAYBE MEI SHOULD MEET MAUVE INSTEAD AND THEY ENTHUSE OVER BOOKS

Ok, now you've just made me intrigued to see what Mei & Cavin meeting would look like >:>

So, can we continue rping? I'm still VERY intrigued to see what Mei & Cavin would look like >:>

dear gods can we wait until i finish developing the man X'D

-StarryyEyed- wrote:

dear gods can we wait until i finish developing the man X'D

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pixpickle wrote:

-StarryyEyed- wrote:

dear gods can we wait until i finish developing the man X'D

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Ok, I'm very confused rn… >.<

nvm nvm is it your turn in the rp or mine?

-StarryyEyed- wrote:

nvm nvm is it your turn in the rp or mine?

Eh, idk… Let's just say it's my go, and we'll timeskip to the next day. Is that Ok? ^.~

okok, lemme TRY to balance @darkbear's characters. this is hard because they have so few traits so I'm basically developing them as well as balancing them. WISH ME LUCK MY DUDES

ORIGINAL
Darkbear: Age: 13 He's very mean,sadistic and sarcastic, but can show a more adorable tsundere/ kinder side.
Good: Age: 18 He's a very kind and caring person, he's also very shy. He can turn into a light demon (bottom right hand corner) when angry. He is developing a dark side………. He has a crush on Oka Ruto and is a ladies man (insert lenny).
Angelica: Age: 16 She is good's little sister and is very nice to people and very innocent. She is taking lessons on how to be a warrior. (hence the gun and the khopesh on her back) (she also has a crush on darkbear, she thinks he is kind.)
Emberly: Age 18: Angelica's evil sister and Evil's daughter. Basically Lil Tay, but she wants to conquer the universe.
Terminator: Age: 18: Good but he's not shy and no dark side and he's shreds' brother.
Shreds: Age: 26: Good and Angelica's dad. He is a warrior and is basically invincible. He's Very kind or caring. (used to be depressed, until he got engaged)
Yandere bot: Age: 18: THIIIIIIICCCCC She is shreds' lil sis and is evil's girlfriend. She is Yandere chan, but with emotions and guns.(side note: Oka she doesn't hate u as much now, she hates Natsuki and Monika More)
Evil/ Darth Shreds: Age: 26: Shreds but evil. More chill than most of the evil characters. (has a ramen addiction and a crush on yandere bot)
Evil: Age: Millions and millions of years old, but he appears 30. Look at his name.


Darkbear: Age: 13 He's very mean,sadistic and sarcastic, but can show a slightly kinder side- however, only to those he respects or really likes. (sort of like UF sans…? hope you know who UF sans is hehe) He's good at identifying when other people are lying, and just reading people in general. He's very humble, but sometimes to the point of being /too/ humble and having a low self esteem. He's surprisingly understanding if you come to him with your problems, but he warned: he might use them against you.
(is this supposed to represent you as a person, @fluffykitten04? if so, it's way off X'D you're not any of these things. but as a character he's thankfully got no “overused” or conflicting traits, he just didn't have enough good traits imo so I added a few. You might want to give him something he likes to do :3 also humans aren't bright red but you said he's human so i'll just.. read past that lol)

Good: Age: 18
He's a very kind and caring person, he's also very shy. He can turn into a light demon (bottom right hand corner) when angry. He has mostly female friends because he doesn't enjoy the testosterone-filled rambunctions tendencies of many of the males he knows.

(shy and ladies' man conflicts :3 ladies' men are typically very outgoing and charismatic, girls might find him adorable in a kawaii sense but he wouldn't be a ladies' man. you can change it to something else than what I put but ladies' man is not a good idea. also who's Oka Ruto??? and why does Good have a crush on them lol. Having a dark side is MEGA cliche and I suggest you let Good just be normal. also, who are Good's parents? Even if we don't know, we should at least know their abilities so we can see how genetics made Good's abilities. )

Angelica: Age: 16 She's generally kind and caring person, like Good, but nowhere near as shy. She's the most innocent and naiive of the bunch. She looks up to her older brother Good, who unintentionally taught her to be kind to people through his actions. She is taking lessons on how to be a warrior. (hence the gun and the khopesh on her back) She has a crush on Darkbear, and due to her naiivety she insists he's a good person on the inside and won't give up on him, even when he's given up on himself. Whether she's right, no one knows. She tries to help Darkbear with his problems, but he often tells her to go away.
(Who's teaching her how to be a warrior? And you should defo develop her relationship with her bro. are they both light demons? so now I assume Emberly, Angelica, and Good's shared parent is a demon, since they're all demons, but Emberly's a more evil demon, likely because of Evil.)

Emberly: Age 18: Evil's daughter and the sibling of Angelica and Good. (Well, half-sibling, I assume.) She's kind of like the kid who never got out of her edgy phase- she's the most fashionable goth/emo you've ever seen. She's very himedere and entitled. She considers all others below her and has a really bad superiority complex. She's confident and good at leading people, but not good at letting them contribute- she wants everything her way. Evil failed at raising her. She doesn't look up to her big brother and finds his and angelica's attempts to be kind stupid.

(i didn't know who lil tay was but i googled it and she's an insta star?? even if she's basically lil tay you should probably describe her for people who don't know who that is. i just guessed hahaha i have no idea what lil tay is like… also, if she's Angelica's evil sister (DON'T use this trope. Just don't, it's… it's not a good trope) then you have to dev her relationship with angelica AND subsequently her relationship with good :3 again you don't HAAAVE to but it'll make for better writing. Plus, conquering the universe is also very, very cliche, so I changed it to an extreme disdain, disrespect and disliking for the people around her. I wasn't sure if you wanted her to go full on antagonist, so I tried to keep her at least nuetral.)

Emberly's one of those characters who can never become balanced unless you changed some large chunk of them, so I tried to re-write her to be balanced. She's massively changed here, so keep that in mind.

Emberly v2: Evil's daughter and the sibling of Angelica and Good. (Well, half-sibling, I assume.) Whether it's Evil's influence or just the way she is, Emberly doesn't understand how Angelica (and Good, sorta) manage to be kind to everyone, ESPECIALLY Angelica's naiive tendency to believe everyone is good on the inside. Because of this, she holds a disdain for the two of them, and tries not to associate with them whenever possible. She spends all her time with friends/on social media instead of them, and has a love for fashion. She's much more realistic and rational than Angelica and Good, but she doesn't forgive people easily and can come accross as rude and occasionally entitled.

(om i can't make characters like this, this is like character boot camp. i spend like, months just editing sometimes.)

Terminator: Age: 22: Terminator is Shreds's younger brother and the uncle to Angelica and Good (and technically Emberly's half-uncle.) He enjoys visiting his niece and nephew (and half-niece, but emberly avoids him) with fun jokes and stories from his travels. he's not one to have kids on his own.

(Okay, this guy literally didn't have a personality, and I sure don't plan on creating one entirely from scratch right now X'D kind and caring is…. just… ehhh. that's not a personality!! Some fun ideas could be a jokester/ the fun uncle who likes doing fun things with angelica and good (and emberly, but she tries to get out of it..?). actually that's was my only idea so I wrote a lil something for that. and i changed his age a little to make him and shreds's siblingness better)

Shreds: Age: 26: Good and Angelica's dad. He is a seasoned war veteran and got married to . He was desperate for love at the time, as he was lonely from years of fighting with no one to talk to. Loves ramen.
(ANOTHER GUY WITH NO PERSONALITY BOI WHATCHU DOIN!???!!? again i can't balance a character if they don't have a personality so I just threw random stuff in there.)

Yandere bot: Age: 18: THIIIIIIICCCCC She is shreds' lil sis and is evil's girlfriend. She is Yandere chan, but with emotions and guns.(side note: Oka she doesn't hate u as much now, she hates Natsuki and Monika More)
(I didn't bother changing Yandere Bot since she's a fandom OC, and outside of AUs or MMORPG/ Large scale universe type things, fandom OCs are pretty much never balanced. and yandere simulator doesn't have a large scale modified universe, it's just a high school, so… yeah it's p much impossible. good luck with yandere bot lol)

Evil/ Darth Shreds: Age: 26: Shreds but evil. More chill than most of the evil characters. Loves ramen, just like shreds. Maybe it turns him back to shreds..?
(all the evil form tropes oOF. please explain how Evil Shreds becomes active, is this a curse laid on him by Evil or smth? like this needs backstory my dood)

Evil: Age: Millions and millions of years old, but he appears 30. Look at his name.
(WHAT. IS. HE. see general criticisms for more :3)

AIGHT SO GENERAL CRITICISMS
1. NO BACKSTORIES!!!!! A character needs a backstory to be 100% balanced!! Maybe Shreds had two kids with Angelica and Goods's absent mother, but some intense love fued happened where the mother cheated with Evil, having Emberly. Maybe the mother died and Shreds had to take in Emberly, but he never liked her as much as his other kids, giving Emberly her attitude in life…? again this is just my interpretation based on what I read.
2. WHO THE HECC IS ANGELICA/GOOD/EMBERLY'S MOTHER BOI AND IF SHE'S A MYSTERY YOU SHOULD DARN WELL SAY SHE'S A MYSTERY if it's yanderebot then hOW DOES THAT EVEN WORK SHE'S A ROBOT THO??? AND ISN'T SHREDS A ROBOT TOO LIKE BOI YOU GOTTA EXPLAIN STUFF
3. EXPLAIN STUFF. i kinda just said it, but so much is unexplained. What are the specieses of EVERYONE? How does their universe work? How do their genetics work? You gotta explain this kinda stuff, man.
4. EVERYONE NEEDS A PERSONALITY TOO!! SO many of your characters had no personality. like boi even if they don't have a backstory they gotta have a personality at LEAST. for example, bugs bunny/ tom and jerry / daffy duck / so many other golden cartoon characters have a very distinct personality and mannerism, and they didn't even need a backstory!! A good personality is super duper important!!
5. so why is Emberly the child of a eons-old ancient evil thing…? like is this a demigod situation where Evil is like Zeus and flirts with every other lady he meets? that would actually be so funny, and it would also add to Emberly being hypothetically disliked by Shreds, even more so now because she's the half-child of an evil spirit and hypothetically curses the household. i made Evil slightly flirtatious for this reason.

anyway, these guys could lead to some cool stuff but they're not there yet!! wheehehee.

thats long

-EtheralWolfie- wrote:

thats long

ahahaha, but how would I develop characters if I didn't write essays and essays on them–
i'm kidding, i'm known for writing too much in my school rip