ZLGames wrote:

-Anvard- wrote:

Username: -Anvard-
Link to project: -snop-
Harshness (How harsh should the review be?): Harsh, like really harsh.
Other Information: The resolution isn't all that great because I had to convert to bitmap to save as a .png.

Sorry in advance - this review may be a little shorter than my normal ones.

I have to say, I really like it. There are just a few minor things that I think could be improved, which I'll be listing below.

1) Keep your line thickness consistent. You do this for most of the piece, but not for the paddles. This creates a sort of disconnect between them and makes the paddles look completely separate from the rest of the boat. I would suggest making the thickness of the paddles a little bigger and the boat a little smaller until they both match.

2) This is very minor, but I think the red bit in the back should have a black line going around it. Everything else on the piece does, so I think it would look better if that did too. Also, the red is a bit too bright for the rest of the boat so maybe turn down the contrast.

3) The paddles don't really look like they are attached to the boat. This could be because of the first reason I listed, but also paddles usually have those little loop things on the top of the boat to hold them in place. They also seem pretty far down. If possible, I would suggest not having as much paddles (if there needs to be a specific number, maybe put half of them on the other side of the boat?) because it just looks really cramped and if this was an actual boat many of them probably wouldn't be usable because they're so close together.

4) The front of the boat looks sort of weird. For some reason, the eye (if that is an eye) seems like it's in the wrong place. And the horn part going up doesn't really make sense. I also don't understand what the two metal(?) rods going across is, and what the long piece at the bottom is supposed to be.

5) This might have happened when you converted it to bitmap, but the sail strings don't fully connect with the top mast of the boat. Also, the strings connecting the bottom of the bottom of the sail to the boat don't connect the boat in the same place.

6) I'm not completely sure about this, but I think that boat would need multiple sails (probably a taller mast or two or three masts instead of one of them) and also the mast usually goes higher than the sails (I think) with another one of those bars above where the highest sail is (sorry, I don't know boat anatomy ).

-Anvard- wrote:

1) The paddles were the last thing I added so I was a bit lazy on them.
2) It did seem a bit off to me.
3) So the idea was that it would be a galley, which gets its propulsion from a team of rowers, and it was most convenient to have the rowers be below decks with an officer relaying orders while having the sailors above decks manning the sails, steering, rigging etc. As for paddle amount, alright.
4) As galleys were built mainly for coastal transportation and battles the front of the boat was built for ramming hence the bar. The eye was often painted on as an intimidation tactic.
5) Yeah, I noticed that…
6) True, true. Once again, laziness struck.

When you open the editor to edit your art but you realise you forgot to undo the bitmap conversion before you ended the session. ;-;

ZLGames wrote:

-Anvard- wrote:

1) The paddles were the last thing I added so I was a bit lazy on them.
2) It did seem a bit off to me.
3) So the idea was that it would be a galley, which gets its propulsion from a team of rowers, and it was most convenient to have the rowers be below decks with an officer relaying orders while having the sailors above decks manning the sails, steering, rigging etc. As for paddle amount, alright.
4) As galleys were built mainly for coastal transportation and battles the front of the boat was built for ramming hence the bar. The eye was often painted on as an intimidation tactic.
5) Yeah, I noticed that…
6) True, true. Once again, laziness struck.

When you open the editor to edit your art but you realise you forgot to undo the bitmap conversion before you ended the session. ;-;

3) If the rowers are below deck shouldn't there be a hole or something so they could actually access the paddles? Also, I think there should still be something to hold them in place.
4) That's sort of what I was thinking, but I would think it would be at like a 45-degree angle and not 90?

That's happened to me. ;-;

-Anvard- wrote:

3) There's a hole. It's just very hard to see. xD
4) Tbh, I was taking inspiration from multiple pictures, and I liked the way the bar looked at a 90 or so degree angle rather than 45. I'm not exactly sure why, probably because it looked more like a face to me, (which wasn't really what I was going for but…eh.)

ZLGames wrote:

-Anvard- wrote:

3) There's a hole. It's just very hard to see. xD
4) Tbh, I was taking inspiration from multiple pictures, and I liked the way the bar looked at a 90 or so degree angle rather than 45. I'm not exactly sure why, probably because it looked more like a face to me, (which wasn't really what I was going for but…eh.)

3) Oh, now that I've noticed it the paddles look much better. I would make it black so it's easier to see, or just make the colour behind it a little bit lighter.
4) Alright, I think either way works.

-Anvard- wrote:

ZLGames wrote:

-Anvard- wrote:

3) There's a hole. It's just very hard to see. xD
4) Tbh, I was taking inspiration from multiple pictures, and I liked the way the bar looked at a 90 or so degree angle rather than 45. I'm not exactly sure why, probably because it looked more like a face to me, (which wasn't really what I was going for but…eh.)

3) Oh, now that I've noticed it the paddles look much better. I would make it black so it's easier to see, or just make the colour behind it a little bit lighter.
4) Alright, I think either way works.

Either way, I'm gonna have to go and redo the darn ship cuz I flubbed. I think it'll be better though, as this one was a little awkward.

rainbow_waves wrote:

-Anvard- wrote:

ZLGames wrote:

-Anvard- wrote:

3) There's a hole. It's just very hard to see. xD
4) Tbh, I was taking inspiration from multiple pictures, and I liked the way the bar looked at a 90 or so degree angle rather than 45. I'm not exactly sure why, probably because it looked more like a face to me, (which wasn't really what I was going for but…eh.)

3) Oh, now that I've noticed it the paddles look much better. I would make it black so it's easier to see, or just make the colour behind it a little bit lighter.
4) Alright, I think either way works.

Either way, I'm gonna have to go and redo the darn ship cuz I flubbed. I think it'll be better though, as this one was a little awkward.

Just revert the project. There's a button under ‘File’.

-Anvard- wrote:

rainbow_waves wrote:

-Anvard- wrote:

ZLGames wrote:

-Anvard- wrote:

3) There's a hole. It's just very hard to see. xD
4) Tbh, I was taking inspiration from multiple pictures, and I liked the way the bar looked at a 90 or so degree angle rather than 45. I'm not exactly sure why, probably because it looked more like a face to me, (which wasn't really what I was going for but…eh.)

3) Oh, now that I've noticed it the paddles look much better. I would make it black so it's easier to see, or just make the colour behind it a little bit lighter.
4) Alright, I think either way works.

Either way, I'm gonna have to go and redo the darn ship cuz I flubbed. I think it'll be better though, as this one was a little awkward.

Just revert the project. There's a button under ‘File’.

Ty!

rainbow_waves wrote:

-Anvard- wrote:

rainbow_waves wrote:

-Anvard- wrote:

ZLGames wrote:

-Anvard- wrote:

3) There's a hole. It's just very hard to see. xD
4) Tbh, I was taking inspiration from multiple pictures, and I liked the way the bar looked at a 90 or so degree angle rather than 45. I'm not exactly sure why, probably because it looked more like a face to me, (which wasn't really what I was going for but…eh.)

3) Oh, now that I've noticed it the paddles look much better. I would make it black so it's easier to see, or just make the colour behind it a little bit lighter.
4) Alright, I think either way works.

Either way, I'm gonna have to go and redo the darn ship cuz I flubbed. I think it'll be better though, as this one was a little awkward.

Just revert the project. There's a button under ‘File’.

Ty!

Did it work?

-Anvard- wrote:

rainbow_waves wrote:

-Anvard- wrote:

rainbow_waves wrote:

-Anvard- wrote:

ZLGames wrote:

-Anvard- wrote:

3) There's a hole. It's just very hard to see. xD
4) Tbh, I was taking inspiration from multiple pictures, and I liked the way the bar looked at a 90 or so degree angle rather than 45. I'm not exactly sure why, probably because it looked more like a face to me, (which wasn't really what I was going for but…eh.)

3) Oh, now that I've noticed it the paddles look much better. I would make it black so it's easier to see, or just make the colour behind it a little bit lighter.
4) Alright, I think either way works.

Either way, I'm gonna have to go and redo the darn ship cuz I flubbed. I think it'll be better though, as this one was a little awkward.

Just revert the project. There's a button under ‘File’.

Ty!

Did it work?

Haven't gotten a chance to try it yet, I had to go to piano.

PackersRuleGoPack wrote:

ZLGames wrote:

@Rosyda-

I think this is all you wanted, but if you want something to be added to make it more interesting I can do that.

Her order says lots of roses i think

Rosyda- wrote:

Uh, yes, I wanted lots of roses, thanks

ZLGames wrote:

Rosyda- wrote:

Uh, yes, I wanted lots of roses, thanks

Sorry! I'm not sure why I forgot to add them.

I've finished it, but for some reason, neither cubeupload or tinypic are letting me upload.

EDIT:

-Anvard- wrote:

It was probably too large.

ZLGames wrote:

-Anvard- wrote:

It was probably too large.

I didn't change the file at all though. I just tried like 30 times and it didn't work until the last one.