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- jadeaurorawolf
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A Beginner's Guide to RP's
um……. AMAZING! luckily, I don't have that problem!Here is my example of a HIGHLY detailed role play ( or act ) of a fox searching for food. *the marigold-colored fox carefully leapt at a hole with great balance and accuracy. She was trying to find a mouse. her brain thought where the meal could have gone. She buried her nose under rocks and tree stumps. The sunlight lit up her back side mean while, her front side was swallowed up by the darkness which seemed to be night but wasn't very quite. After a few tiring hours later, she had managed to capture a bugged-eyed -mouse with her broken claws that where somewhat white but dirty which caused the appearance to be more yellowish. After she strangled the helpless, cobalt- colored -mouse she ate it in tremendous gulps her fangs or teeth grew a bright, bloody red and soon disappeared shortly after she took a thin clean bone from the mouse's skin and cleaned her 3 inch fangs. Her teeth where almost clean but she didn't mind. She left the leftovers of the mouse behind and went back into her shaggy, dry, dusty, den.* Now here is a VERY POOR ROLE PLAY ( or act again, ): *The fox was searching for food it caught a mouse and ate it* BLAH TERRIBLE! Which rp or ( roleplay ) did you like best the highly detailed one, or very cheesy one?
- jadeaurorawolf
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52 posts
A Beginner's Guide to RP's
nietherum……. AMAZING! luckily, I don't have that problem!Here is my example of a HIGHLY detailed role play ( or act ) of a fox searching for food. *the marigold-colored fox carefully leapt at a hole with great balance and accuracy. She was trying to find a mouse. her brain thought where the meal could have gone. She buried her nose under rocks and tree stumps. The sunlight lit up her back side mean while, her front side was swallowed up by the darkness which seemed to be night but wasn't very quite. After a few tiring hours later, she had managed to capture a bugged-eyed -mouse with her broken claws that where somewhat white but dirty which caused the appearance to be more yellowish. After she strangled the helpless, cobalt- colored -mouse she ate it in tremendous gulps her fangs or teeth grew a bright, bloody red and soon disappeared shortly after she took a thin clean bone from the mouse's skin and cleaned her 3 inch fangs. Her teeth where almost clean but she didn't mind. She left the leftovers of the mouse behind and went back into her shaggy, dry, dusty, den.* Now here is a VERY POOR ROLE PLAY ( or act again, ): *The fox was searching for food it caught a mouse and ate it* BLAH TERRIBLE! Which rp or ( roleplay ) did you like best the highly detailed one, or very cheesy one?
- njtacogirl
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100+ posts
A Beginner's Guide to RP's
ummmmmmm what?nietherum……. AMAZING! luckily, I don't have that problem!Here is my example of a HIGHLY detailed role play ( or act ) of a fox searching for food. *the marigold-colored fox carefully leapt at a hole with great balance and accuracy. She was trying to find a mouse. her brain thought where the meal could have gone. She buried her nose under rocks and tree stumps. The sunlight lit up her back side mean while, her front side was swallowed up by the darkness which seemed to be night but wasn't very quite. After a few tiring hours later, she had managed to capture a bugged-eyed -mouse with her broken claws that where somewhat white but dirty which caused the appearance to be more yellowish. After she strangled the helpless, cobalt- colored -mouse she ate it in tremendous gulps her fangs or teeth grew a bright, bloody red and soon disappeared shortly after she took a thin clean bone from the mouse's skin and cleaned her 3 inch fangs. Her teeth where almost clean but she didn't mind. She left the leftovers of the mouse behind and went back into her shaggy, dry, dusty, den.* Now here is a VERY POOR ROLE PLAY ( or act again, ): *The fox was searching for food it caught a mouse and ate it* BLAH TERRIBLE! Which rp or ( roleplay ) did you like best the highly detailed one, or very cheesy one?
was that to much? I could make it shorter.
- delsin123
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12 posts
A Beginner's Guide to RP's
how are u??
Hey, I Dont Think This Is A Place To Talk At, Maybe Talk In A Studio Or A Project, Nobody Wants Constant Messages Appear Here.
- fateme10
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24 posts
A Beginner's Guide to RP's
I also want to talk about the project if you let
- fateme10
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24 posts
A Beginner's Guide to RP's
Will you allow me?
when I receive [ allow]
say [Question]
- delsin123
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12 posts
A Beginner's Guide to RP's
Will you allow me?when I receive [ allow]
say [Question]
[/quote]
Fine, But Then, You Both Talk Somewhere Else.:|
- ses_student37
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9 posts
A Beginner's Guide to RP's
how are u??
Hey, I Dont Think This Is A Place To Talk At, Maybe Talk In A Studio Or A Project, Nobody Wants Constant Messages Appear Here.
You don't have to be rude. (I don't think it is.) But this person might be a younger kid and take it as being mean.
- delsin123
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12 posts
A Beginner's Guide to RP's
when I receive [Permission]
say [Question Of Project]
- delsin123
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12 posts
A Beginner's Guide to RP's
Im Not Being Rude, Im Just Telling Them To Talk To Their Buddy Somewhere Once They Are Done, Not A Rude Comment At All.how are u??
Hey, I Dont Think This Is A Place To Talk At, Maybe Talk In A Studio Or A Project, Nobody Wants Constant Messages Appear Here.
You don't have to be rude. (I don't think it is.) But this person might be a younger kid and take it as being mean.
- dolphin_24
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1000+ posts
A Beginner's Guide to RP's
@Allofthesepeople
Please chat somewhere else!!
@delsin123
Thank you for saying that.
Please chat somewhere else!!
@delsin123
Thank you for saying that.
- Saiid
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1000+ posts
A Beginner's Guide to RP's
That's generally too detailed, as well as the fact that it does not fit in a comment box.ummmmmmm what?nietherum……. AMAZING! luckily, I don't have that problem!Here is my example of a HIGHLY detailed role play ( or act ) of a fox searching for food. *the marigold-colored fox carefully leapt at a hole with great balance and accuracy. She was trying to find a mouse. her brain thought where the meal could have gone. She buried her nose under rocks and tree stumps. The sunlight lit up her back side mean while, her front side was swallowed up by the darkness which seemed to be night but wasn't very quite. After a few tiring hours later, she had managed to capture a bugged-eyed -mouse with her broken claws that where somewhat white but dirty which caused the appearance to be more yellowish. After she strangled the helpless, cobalt- colored -mouse she ate it in tremendous gulps her fangs or teeth grew a bright, bloody red and soon disappeared shortly after she took a thin clean bone from the mouse's skin and cleaned her 3 inch fangs. Her teeth where almost clean but she didn't mind. She left the leftovers of the mouse behind and went back into her shaggy, dry, dusty, den.* Now here is a VERY POOR ROLE PLAY ( or act again, ): *The fox was searching for food it caught a mouse and ate it* BLAH TERRIBLE! Which rp or ( roleplay ) did you like best the highly detailed one, or very cheesy one?
was that to much? I could make it shorter.
Saiid
- njtacogirl
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100+ posts
A Beginner's Guide to RP's
. Great idea!how are u??
Hey, I Dont Think This Is A Place To Talk At, Maybe Talk In A Studio Or A Project, Nobody Wants Constant Messages Appear Here.
not much
- the_force
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1000+ posts
A Beginner's Guide to RP's
Can u also add this rp too https://scratch.mit.edu/discuss/topic/225991
- jadeaurorawolf
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52 posts
A Beginner's Guide to RP's
So many things to reply to! Lets see…
Marigold the fox carefully leaped into a mouse hole. Balancing herself perfectly. Where could that mouse have gone?She wondered . She buried her nose under the rocks and tree stumps. a few tiring hours later. She came back up a mouse clamped in her jaws. Its dirty but perfect for a meal! She thought. She strangled it. She ate it gulping it down!
What I Changed:
1. Short so it can fit in comment
2. fox has more character
3. less blood and gore
4. the readers don't throw up
https://scratch.mit.edu/discuss/topic/225991Are you advertizing? Can u also add this rp too
This is my version of yours:ummmmmmm what?nietherum……. AMAZING! luckily, I don't have that problem!Here is my example of a HIGHLY detailed role play ( or act ) of a fox searching for food. *the marigold-colored fox carefully leapt at a hole with great balance and accuracy. She was trying to find a mouse. her brain thought where the meal could have gone. She buried her nose under rocks and tree stumps. The sunlight lit up her back side mean while, her front side was swallowed up by the darkness which seemed to be night but wasn't very quite. After a few tiring hours later, she had managed to capture a bugged-eyed -mouse with her broken claws that where somewhat white but dirty which caused the appearance to be more yellowish. After she strangled the helpless, cobalt- colored -mouse she ate it in tremendous gulps her fangs or teeth grew a bright, bloody red and soon disappeared shortly after she took a thin clean bone from the mouse's skin and cleaned her 3 inch fangs. Her teeth where almost clean but she didn't mind. She left the leftovers of the mouse behind and went back into her shaggy, dry, dusty, den.* Now here is a VERY POOR ROLE PLAY ( or act again, ): *The fox was searching for food it caught a mouse and ate it* BLAH TERRIBLE! Which rp or ( roleplay ) did you like best the highly detailed one, or very cheesy one?
was that to much? I could make it shorter.
Marigold the fox carefully leaped into a mouse hole. Balancing herself perfectly. Where could that mouse have gone?She wondered . She buried her nose under the rocks and tree stumps. a few tiring hours later. She came back up a mouse clamped in her jaws. Its dirty but perfect for a meal! She thought. She strangled it. She ate it gulping it down!
What I Changed:
1. Short so it can fit in comment
2. fox has more character
3. less blood and gore
4. the readers don't throw up
- jadeaurorawolf
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52 posts
A Beginner's Guide to RP's
As you can see (Above) not the only problem!That's generally too detailed, as well as the fact that it does not fit in a comment box.ummmmmmm what?nietherum……. AMAZING! luckily, I don't have that problem!Here is my example of a HIGHLY detailed role play ( or act ) of a fox searching for food. *the marigold-colored fox carefully leapt at a hole with great balance and accuracy. She was trying to find a mouse. her brain thought where the meal could have gone. She buried her nose under rocks and tree stumps. The sunlight lit up her back side mean while, her front side was swallowed up by the darkness which seemed to be night but wasn't very quite. After a few tiring hours later, she had managed to capture a bugged-eyed -mouse with her broken claws that where somewhat white but dirty which caused the appearance to be more yellowish. After she strangled the helpless, cobalt- colored -mouse she ate it in tremendous gulps her fangs or teeth grew a bright, bloody red and soon disappeared shortly after she took a thin clean bone from the mouse's skin and cleaned her 3 inch fangs. Her teeth where almost clean but she didn't mind. She left the leftovers of the mouse behind and went back into her shaggy, dry, dusty, den.* Now here is a VERY POOR ROLE PLAY ( or act again, ): *The fox was searching for food it caught a mouse and ate it* BLAH TERRIBLE! Which rp or ( roleplay ) did you like best the highly detailed one, or very cheesy one?
was that to much? I could make it shorter.
Saiid
when I receive [Change v]
if <there is a problem> then <fix it with my writing skills!>
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- the_force
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1000+ posts
A Beginner's Guide to RP's
nope just telling him to add it to the front page
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