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jadeaurorawolf
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A Beginner's Guide to RP's

njtacogirl wrote:

AMAZING! luckily, I don't have that problem! Here is my example of a HIGHLY detailed role play ( or act ) of a fox searching for food. *the marigold-colored fox carefully leapt at a hole with great balance and accuracy. She was trying to find a mouse. her brain thought where the meal could have gone. She buried her nose under rocks and tree stumps. The sunlight lit up her back side mean while, her front side was swallowed up by the darkness which seemed to be night but wasn't very quite. After a few tiring hours later, she had managed to capture a bugged-eyed -mouse with her broken claws that where somewhat white but dirty which caused the appearance to be more yellowish. After she strangled the helpless, cobalt- colored -mouse she ate it in tremendous gulps her fangs or teeth grew a bright, bloody red and soon disappeared shortly after she took a thin clean bone from the mouse's skin and cleaned her 3 inch fangs. Her teeth where almost clean but she didn't mind. She left the leftovers of the mouse behind and went back into her shaggy, dry, dusty, den.* Now here is a VERY POOR ROLE PLAY ( or act again, ): *The fox was searching for food it caught a mouse and ate it* BLAH TERRIBLE! Which rp or ( roleplay ) did you like best the highly detailed one, or very cheesy one?
um…….
jadeaurorawolf
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A Beginner's Guide to RP's

jadeaurorawolf wrote:

njtacogirl wrote:

AMAZING! luckily, I don't have that problem! Here is my example of a HIGHLY detailed role play ( or act ) of a fox searching for food. *the marigold-colored fox carefully leapt at a hole with great balance and accuracy. She was trying to find a mouse. her brain thought where the meal could have gone. She buried her nose under rocks and tree stumps. The sunlight lit up her back side mean while, her front side was swallowed up by the darkness which seemed to be night but wasn't very quite. After a few tiring hours later, she had managed to capture a bugged-eyed -mouse with her broken claws that where somewhat white but dirty which caused the appearance to be more yellowish. After she strangled the helpless, cobalt- colored -mouse she ate it in tremendous gulps her fangs or teeth grew a bright, bloody red and soon disappeared shortly after she took a thin clean bone from the mouse's skin and cleaned her 3 inch fangs. Her teeth where almost clean but she didn't mind. She left the leftovers of the mouse behind and went back into her shaggy, dry, dusty, den.* Now here is a VERY POOR ROLE PLAY ( or act again, ): *The fox was searching for food it caught a mouse and ate it* BLAH TERRIBLE! Which rp or ( roleplay ) did you like best the highly detailed one, or very cheesy one?
um…….
niether
njtacogirl
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A Beginner's Guide to RP's

jadeaurorawolf wrote:

jadeaurorawolf wrote:

njtacogirl wrote:

AMAZING! luckily, I don't have that problem! Here is my example of a HIGHLY detailed role play ( or act ) of a fox searching for food. *the marigold-colored fox carefully leapt at a hole with great balance and accuracy. She was trying to find a mouse. her brain thought where the meal could have gone. She buried her nose under rocks and tree stumps. The sunlight lit up her back side mean while, her front side was swallowed up by the darkness which seemed to be night but wasn't very quite. After a few tiring hours later, she had managed to capture a bugged-eyed -mouse with her broken claws that where somewhat white but dirty which caused the appearance to be more yellowish. After she strangled the helpless, cobalt- colored -mouse she ate it in tremendous gulps her fangs or teeth grew a bright, bloody red and soon disappeared shortly after she took a thin clean bone from the mouse's skin and cleaned her 3 inch fangs. Her teeth where almost clean but she didn't mind. She left the leftovers of the mouse behind and went back into her shaggy, dry, dusty, den.* Now here is a VERY POOR ROLE PLAY ( or act again, ): *The fox was searching for food it caught a mouse and ate it* BLAH TERRIBLE! Which rp or ( roleplay ) did you like best the highly detailed one, or very cheesy one?
um…….
niether
ummmmmmm what?
was that to much? I could make it shorter.
fateme10
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A Beginner's Guide to RP's

hi
njtacogirl
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fateme10 wrote:

hi
Hiiii
fateme10
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how are u??
delsin123
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A Beginner's Guide to RP's

fateme10 wrote:

how are u??

Hey, I Dont Think This Is A Place To Talk At, Maybe Talk In A Studio Or A Project, Nobody Wants Constant Messages Appear Here.
fateme10
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A Beginner's Guide to RP's

I also want to talk about the project if you let
fateme10
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Will you allow me?
when I receive [ allow]
say [Question]
delsin123
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fateme10 wrote:

Will you allow me?
when I receive [ allow]
say [Question]
[/quote]
Fine, But Then, You Both Talk Somewhere Else.:|
ses_student37
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delsin123 wrote:

fateme10 wrote:

how are u??

Hey, I Dont Think This Is A Place To Talk At, Maybe Talk In A Studio Or A Project, Nobody Wants Constant Messages Appear Here.

You don't have to be rude. (I don't think it is.) But this person might be a younger kid and take it as being mean.
delsin123
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when I receive [Permission]
say [Question Of Project]
delsin123
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ses_student37 wrote:

delsin123 wrote:

fateme10 wrote:

how are u??

Hey, I Dont Think This Is A Place To Talk At, Maybe Talk In A Studio Or A Project, Nobody Wants Constant Messages Appear Here.

You don't have to be rude. (I don't think it is.) But this person might be a younger kid and take it as being mean.
Im Not Being Rude, Im Just Telling Them To Talk To Their Buddy Somewhere Once They Are Done, Not A Rude Comment At All.
dolphin_24
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@Allofthesepeople

Please chat somewhere else!!

@delsin123
Thank you for saying that.
Saiid
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A Beginner's Guide to RP's

njtacogirl wrote:

jadeaurorawolf wrote:

jadeaurorawolf wrote:

njtacogirl wrote:

AMAZING! luckily, I don't have that problem! Here is my example of a HIGHLY detailed role play ( or act ) of a fox searching for food. *the marigold-colored fox carefully leapt at a hole with great balance and accuracy. She was trying to find a mouse. her brain thought where the meal could have gone. She buried her nose under rocks and tree stumps. The sunlight lit up her back side mean while, her front side was swallowed up by the darkness which seemed to be night but wasn't very quite. After a few tiring hours later, she had managed to capture a bugged-eyed -mouse with her broken claws that where somewhat white but dirty which caused the appearance to be more yellowish. After she strangled the helpless, cobalt- colored -mouse she ate it in tremendous gulps her fangs or teeth grew a bright, bloody red and soon disappeared shortly after she took a thin clean bone from the mouse's skin and cleaned her 3 inch fangs. Her teeth where almost clean but she didn't mind. She left the leftovers of the mouse behind and went back into her shaggy, dry, dusty, den.* Now here is a VERY POOR ROLE PLAY ( or act again, ): *The fox was searching for food it caught a mouse and ate it* BLAH TERRIBLE! Which rp or ( roleplay ) did you like best the highly detailed one, or very cheesy one?
um…….
niether
ummmmmmm what?
was that to much? I could make it shorter.
That's generally too detailed, as well as the fact that it does not fit in a comment box.

Saiid
njtacogirl
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delsin123 wrote:

fateme10 wrote:

how are u??

Hey, I Dont Think This Is A Place To Talk At, Maybe Talk In A Studio Or A Project, Nobody Wants Constant Messages Appear Here.
. Great idea!
not much
the_force
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jadeaurorawolf
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A Beginner's Guide to RP's

So many things to reply to! Lets see…

the_force wrote:

Can u also add this rp too https://scratch.mit.edu/discuss/topic/225991
Are you advertizing?

njtacogirl wrote:

jadeaurorawolf wrote:

jadeaurorawolf wrote:

njtacogirl wrote:

AMAZING! luckily, I don't have that problem! Here is my example of a HIGHLY detailed role play ( or act ) of a fox searching for food. *the marigold-colored fox carefully leapt at a hole with great balance and accuracy. She was trying to find a mouse. her brain thought where the meal could have gone. She buried her nose under rocks and tree stumps. The sunlight lit up her back side mean while, her front side was swallowed up by the darkness which seemed to be night but wasn't very quite. After a few tiring hours later, she had managed to capture a bugged-eyed -mouse with her broken claws that where somewhat white but dirty which caused the appearance to be more yellowish. After she strangled the helpless, cobalt- colored -mouse she ate it in tremendous gulps her fangs or teeth grew a bright, bloody red and soon disappeared shortly after she took a thin clean bone from the mouse's skin and cleaned her 3 inch fangs. Her teeth where almost clean but she didn't mind. She left the leftovers of the mouse behind and went back into her shaggy, dry, dusty, den.* Now here is a VERY POOR ROLE PLAY ( or act again, ): *The fox was searching for food it caught a mouse and ate it* BLAH TERRIBLE! Which rp or ( roleplay ) did you like best the highly detailed one, or very cheesy one?
um…….
niether
ummmmmmm what?
was that to much? I could make it shorter.
This is my version of yours:
Marigold the fox carefully leaped into a mouse hole. Balancing herself perfectly. Where could that mouse have gone?She wondered . She buried her nose under the rocks and tree stumps. a few tiring hours later. She came back up a mouse clamped in her jaws. Its dirty but perfect for a meal! She thought. She strangled it. She ate it gulping it down!
What I Changed:
1. Short so it can fit in comment
2. fox has more character
3. less blood and gore
4. the readers don't throw up


jadeaurorawolf
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A Beginner's Guide to RP's

Saiid wrote:

njtacogirl wrote:

jadeaurorawolf wrote:

jadeaurorawolf wrote:

njtacogirl wrote:

AMAZING! luckily, I don't have that problem! Here is my example of a HIGHLY detailed role play ( or act ) of a fox searching for food. *the marigold-colored fox carefully leapt at a hole with great balance and accuracy. She was trying to find a mouse. her brain thought where the meal could have gone. She buried her nose under rocks and tree stumps. The sunlight lit up her back side mean while, her front side was swallowed up by the darkness which seemed to be night but wasn't very quite. After a few tiring hours later, she had managed to capture a bugged-eyed -mouse with her broken claws that where somewhat white but dirty which caused the appearance to be more yellowish. After she strangled the helpless, cobalt- colored -mouse she ate it in tremendous gulps her fangs or teeth grew a bright, bloody red and soon disappeared shortly after she took a thin clean bone from the mouse's skin and cleaned her 3 inch fangs. Her teeth where almost clean but she didn't mind. She left the leftovers of the mouse behind and went back into her shaggy, dry, dusty, den.* Now here is a VERY POOR ROLE PLAY ( or act again, ): *The fox was searching for food it caught a mouse and ate it* BLAH TERRIBLE! Which rp or ( roleplay ) did you like best the highly detailed one, or very cheesy one?
um…….
niether
ummmmmmm what?
was that to much? I could make it shorter.
That's generally too detailed, as well as the fact that it does not fit in a comment box.

Saiid
As you can see (Above) not the only problem!
when I receive [Change v]
if <there is a problem> then <fix it with my writing skills!>

end
the_force
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nope just telling him to add it to the front page

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